[原创]TWE053，下周末就要考试了，各位ＮＮ帮帮忙

三脚猫

In contemporary society, the views to the relation between working and money largely differ among people. Some consider that working is the process to realize a person’s value, money just being the attachment, but others in contrast, take the money as the sole object of working. For my part, I take the view that the money a person earns is the most important aspect of a job. My arguments for this propensity are listed as follows.

One of the most crucial reasons for this view is that the money a person earns can almost represent a person’s other aspects, including his education, value, capability or experiences. Furthermore in nowadays, it gradually becomes the main tendency that the more outstanding a person is, the more money he earns. So the income is as important as, if not more important than, other elements in a person’s life. Examples in the case can be obtained easily. One of my schoolmates graduating from a famous university, hold the post at the Microsoft Company as a leader of Financial Department. As a successful man, he receives a high payment and is admired by many people. Otherwise, one of my friends living in the rural cannot supply himself by his own earnings and is often neglected by others.

Another essential factor for my propensity is that only with money can a person freely do things he likes to do. It is hardly to imagine that if without sufficient money, how can we build our warm family, even not mention to go to travel. Extremely, without money, even the simplest willing cannot come true. In the poor areas in our country, many children cannot go to school, for having no money to pay for textbooks.

Admittedly, as we pay much attention to the money a person earns, we cannot deny the importance of other aspects in working, such as communication with workmates, or the satisfaction after realizing selves’ value. However compared with the money, they are at the second place.

From all the arguments mentioned above, it is not difficult to conclude that I believe that the money a person earns is the most important aspect of a job.

marshial

以下是引用三脚猫在2004-8-14 0:41:00的发言：

In contemporary society, the views to the relation between working and money largely differ among people. Some consider that working is the process to realize a person’s value, money just being the attachment(byproduct), but others ,in contrast, take the money as the sole object of working. For my part, I take the view that the money a person earns is the most important aspect of a job. My arguments for this propensity are listed as follows.

One of the most crucial reasons for this view is that the money a person earns can almost represent a person’s other aspects, including his education, value( values), capability or experiences. Furthermore in nowadays( nowadays), it gradually becomes the main tendency that the more outstanding a person is, the more money he earns. So the income is as important as, if not more important than, other elements in a person’s life. Examples in the case can be obtained easily. One of my schoolmates graduating from a famous university, hold the post at the Microsoft Company as a leader of Financial Department. As a successful man, he receives a high payment and is admired by many people. Otherwise, one of my friends living in the rural cannot supply himself by his own earnings and is often neglected by others.

Another essential factor for my propensity is that only with money can a person freely do things he likes to do. It is hardly to imagine that if without sufficient money, how can we build our warm family, (此处是不是用正常语序？）even not mention to go to travel. Extremely, without money, even the simplest willing cannot come true. In the poor areas in our country, many children cannot go to school, for having no money to pay for textbooks.

Admittedly, as we pay much attention to the money a person earns, we cannot deny the importance of other aspects in working, such as communication with workmates, or the satisfaction after realizing selves’ value. However compared with the money, they are at the second place.

From all the arguments mentioned above, it is not difficult to conclude that I believe that the money a person earns is the most important aspect of a job.

写这么多，很不容易，我是写不出来这么多的！！感觉模板味道太重。而且，有点片面追求句式变化，读起来不太爽。个人意见：在表达清楚的前提下，可稍做变化，如果为变化而变化只能招致读者理解上的“别扭”。

[此贴子已经被作者于2004-8-14 14:21:17编辑过]

pengstone

以下是引用三脚猫在2004-8-14 0:41:00的发言：

In contemporary society, the views to the relation between working and money largely differ among people. Some consider that working is (consider working as)the process to realize a person’s value, money just being the attachment, but others in contrast, take the money as the sole object (aspect)of working. For my part, I take the view that the money a person earns is the most important aspect of a job. My arguments for this propensity are listed as follows.

One of the most crucial reasons for this view is that the money a person earns can almost represent a person’s other aspects, including his education, value, capability or experiences. Furthermore in (多余)nowadays, it gradually becomes the main tendency that the more outstanding a person is, the more money he earns. So the income is as important as, if not more important than, other elements in a person’s life(多余). Examples in the case can be obtained easily. One of my schoolmates graduating from a famous university, hold the post at the Microsoft Company as a leader of Financial Department(one of my schoolmates graduated from... and hold a position in...as the leader of...). As a successful man, he receives a high payment and is admired by many people. Otherwise(on comparison), one of my friends living in the rural cannot supply himself (can barely sustain his living)by his own earnings and is often neglected by others.

Another essential factor for my propensity is that only with money can a person freely do things he likes to do. It is hardly to imagine that if without sufficient money, how can we build our warm family, even not mention to go to travel(how we can build our warm family without sifficient money, not to mention going to travel). Extremely(多余), without money, even the simplest willing cannot come true. In the poor areas in our country, many children cannot go to school, for having no money to pay for textbooks.

Admittedly, as we pay (while paying)much attention to the money a person earns, we cannot deny the importance of other aspects in working, such as (the)communication with workmates, or the satisfaction after realizing selves’ (their own)value. However compared with the money, they are at the second place.

From all the arguments mentioned above, it is not difficult to conclude that I believe that (多余)the money a person earns is the most important aspect of a job.

三脚猫

多谢各位的意见。模版使用问题的确很头痛。

三脚猫

下一篇就试着不用模版，不过，马上要考试了，恐怕来不及