第一次练AA 求指教！！！~

Yicecream

JJ9原题32 The following appeared in the editorial section of a West Cambria newspaper.

“A recent review of the West Cambria volunteer ambulance service revealed a longer average response time to accidents than was reported by a commercial ambulance squad located in East Cambria.
In order to provide better patient care for accident victims and to raise revenue for our town by collecting service fees for ambulance use,
we should disband our volunteer service and hire a commercial ambulance service.”

Yicecream

In this argument, the author suggests that West Cambria disband volunteer ambulance service and hire commercial ambulance service in order to increase revenue and provide better patient care for accident victims. To justify this conclusion, the author reasons that this change would raise revenue by collecting service fees for ambulance use. Another line of reasoning is that commercial ambulance service would provide better care because its average response time was shorter than that of volunteer ambulance service. While this argument is rather plausible, it suffers from several flaws as follow.

In the first place, the argument is falsely based on the gratuitous assumption that the average response time to accidents is the only factor that influence the patient care. However, no evidence is stated in this argument to support this assumption. There are many other factors that would also have influence on the service quality, such as emergency equipment, ambulance crew's working attitude and efficiency, etc.. Therefore, without ruling out such possibilities, it is groundless to conclude that hiring commercial service would lead to a rise in revenue.

In the second place, the author commits a fallacy of false analogy. He erroneously assumes that all the conditions in West and East Cambria are similar. However, this assumption is highly suspect, since the discrepancies between the two locations clearly outweigh their similarities. For example, the traffic conditions in West Cambria are far worse than that in the east part, thus making the west average response time longer. Unless the arguer also takes this factor into consideration, the conclusion based upon it is unconvincing.

Finally, the author assumes that the commercial ambulance service in East Cambria is typical of all commercial ambulance services, as a group. However, one example is rarely sufficient to establish a general conclusion. The fact that the commercial ambulance service in East Cambria has a higher average response time than the volunteer service in West Cambia does not suffice to prove the claim that this will be the case for all commercial ambulance services. In fact, in face of such limited evidence, it is fallacious to draw any conclusion at all.

To sum up, the argument is weak. To solidify this argument, the author should provide more specific evidence to demonstrate that his suggestion would have the intended effect. In addition, the author would have to rule out the above-mentioned possibilities that would undermine his claim.

Yicecream

in the second place 那段，归为“错误类比”行得通吗？是不是有点奇怪啊？
求指点！！！~

Yicecream

我的模板痕迹是不是还是太重了？

Yicecream

首段我是看了范文的，这种是不是唯一的写法？
还是也可以有其他切入点？