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[求助]偶在挤牙膏, TWE-161

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楼主
发表于 2004-7-29 17:05:00 | 只看该作者

[求助]偶在挤牙膏, TWE-161

why people remember special gifts.   list your reasons and examples.


实在想不出什么理由.  简直是废话, 不特殊我能记得住嘛.  偶的脑子又不是电脑.


大家最好狠狠的批.  还有观点, 实在想不出.  


根据stone 的意见, 做了一些改动, 不过自己不是很满意, 改得不够好.  


Why people are more likely to recollect those special gifts or presents they received? This question seems to be somewhat tricky or funny. Some people may present a simple answer that if those gifts are not special they cannot be remembered Others may firmly contend that people recall special presents because they are tied to cherished memories. Still other may claim that gifts are memorable for their values, quality or usefulness. Since people give priority to different factors, this question actually defies any unified conclusion. In my opinion, people are disposed to bear in mind those special gifts for three kinds of reasons.






To begin with, people tend to remember special gifts or presents because such items are always associated with certain critical period of time or important life experiences.  (改为closely associated with certain critical period of time or important life experiences, those special gifts or presents appear to be more meaningful than the common ones.) Take my old bicycle—one of my birthday presents I received when I was ten years old--as an example. It played an indispenable role in virtually all the important outdoor activities during my adolescent years. I went to school by bike every day. In vacations, my friends and I used it as the main vehicle for sight-seeing and shopping.  As a matter of fact, it was really an important part of my life. Even if it is now rather rusty and has little practical use, I still keep it because it is always linked with the rosy memories in my school years. Gifts from friends serve as another striking example. Those hand-made birthday cards and decorative items are reminders of the happy time that my friends and I shared.





Secondly, some special gifts are memorable because (改成for, 问改成on the ground that 是不是不好. 感觉on the ground that 的shades of meaning 是基于某种原因,  大家怎么想, 还是我多想了?) they possess the “magic power” to bring our mind back to the special or significant occasions. Wedding presents and gifts for university graduation generally belong to this type. Because those occasions are rather rare and far-reaching in one’s life, it is natural that people will bear in mind presents for those occasions.  





In addition, people are more likely to recall their special gifts because it is those gifts that always remind them of the present-givers. For instance, many women wear jewels, such as rings, necklaces or brackets, some of which are rather old-fashioned. It is not that they cannot afford to purchase the newly fashioned ones but that those jewels are precious gifts from their beloved ones—husbands, parents or close friends. By wearing them and seeing them every day, they can always feel the deep love or friendship.






Last, some gifts or presents are special because they are valuable or very useful. And people remember them just for their value or their practicability. A dictionary or an encyclopedia for a student, a set of tools for a technician, or a dish-washer for a housewife usually falls into this kind.






In final analysis, because of the above stated reasons, which may interweave into an organic whole and become more compelling, I am fully convinced that people remember special presents for either their tangible or intangible values.



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沙发
发表于 2004-7-29 19:45:00 | 只看该作者

楼主功底浓厚 PFPF

一点建议 主体论述部分的每段开头句的句式有重复之嫌 均为  .... because....

这个题目的确很搞人 很无聊 能写出上述理由已是相当不易

板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2004-7-29 20:21:00 | 只看该作者

谢谢, stone.  这个烂题目真的很无聊.  

嗯, 等我改改.  的确重复.

地板
发表于 2004-7-29 22:00:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用bryony在2004-7-29 17:05:00的发言:

............


To begin with, people tend to remember special gifts or presents because such items are always associated with certain critical period of time or important life experiences.  (改为closely associated with certain critical period of time or important life experiences, those special gifts or presents appear to be more meaningful than the common ones.)


提着一些建议


个人认为 开头连着用两个分词短语 对整句的结构有影响 改成这样如何


To begin with, special gifts or presents usually are associated with certain critical period or important life experiences, making them far more meaningful than other ordinary ones.















5#
发表于 2004-7-29 22:08:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用bryony在2004-7-29 17:05:00的发言:




Secondly, some special gifts are memorable because (改成for, 问改成on the ground that 是不是不好. 感觉on the ground that 的shades of meaning 是基于某种原因,  大家怎么想, 还是我多想了?) they possess the “magic power” to bring our mind back to the special or significant occasions.




接着提

on the ground of  的确不太好  或许这样改

Secondly, some special gifts are memorable because of their "magic power" of  bringing our mind back to .......



6#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-7-29 22:42:00 | 只看该作者

非常感谢. 接受, 就这么定了.   


特别是第一个改动,  改了以后强调的重点分明.  我那个分句主次有点颠倒.   


stone 的英文果然厉害,  有没虾米诀窍?



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7#
发表于 2004-7-29 23:30:00 | 只看该作者
看了stone的修改,确实不错。学习学习。。
8#
发表于 2005-10-14 21:57:00 | 只看该作者

厉害!厉害!!

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