A148，女校，望拍

大剑Jade

这篇攻击点不太好找，不知大家意见如何？
提纲：
1.调查样本问题
2.调查对象回答是否公正。
3.保留女生传统与学生士气以及女校友的资助是否呈因果关系。
148. The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.


This argument is well presented but far-fetched. It lays a recommendation that Grove College should preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education instead of admitting men into its programs. Nevertheless, this recommendation is in effect definitely impractical due to several flaws after a close scrutiny, albeit it may appear plausible at a cursory glance.
First off, a threshold problem comes into being that the author assumes the survey is wide enough. He certainly thinks that the opinions of eighty percent of students as well as over half of the alumnae could represent all thoughts in this school. However, this assumption is open to a number of interpretations. We would never know if the survey is narrow in its scope because, say, merely 50 percent of students are questioned. In this case, only 40 percent students of this school are inquired, and this situation could happen on the alumnae as well. Because they might be the minority in this school, their opinions are not representative at all. Thus, without accounting for as well as ruling out other likely scenarios, by no means could the author `
Moreover, even though the author might be able to provide evidence for us to deduce a solution to the problem presented above afterwards—such as evidence of enough number of students and alumnae in this survey—this argument still maintains ill-conceived. Another problem could be located that the author assumes the students and alumnae questioned in the survey are impartial for sure. But this isn’t proved because it’s totally possible that the students just want to keep their classmates to be female so that it might be convenient for them to bully rookies, for example. They might not even notice the panorama of the development of this school. To corroborate his point, the author should pay a close heed to as well as cope with the representative possibilities mentioned before. Only then could he bolster his recommendation.
Ultimately, even if the foregoing problems might turn out to be supported by ensuing evidence, a crucial problem remains that the author presumes that keeping the college all females could improve the students’ morale and convince the alumnae to keep supporting the college financially. But this doesn’t make sense for a lack of evidence that this could happen. In this light, it’s reasonable to cast doubts upon the author’s presumption which I reject as inadequate. For instance, the students may find it comfortable to study without males but the morale will not be lifted since the morale is merely related to the ambiance of the school. The alumnae should keep their financial supports whether the school accepts males or not. In a word, there’s no cause-effect relationship in this contention. Pursuing this line of reasoning, it proves to be the author’s responsibility to mull over his assumption so as to pave the way for a more tenable argument.
In retrospect, the author seems precipitous to jump to the conclusion based on a series of problematic premises. To dismiss the specter of implausibility of his recommendation, the author ought to come to grips with the problems mentioned above. Only by grasping the gist of this argument could the author put forward a convincible recommendation. After all, feckless attempts with a fallible method could be nothing but a fool’s errand.
550words,29min

冷月钟笛

已拍过~ :-)

大剑Jade

嗯嗯~~回了一个建议，嘿嘿，因为觉得你现在并没有完全利用好自己的优势。

冷月钟笛

嗯嗯？什么意思？是在对我说吗？

冷月钟笛

哦 看到啦~ (*^__^*) 嘻嘻

冷月钟笛

的确需要更好的把能挖掘的潜力都挖掘出来啊~ 谢谢大剑啊

jasonliu119

http://forum.chasedream.com/GRE_Prep/thread-600119-1-1.html 求拍
我觉得你的文章没什么问题了，不过我想请教一下，你对Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions 的看法，还有你是怎么体现这个要求的？谢谢

大剑Jade

Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions这个就是要找出assumption在整篇文章的关系了。我的做法就是找出assumption，之后阐述assumption带来的后果和缺陷。这样和文章的关系不就一目了然了么

ppguo

看到大家积极互拍，真是无比感动啊。
拍别人，其实是可以为自己攒人品的，呵呵。

jasonliu119

我觉得你的做法是写出了assumption“负”的方面，也就是题目what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted的要求。但是，对于之前我提出的那个要求，是不是要写出assumption成立后的“正”的方面呢？不过感觉这个方面都写出来的话，文章长而略显啰嗦