第一次写argument，求鉴定 打分~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~·

394903699

make it convincing, the auguer would have to provide more evidence concering the corresponding relationship between the tv program and the art museum. he also have to rule out other causes of the increase in the attendancy at the museum. to better evaluate the argument, we need more accurate information

Tobelogical

条理满清晰的，语法错误也不多，我觉得打分应该在5分左右。