【求助】OG sc 105

Vanaron

105. Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully
coordinating them with her narratives, capitalized on
her keen observation and love of the natural world.
(A) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully
coordinating them with her narratives,
(B) In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating
them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
(C) In her book illustrations, which she carefully
coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
(D) Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix
Potter, in her book illustrations
(E) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully
coordinated them with her narratives and


This sentence awkwardly presents two phrases
intended to modify Beatrix Potter and loses the
clarity and logic of the meaning. In the original
sentence, these modifi ers sound choppy and
create too much separation between the subject,
Beatrix Potter, and the verb capitalized. Beginning
the sentence with In her book illustrations and
following that phrase with the relative clause
which she carefully coordinated with her narratives
allows the subject, Beatrix Potter, to be united
with the verb, capitalized, for a stronger main
clause.
A Th e participial phrase does not clearly
modify the noun in the preceding phrase;
use of the present progressive form of the
verb confuses the sequence of time with
respect to the past tense of the main verb
capitalized.
B Phrase carefully coordinating … illogically
modifi es the noun that immediately
precedes it: book illustrations; Potter, not the
illustrations, did the coordinating.
C Correct. Th e correct placement of the
modifying elements makes this sentence
easier to understand; the use of which clearly
links the two elements.
D Carefully coordinated … absurdly modifi es
Beatrix Potter rather than her illustrations.
E Th e participial phrase does not clearly
modify book illustrations; the relationships
among the parts of the sentence are unclear.
Th e correct answer is C.

OG里面的解释看了不是很明白。我觉得B选项，把In her book illustrations这个介宾短语不看，下面carefully coordinating them with her narratives的主语不是应该就是Beatrix Potter吗？我觉得这样不是要比C简洁。。
为什么上面红字的地方说它的主语是book illustrations？
求解释，，谢谢了

chasingM7

我觉得啊。。不确定。B中的carefully coordinating them with her narratives是一个dangling modifier,可以向前也可以向后。

然后还有一个个人觉得，B中两个短语都是修饰Beatrix Potter的，而两个修饰语都在主语前，不是特别好。好一点的表达是把2个修饰放在主语前后，或者把一个变为另一个的附属。就比如C做的。。

我觉得挺难的。。。。。。不太确定。

VeraSui

同意楼上的观点~

Vanaron

是这样麽？可是OG的解释是说不加which的时候修饰的是前面的illustration，，为什么呢

弗拉多

LZ你的不看B选项的in her illustration，后面确实如你所说是对的....
问题就是加了In her illustration之后，修饰语就不知道是谁的了，可能是illustration，也可能是B
原因就是illustration后面就是修饰语，引起了歧义

Vanaron

哦~了解 谢谢！