GWD-3-Q33为什么选C不选E（未看到之前有关于C的解答）

estilada

GWD3-Q33
Almost a decade after New York State passed laws to protect patients by reducing the grueling hours worked by medical residents, twelve hospitals have been investigated by state medical officials, finding that all twelve consistently break the laws, many residents work longer than 24 hours straight, and that more than half the surgical residents work more than 95 hours a week.



A.twelve hospitals have been investigated by state medical officials, finding that all twelve consistently break the laws, many residents work longer than 24 hours straight, and that more than half the surgical residents work



B.an investigation by state medical officials of twelve hospitals have found all twelve consistently breaking the laws, that many residents work longer than 24 hours straight, with more than half the surgical residents working



C.an investigation of twelve hospitals by state medical officials has found that all twelve consistently break the laws, that many residents work longer than 24 hours straight, and that more than half the surgical residents work



D.twelve hospitals were investigated by state medical officials who found all twelve breaking the laws, with many residents working longer than 24 hours straight, and more than half the surgical residents work



E.an investigation by state medical officials has found that, of twelve hospitals, all twelve consistently break the laws, that many residents work longer than 24 hours straight, with more than half the surgical residents working

看完答案读着感觉C会更通顺，但不明白E的语法有什么问题，所以请教下，谢谢

2008115061

E: 1. of twleve, all twleve:    this is wordy; the phrase "all twelve" alone would be concise and good-looking

   2. "with" seems to modify residents illogically. According to the sentence, "more than half the surgical residents working" is independent.

    3. the comma following "that" is unnecessary.

estilada

E: 1. of twleve, all twleve:    this is wordy; the phrase "all twelve" alone would be concise and good-looking

   2. "with" seems to modify residents illogically. According to the sentence, "more than half the surgical residents working" is independent.

    3. the comma following "that" is unnecessary.

-- by 会员 2008115061 (2010/8/23 17:10:30)

明白了，如果有with就会令more than half the surgical residents working是去修饰前面一句与文中本意不符，同时that，后可以直接加从句不必多加逗号，对么？
谢谢！

wangxiwei

E的错误在并列的最后一个并列前面必须加and之类的连词
你看c 在最后一个并列前加了 and
而E that many residents work longer ...这是最后一个并列的句子了单前面无and之类表示并列结束的连词 呵呵 希望能够帮助到你

mongmong

E的错误在并列的最后一个并列前面必须加and之类的连词
你看c 在最后一个并列前加了 and
而E that many residents work longer ...这是最后一个并列的句子了单前面无and之类表示并列结束的连词 呵呵 希望能够帮助到你

-- by 会员 wangxiwei (2010/8/23 17:54:19)

嗯，有道理！！

mongmong

E: 1. of twleve, all twleve:    this is wordy; the phrase "all twelve" alone would be concise and good-looking

   2. "with" seems to modify residents illogically. According to the sentence, "more than half the surgical residents working" is independent.

    3. the comma following "that" is unnecessary.

-- by 会员 2008115061 (2010/8/23 17:10:30)

有道理

lala974

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