求高人为小弟的第一篇独立写作指导打分 TPO1 感谢

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Quetion:At universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
求打分与指导，万分感谢。。。

The growing importance of school record and courses attended in the university let many people neglect another essential activity------sports. So as to acquire an intensely bright job and future career, many students incline to spend all time studying without any outdoor activities. However,studying isn't the only significant element of a person's quality but also sports.Contrary to many people's ideas is my advocate that university should allocate the same amount of financial support to sport facilities and activities.


Firstly,sports help to exercise students and make their body stronger and healthier. Most sports involve the process of runningrepetitively which has a noticable effect to reduce unnecessary fat stored in our body. We may cite playing soccer as an example. Players are supposed to run through a huge playground to obtain an opportunity to score. They should also have the ability of cooperation and the method to avoid the interruption of opponents. These actions are greatly advantageous for students' muscles. Similarly in ball games like tennis, players need to wave arms to hit the ball back at an exact point and currenly exercies their arm muscles. A healthier body is also beneficial for concentration on studying due to the reason that students can avert the problems brought by absense caused by illness.


Furthermore, doing sports is also an amazingly effective way for students to attain the ability of cooperation. Virtually all of the sports include cooperation between 2 or even more people. Like what I have mentioned, in the soccer game, one player without cooperation cannot even have one chance to shoot the door under the protection of about 10 competitors from the other team. Conversely, when players can share the opportunity to the one who can take the greatest advantage of it in a particular situation, this team is unsurpassable. Students can utilize this spirit in studying or doing project.When several people pursue the same objective with cooperation----assign a specific task to the most proper person, they would definitely find their work be done more effectively and more effeiciently than ever before.


Additionally, sports and social activities are good souces of relaxation. After a long day work, students would better do these activities to clear up mind and mood which will result in higher efficiency in later studying.


As what I've stated, universities have the responsibility to support sports ardently to make the benefits widespread among students such as higher concentration and more effective work. Therefore the whole teaching quality can be advanced.



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