请教 OG178

海海

178. In the last few years, the number of convicted criminals given community service sentences, which allow the criminals to remain unconfined while they perform specific jobs benefiting the public, have risen dramatically.
(A) sentences, which allow the criminals to remain unconfined while they perform specific jobs benefiting the public, have
(B) sentences, performing specific jobs that benefit the public while being allowed to remain unconfined, have
(C) sentences, performing specific jobs beneficial to the public while they are allowed to remain unconfined, have
(D) sentences which allow them to remain unconfined in their performing of specific jobs beneficial to the public has
(E) sentences allowing them to remain unconfined while performing specific jobs that benefit the public has


key: E.
The explanation says D is wrong because in their performing is wordy and imprecise.  

To me, while performing in E is no better than in their performing in D.

Can someone shed some light on this question?

xiaoyue45084508

in their performing
有performance做名词形式，为什么要用 performing 的动名词呢？
while performing 是强调动作，在该用动词形式表达清晰准确的时候，改用名词来表达，ETS认为是笨拙的。注意体会本句的逻辑意思。

欧阳可情

小月说的对，名词形式优先于动名词．
是不是也可以理解成ＷＨＩＣＨ不能指代ＳＥＮＴＥＮＣＥＳ啊？我就钻到这里面了．

海海

Thanks for the explanations. But I am still not illuminated.

晓晓

以下是引用xiaoyue45084508在2004-1-11 16:33:00的发言：
in their performing
有performance做名词形式，为什么要用 performing 的动名词呢？
  while performing 是强调动作，在该用动词形式表达清晰准确的时候，改用名词来表达，ETS认为是笨拙的。注意体会本句的逻辑意思。

同意，而且用remain unconfined in their  performing...这样的表达方式似乎有点歧义的感觉哦，原文应该是在强调“在...的时候”，用动名词在语法理论上好像没有破绽，但是实际上整体语感和结构就不对了，有点累赘

shiningstar

新东方老师讲课的时候也说过，能用名词的不用动名词，比如the declining of sth.就是错的，应为the decline of sth.

advantage

可是好像有题the rising of the moon那个rising 确不能改成rise

cg

以下是引用advantage在2005-6-26 19:29:00的发言：

可是好像有题the rising of the moon那个rising 确不能改成rise

说的是OG Q150吧

150. In the mid-1960's a newly installed radar warning system mistook the rising of the moon as a massive missile attack by the Soviets.

(A)  rising of the moon as a massive missile attack by the Soviets

(B)   rising of the moon for a massive Soviet missile attack

(C)  moon rising to a massive missile attack by the Soviets

(D)  moon as it was rising for a massive Soviet missile attack

(E)   rise of the moon as a massive Soviet missile attack     (B)

补各帖  http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?BoardID=23&ID=66899

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-7-29 21:35:54编辑过]

vler

以下是引用欧阳可情在2004-1-11 17:19:00的发言：
小月说的对，名词形式优先于动名词．
是不是也可以理解成ＷＨＩＣＨ不能指代ＳＥＮＴＥＮＣＥＳ啊？我就钻到这里面了．

178. In the last few years, the number of convicted criminals given community service sentences, which allow the criminals to remain unconfined while they perform specific jobs benefiting the public, have risen dramatically.
(A) sentences, which allow the criminals to remain unconfined while they perform specific jobs benefiting the public, have
(B) sentences, performing specific jobs that benefit the public while being allowed to remain unconfined, have
(C) sentences, performing specific jobs beneficial to the public while they are allowed to remain unconfined, have
(D) sentences which allow them to remain unconfined in their performing of specific jobs beneficial to the public has
(E) sentences allowing them to remain unconfined while performing specific jobs that benefit the public has


key: E.

我觉得这里的given community service sentences是说特定的sentences，而d中which前面没有逗号，即为限定性修饰，如果用which就有歧义说所有的sentences都会allow them to remain unconfined in their performing of specific jobs

淡蓝色的回忆

请问这个 (E) sentences allowing them to remain unconfined while performing specific jobs that benefit the public has

  中的allowing them to remain unconfined while performing specific jobs that benefit the public has， 是限定性修饰，还是非限定性修饰？