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题目：该不该禁止针对小孩子（2－5岁）的电视广告

第二个论点是小孩子不应该花很长时间看电视，自己感觉有点跑。但是是第一次写作文，用了30分钟，短时间内想不出其他的论点，请教大家。顺便把作文贴上来，请高人指点：）尤其是论证方式是不是很有力，有没有在说空话。

Should we support the idea that advertises for kids from 2-yeas old to 5-year old should be forbiden?Different people would have different idea due to their distinct perspective,background or experience.In my opinion,I would support the idea that the ads for kids should not appear on TV.The reasons for my choice are as follows.

First of all,a little kids should not have the idea that the goods,lots of them is not necessary for our daily life,are the most important things in their life.When the ads is going to tell the information and encourage people to buy the production they made,it will made a impression to the kids that they will be happy and be loved by their parents only if they have such tools,foods and so forth.It may exert a influence to a kids and they will ignore the other precious things in their life,the love of their parents,the enjoyment that appreciating the beauty of the nature and the happiness with the family.Such influence will do harm to the growth of a kids.

Secondly,a little kids should not spend so much time on TV.If we encourage the ads for children,we at same time agree with the idea that the children should be encouraged to watch TV very often.As we know,It is a important period for a kids who is 2 to 5 years old to develop their intelligence and physical ability.They should do more exercise outdoor to build a strong body or learn new things as many as possible by the direction of the parents,but not watching TV all day along.Apparently,If we just let out children to watch TV,it will not only do harm to their body but also to their eyesight badly.

Meanwhile,I don’t want to deny the advantage brought by ads.The ads could broaden the eyesight of a kids,and they could know more about the world.At the same time,it is attractive to a young kids.

Form all the argument mentioned above,It is not defficult to conclude that ads for kids should be forbiden.It will benefit all of the kids in our country,they will have a healthy personal value in the future.