版主，NN们看过来，如此写作文行不行？

laipiyu

像下面所贴的这篇文章，没有去论证，而是直接提供了解决方法，会不会不符合GMAC的要求？虽然也是三段式。

还有，是不是举的例子太少了，但是如果限时写的话，我只能写这么多了。

AI 39

Are a professional success and a personal life a either-or choice and is there no a

balance for them?  The answer is apparently "no". Admittedly, for some people, they

achieve their professional successes by sacrificing their personal lives. But it is not

necessarily the case that everyone who want to achieve his professional success must

sacrifice his personal life. Answers for the following questions might be good

indicators.

First, how do you work to achieve your professional success? Smart or hard? Some people

do sacrifice their personal lives to achieve a professional success because they choose

to work hard, not smart. However, we know lots of examples that tell us that a

professional successor do not need to sacrifice his personal life, such examples as ex

-president Bill Clinton, the richest man Bill Gates, and the most famous basketball

player Michael Jodan. They all work smart to save lots of time and then to spend

saving-time with their families.

Second, does your work define the person you want to be? If so, you must have been very

tired and you will not have any sense of belonging. Try to define such a person by

yourself, and once you did so, you will enjoy your job and become more efficient.

Efficiency also means that you will have more time to devote your hobbies.

Third, how do you arrange your activities? There are some good ways to arrange your

activities, such as eliminating some unnecessary activities and adding those necessary

activities, combining professional activities with personal activities, and

prioritizing your activities. After you do so, your schedule will be not so much busy,

and you will obtain a professional and personal life's success.

In conclusion, a person does not have to sacrifice his personal life to achieve a

professional success. Work smart, define by yourself not by the work a person you want

to be, and arrange your activities efficiently would help you build a successful work-

life balance.

rio

文体倒是问题不大

但是字数太少了

论证可以在深入和具体一点

laipiyu

谢谢rio！！

需要勤练打字了。