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题目：电视是否破坏了人们之间的交流

Television is always regarded as one of the greatest inventions since the last century. It has a significant impact on the world's attitudes towards things as well as information exchange. However some argue that television has destroyed our communication with our family and friends, as people nowadays spend less time to share with their friends and family. Although it sounds persuasive, I think it is not completely true.

First of all, as the population is always increasing, the world is becoming much more competitive. Everyone has to pace up to make full use of every second. In order to accomplish their heavy work task, spare time which should be spent with family and friends has to be cut. Therefore in my opinion, the main reason why people are decreasing time everyday with relatives and friends is not television but the fast speed of daily life. I have or admit that some people are addicted to TV and tend to be far away from their nearest friends, however, I believe this is just some exceptionals which can not tell the dominate trend of the whole society.

On the contrary, televisions have provided us much new information to discuss with our closest friends in a sense. For instance, many ladies enjoy discussing the newest soap opera on TV in leisure which has given a common topic as well as brought them numerous chances to get to know more new friends. Hence I believe TV has improved our relationship with our friends and can even bring us more new friends,

Last but not the least, according to a recent research which has sent out 2000qustionaires, the happiest time a family spent with each other is when all the family members sit on sofa, watching TV, and talk happily. Even though this can only show the perspectives of some of the 2000 people who participated in the research, it can definitely show that many people agree with the idea that TV has done a really good job in relaxing their family relationship, which also bring everybody lots of happiness.

In brief, it is not surprising to find out that TV is a great invention that has always given us a lot of laughters. In spite of some of the disadvantages such as the addiction to it, I think its advantages weighout its disadvantages. Therefore, I contend that TV has ruined our communication with others.

janemei

I read your essay. It is good, but not American style. I've been USA for 10 years. I've never heart that TV can relax family relationship. You can say TV can build up family relationship.
secondly, your conclusion has a problem. You don't have to remind people about TV's disadvantage, you only need to focus on your main opinion or attitude.

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