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The most recent nationwide surveys show that undergraduates choose their major field primarily based on their perception of job prospects in that field. At our university, economics is now the most popular major, so students must perceive this field as having the best job prospects. Therefore, we can increase our enrollment if we focus our advertising and recruiting on publicizing the accomplishments of our best-known economics professors and the success of our economics graduates in finding employment.~

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In this arguement.the arguer concludes that Argent university can increases it`s enrollmwnt if it focus it`s advertising and recuiting on publicizing the accomplishments of it`s best-known economics professors and the successof it`s economics graduates it finding employment.To support his conclosion,the arguer cites the result of the most recent nationwide surveys:undergraduates choose their majir field primarily based on their perception of job prospects in that field.In addition,the arguer point out that economics is now the most popular majoy in  the Argent university,so students must perceive this field as having the best job prospects. the arguement is flawed in two critical aspects.

In the first place,the result of the survey is insufficient to support the conclusion.the arguer provides no evidences to prove the validity of the survey.We don not know any detail about the survey.

In the second place,the arguer unwarrantly assume that students  must perceive this field as having the best job prospects because  economics is now the most popular major in  the Argent university.the arguer fail to provide evidences to establish the causal relationship between the popular majoy and the best job prospects.

In the third place,the validity of  the method of focusing advertising and recuiting on publicizing the accomplishments of it`s best-known economics professors and the successof it`s economics graduates it finding employment is open to doubt.No evidences  support that accomplishments of   best-known economics professors is relevent to the increasing enrollment.

In conclusion,the arguer fail to demonstrate his conclusion that  Argent university can increases it`s enrollmwnt if it focus it`s advertising and recuiting on publicizing the accomplishments of it`s best-known economics professors and the successof it`s economics graduates it finding employment.To strength his conclusion,the arguer would have have to provide more evidences to prove
economics do have the best job propects.