[讨论]能不能帮我看看

charlotte606

作文一直是很差很差的。。。大家能不能帮我看看。。应该在哪方面改善。。。谢谢拉

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People controvert about whether advertise can tell audience a lot about a country. With mine own opinion, advertisement indeed can tell multi-aspect of a country.

  First, advertisement can tell people over the culture and custom of a country. Cultures and customs vary according the religions, histories, and environments of different countries. The purpose of an advertisement is attracting the audience and give an impression of the commodity, of course, the advertisement must cooperate with the culture and custom of the major people in the country. Thus contain and style of a advertisement varied according the different country. Such as in Japan, an advertisement of a beer can be a scene with a lady wearing kimono brings the beer. Meanwhile, the same commodity would be brought by a cowboy riding on a horse in the west of America. When people see these advertisement, they will know that different cultures of diverse countries.

 Secondly, enjoying advertisement of a country, we will know a requirement of commodity that people in this country concerned about, even aspect of life they concerned. As we know, the commodity in the advertisement is given to the people in a specific country. If a company wants catch the attention of the potential consumer, they would emphasize the feature of the commodity that decides the people purchase
                behavior. Such as, an advertisement of SONY player in Japan, it emphasize the quality of the production, while, in China did the price of it. As the reason, Japan people concern about quality of a stuff, while Chinese pay more attention to the price.

  Finally, advertisement can also fine the method to express art in a country. An advertisement could accepted by people of a particular country, perhaps could no in another country. And a good advertisement reflects the art spirit of a country. There is a typical advertisement in China. A child finished a bottle of Guanming beverage and licked the bottle of the beverage, expressing the delicious of the beverage. This advertisement granted various prize in China about advertisement. In an international competition about advertisement, however, the audiences and experts from world wield countries can not understand what the advertisement expressed.

  In a nutshell, I think advertise can tell you a lot about a country, such the culture, custom, the concern of people, and the method to express.

leepee

我觉得首段应该strongthen，毕竟首段对于考试来说很重要

好有，偶 confuse 你such as 的用法

charlotte606

是吗？第一段要长一些？谢谢拉