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Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree or disagree? The evaluation of the teachers(这里可以有两种理解:一是对teacher的评价,二是teacher的评价.这里用the evaluation on teachers就可以避免理解的偏差) is always a nightmare for me(按照常理,学生一般是喜欢评价老师的,这里用nightmare这样的词汇,似乎是夸张了点). I have to face to dozens of vague questions, such as 'what do you think of the instructor?' or 'How is the course?' Neither were the standards provided, nor explanation can be found(写得好,写得好). The options are even more confused(应该是confusing, confused是用来形容人的感受的) - I totally have no idea what (is) the difference between 'very good' and 'excellent'. The only thing I could do is turn to the student around me for a(a在这里是多于的) help. But the feedback brought nothing but (a) shock to me. The result of the option (on) which I was hesitating whether to chose 'very good' or 'excellent' appeared 'bad' on the evaluation sheet of the girl's!(这里是什么意思呀?你的evaluation和the girl’s有什么关系?) She(she又是谁?如果这里用she,那么the girl’s就应该是a girl’s,但是你的evaluation还是和a girl没有什么关系?我完全不知道在这里你要表达什么意思) complained that the assignments were too hazardous(hazardous是对身心都构成危险,这里这么使用似乎不太好) to her, and she hoped that the administrators of the college would urge the professor to lessen(alleviate) the difficulty (level) of this curriculum(curriculum是指整个课程,这里建议用course). 'I don't care about the content of this course, I just need an 'A' to benefit my grading,' she claimed. (你这个故事前面还是清楚,后面我就不知所云了.你开始一直在说你自己,后面怎么又变成了另外一个girl?我真的是很confused呀.同时claim这样的词汇要慎用,因为claim是在公共场合很正式的宣称,这里似乎不合适.) Totally confused How can this kind of evaluation be used (utilized) to judge the lecturers? I kept thinking about this question(这两个句子可以合并为一个:How, I am wondering, can this kind of evaluation be utilized to judge our lecturers?). Because of its unscientific method of data gathering, it seems that no one was really benefited(这里直接可以说benefit from) from these meaningless sheets(问卷调查:questionnaires). There is no doubt(这里也可以说:As no doubt) that the teachers were unfairly treated through this kind of measuring. Each student has his/her own standard, and no one can guarantee they are all reasonable (and rational). Besides, no instructions were provided to guide the youth to be unbiased. The only result of this evaluation was the teachers' efforts are(前面你用的was,后面却是are,一个句子里边的时态最好一致,同时,我觉得用was是没有必要的,就用is就可以了) completely(在不适当的地方使用不适当的词汇会使你的文章看起来很武断,这样给阅卷人的印象其实是很不好的.因为老师的努力是不可能被完全忽视的,所以这里只能用to some degree/extent) neglected and their tiny(minor) mistakes are incredibly(首先,incredible是个informal的词汇,其次,just as mentioned,这里太绝对了,最好用,in some cases) magnified. This can be seen form the girl’s judgment: the interesting explanation and the abundant case study which fascinated me were all ignored; instead, the difficult homework covered all the virtues(这个写得好) of his lecture. (一旦你提到那个girl,我又confused了) Neither(因为你前面已经用了一次neither了,所以这里可以用Nor替代避免重复) can the students get a profit form it. The only thing that they will learn from this activity is the teachers should cater to them, or they will give bad remarks to hurt(hurt似乎不是太合适吧,这里我也没有想好该用那个词) the instructors' reputation. I believe the girl must felt(feel) quit(fairly) pleasant that she can drive the professor into somewhat embarrassed situation, and force him to arrange the course as her wish. Of course, the managers of the college will obtain the artificial images of the teaching condition, and thus they can not estimate the value of their staff precisely. (of course,是一个插入成分,但是往往把它放在句末的效果比句首好) I can still remember the irony feedback of the evaluation I mentioned above. Two weeks after the day which nearly drove me mad, the professor was criticized by the dean, but not punished. The reason was the result of the evaluation showed that the midterm examination was too difficult and had not reflected what was taught in the class, but, in fact, the test would be held on the next week.(构思是很很很很很好!)
全文的表意没有大问题,就是有的东西太绝对,而且你的例子是单方面的,同时还是缺乏信服力.
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发表于 2007-5-27 10:12:00
主要是正反都想不到实例。顺便提提，这个是真事哦，给各位美好的大学生活幻想泼点冷水，呵呵
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