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027 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People may all like to do things that they enjoy doing. However, sometimes we should do things that we do not like, which is mainly because the economical pressure, long-term benefits for oneself and thinking for others.

First of all, many people struggle to bear the things they dislike, when faced economical pressure. For instance, farmers who do not gain enough money merely from the field, go to advanced cities, such as Guangzhou or Shanghai, to make more money to pay for the school fees for the children. The jobs in the city are tiring and exhausting, which they could never enjoy. However, if they did not do such heavy labor jobs, their children would not have rights to go to high school or entering colleges.

Furthermore, some boring things may be benefit for us in long term. Take sports as an example, hardly can somebody like to run 800 meters every day, especially in hot summers or cold winters. But when considering long term health for ourselves, amounts of people take this exercise every day. Always putting ourselves in a comfortable condition to enjoy the life, we may have a horrible future. 

Finally, if we want to be a polite person and think for others, occasionally we need to do some things we are not willing to. When I was a fresh man in college, people in my dormitory all enjoyed singing at night to express our happiness or sadness, rather than keeping quiet. But in a few days, we realized that it may offend other people's sleep, so keeping quiet at night was a rule in my dormitory from then on. 

As a conclusion, doing interesting things is enjoyable to us, but undertaking boring and tiring things may be demonstrate we are growing up to take economical pressure, think about long term benefit and think for others.

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027 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People may all like to do things that they enjoy doing. However, sometimes we should do things that we do not like.There are numerous factors affecting your desire to do what you would like to do, such as the economical pressure, long-term benefits for oneself and thinking for others.

 

Many people struggle to bear the things they dislike, when exposure to economical pressure. For instance, money  merely gained  from the field cannot satisfy the farmers’needs , , so they rush to advanced cities, like Guangzhou or Shanghai, in order to make more money  Although the jobs in the city are tiring and exhausting,they have to  pay for the school fees for the children. If they did not do such heavy labor jobs, their children would not have rights to go to high school or enter colleges.

 

On the other hand, some boring things may be beneficial to  us in the long term. Take sports as an example, hardly can somebody desire  to run 800 meters every day, especially in hot summers or cold winters. But when considering long term health for ourselves, amounts of people take this exercise every day.In fact, putting ourselves in a comfortable condition to enjoy  life, we may have a horrible future.

 

Finally, if we want to be a polite person and think for others,  we need to do some things we are not willing to do. When I was a fresh man in college, people in my dormitory all enjoyed singing at night to express their happiness or sadness,. But in a few days, they  realized that it may bother others, so keeping quiet at night was a rule in my dormitory from then on.

 

As a conclusion, doing interesting things is enjoyable to us, but undertaking boring and tiring things may  indicate that we are growing up to take economical pressure, think about long- term benefit and think for others.

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