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16 It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do

you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

 

 

 

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The issue of whether a new restaurant should be built in my neighborhood is a significative yet controversial one since different people hold different opinions. There are some people who think that a new restaurant could bring us convenience. On the other hand, others might worry about trouble that it would make. However when it comes to me, I definitely regard this plan as a beneficial decision. In the following dicussion, I will reason and provide evidence to support my view.

 

In the first place, the most important reason is that a new restaurant would bring prosperity to our community. I live in a small town where there are few commercial facilities and most people find their jobs and career outside. When a new restaurant is built up, many people here will find a job in the restaurant. As people's income increases, they will be able to spend more money on their lives. Also, a new restaurant will attract more tourists and more consumption in ouir town, which would enhance our town's economy.

 

In addition, a new restaurant will bring convenience to me and my neighborhood. Consider, for example, if we are busy at work and don't have time to make food at home, we can have meals in that restaurant. Or numbers of friends come to you, but your home is too small to accept so many people. You don't need to drive all of them to downtown of the city,instead you can take them to restaurant to eat and play together.

 

Admittedly, it is true that a newrestaurant would make more pollution and noise to our neighborhood. I think no one would want to see drunk people wandering in front of our house and shouting aloudly; also no one would want to see the dirty water that the restaurant emit to our rivers. Nonetheless, these problems do not constitute a sufficient oppose for this plan, since its disadvantagies outweigh benefit.

 

In sum, I concede that there would be some protential harm that a new restaurant would take. However, to some extent, I strongly support to build a new restaurant in our community since it can bring us many benefits that I mentioned above.

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20 It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

 

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The issue of whether children should grow up in the countryside or in a big city is a significative yet controversial one since different people hold different opioions on it not only because their respective background but also due to their alien understandings. When it comes to me, I would defintely regard growing up in a big city as a better choice. In the following discussion, I would reason and provide evidence to support my view.

 

In the first place, the most important reason is involved with the higher civilization level of big cities. Indisputably, cities are the signal of civilization. In big cities, children could have former and professional education, which play a significant role in bringring up a child. And children could get better medical care than in countryside, therefore they can be healthier and have to better and strong body when they grow up.

 

In addition, another important reason why I tend to choose big cities is that big cities can give children a diverse life. There are much more extracurricular activities in schools of big cities, therefore children have the opportunity to learn a variety of knowledge which can not gain from books. In cities, there are also a pretty number of culture facilities, such as museums, theaters, zoos and so on. Visiting these places, a child could have a better understanding of our world, not only the one at present, but also the world in the past.

 

Adimittedly, it is true that there are less polution and noise in countryside which might have bad concequences on the health of children. Also, in the countryside a child can enjoy a much life which is much closer to nature world. Nonetheless, these do not contribute a sufficient support to let children to grow up in countryside, since the disadvantages outweigh benefit and I hold the confidence that our government can handle those pollution and noise problems in big cities.

 

In sum, I concede that countryside have a certain of advantages. However, comparing both the good and bad aspects of the two chioce, I consider big cities as better places for children to grow up. In the final analysis, the optimal approach, in my view, is a balanced one that let children live and attend schools in big cities and come to countryside to relax in the weekend.