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发表于 2006-12-3 21:23:00 | 只看该作者

今天又写了一篇,请大家都提点意见

今天又写了一篇,请大家都提点意见,语言是否简单了?理由是不是显得没有逻辑性?。。。。

It is evitable that we all grow old.One time we are young and enjoy the love from our spouse and maybe from the new born baby,but another time our children grow up and we are getting old.As to the issue that which stage of a person's life is more enjoyable.Differnt people have different opinions according to their educational background,personal experience and their own culture.When it comes to me,I strong agree that young people enjoy life better thant the older people.I take this view on account of the following reasons.

Physically,most youngsters are much more healthier than the older ones.One's body is just like a continuously working machine.When we get old, some parts of it such as an organic or a specific system may go wrong after many years of nonstop working.For example,our eyesight will become poorer and our teeth can be loosened.On the contrary, young people tend to be in good health.They are not haunted with the health problem and have more time to enjoy their life.

Another point is that young people are more energetic,thus having more chances to take part in differnt activities,attend more events and do more life planning.My father used to be a backetball palyer.In his most active days,he took part in backetball games at least once a week and won lots of championship.Now,however,he cannot do any fierce sports activeitiey and feels tired after  just a 10 minutes' walk,not to mention returning to the backetball field.This case is not rere.People are afraid of growing old because of the disappearance of their vigor.

Furthermore,young people tend to be more adapted to the new environment.Our world is so changeable that what is fashionable today may be outdated tomorrow.Young people like new things and always try to follow the newest fashion while the old are often stubborn and unwilling to do any change in their life.Even if they want to, their capabilities are so limited that they are actually  deprived of the chances to  enjoy the conrrent fashions such as surfing the internet,sending short messeges to friends by a cellphone and so on.

Certainly,older people have more life experiences that provide them better methods to handle  some problems in their life than the young.However,according to above resons,I still stand for the opnion that the youth enjoy their life better than their father generaion.They are more healthier,more energetic and more adapted to the new things.

沙发
发表于 2006-12-3 22:02:00 | 只看该作者
感觉楼主写的挺好的:)哈哈
大概有一些小问题,建议楼主留5分钟检查就能在提高两分,rere(rare)  backetball(basketball)  还有一些单复数的问题 就肯定能避免了
champion 好像就可以了吧  championship好像更多用于复数 锦标赛的意思
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