[求助]急问，PS的问题

fengkunliu

我打算申请商学院的PhD，

今天已经10月12号了，申请材料还是没准备完，PS&CV都还没开始写，一边工作，一边申请好累啊。

美国那边有个认识的教授今天也催我了，说得赶快把申请材料准备好了。

我现在是没有时间，听说PS要反复修改几个星期，而很多学校的第一步online application就要求upload自己的PS，这可怎么办啊，我在考虑是不是要找文书代写中介帮忙搞出来啊？请大家给我出出主意吧！

焦急啊！各位拜托了！

fengkunliu

自己顶一下，各位达人给我指点一下迷津吧~~

yaoyao99

Maybe you can write a good one in Chinese and have someone translate it.  Good luck!

fengkunliu

That's sounds good, but one of my concerns is I also worry about the effectiveness of my essay, even in Chinese, I still have no idea in what way I can impress the admission committee with my writing. Because I have a relatively low undergraduate GPA, I hope my essay can do the repair work. I want to catch the points in essay writing, I know I have to acknowledge my weakness, but I also need to showcase my strong points in the essay, maybe a professional service of essay writing will know exactly how to do this work?

Any suggestions? Many thanks!

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-10-13 8:40:22编辑过]

funnytiger

以下是引用fengkunliu在2006-10-13 8:38:00的发言：

That's sounds good, but one of my concerns is I also worry about the effectiveness of my essay, even in Chinese, I still have no idea in what way I can impress the admission committee with my writing. Because I have a relatively low undergraduate GPA, I hope my essay can do the repair work. I want to catch the points in essay writing, I know I have to acknowledge my weakness, but I also need to showcase my strong points in the essay, maybe a professional service of essay writing will know exactly how to do this work?

Any suggestions? Many thanks!

your english looks pretty good to me.

if the professor wants you, the admission office is very likely to accept you as long as the professor is going to give you the scholarship.

So you can just explain why you want to go to the next level (PHD), why you want to research in this area? where you come from (personal success story). I think you are done.

fengkunliu

以下是引用funnytiger在2006-10-13 9:11:00的发言：

your english looks pretty good to me.

if the professor wants you, the admission office is very likely to accept you as long as the professor is going to give you the scholarship.

So you can just explain why you want to go to the next level (PHD), why you want to research in this area? where you come from (personal success story). I think you are done.

Thanks!

You gave me some clues, I guess my own obstacle lies in that I lack confidence in explaining my low GPA, thus reluctant to work on my essay. I've viewed many CDers' threads related with low GPA and find out that I may focus on my achievements and try to convince the adcom that my low GPA is due to some justifiable reasons, such as I was attracted by other activities, or I devoted myself into computer lab work (I was MIS major),

And actually, I do am interested in MIS, I'd be very gald to continue my study as PhD. I'm willing to do research in this field. (Is this reason persuasive enough if written into essay?)

Any comments?

yaoyao99

Sounds pretty weak.  If you think about it, everyone applying for a PhD program is probably willing to do research in the area and glad to continue his/her study in graduate school, right?  You can ask the professor.  It's probably sufficient if you can present what he sees in you, the connection between your background and his research/the school/s strengths, or even your unique achievement.  Don't lose a good opportunity!

fengkunliu

以下是引用yaoyao99在2006-10-13 10:24:00的发言：
Sounds pretty weak.  If you think about it, everyone applying for a PhD program is probably willing to do research in the area and glad to continue his/her study in graduate school, right?  You can ask the professor.  It's probably sufficient if you can present what he sees in you, the connection between your background and his research/the school/s strengths, or even your unique achievement.  Don't lose a good opportunity!

That's to say, it's too generic a reason to impress the professor. Thinking twice, it is really very weak. I guess some more specific reasons would help. For example, I can say what research paper I did, what conference I attended, my fields of interests, blah blah. The professor must have his research focus, then I can say how and what I would do if I enter his program, and maybe discuss some indepth topics related with his research.

Would this work? or any better approaches?