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In this argument ,the arguer reaches the conclusion that OLYMPIC FOODS will lead to minimize costs and thus maximize profits in the future ,as it will soon celebrate its twenty fifth birthday.The reasons cited are that the costs of processing go down in color film processing and the long experience of OLYMPIC FOODS itself. At first glance, the author’s argument appears to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that it is based on some highly dubious assumption, committing several logical mistakes. Furthermore, the evidence involves the sort of oversimplification, inadequancy and partiality. A careful examination of this argument would review how groundless the conclusion is.

First of all, the arguer assumes that the same principle of the color film processing can be applied to the processing of food. However, differences between the two clearly outweigh the similarities, therefore making the analogy much less than valid. The costs of print over the past few years may be attributed to the advancement of technology or other reasons. For example, the improvement of digit technique makes the print more wonderful in lower prices.

At the second place, the arguer ‘s assumption rests on the that the decrease of costs and the long experience are sufficient to maximize profits. However, the two aspects are not necessary mean the increase of profits. Though the control is important for a food processing , many other factors also play a vital part ,such as the extent of competition, the market share ,the quanlity of the products and the attractiveness of the foods for consumers. Moreover, if the economic is under recession, the overall revenues will go down which is not likely increase the profits.

Last but not least, the author unfairly assumes that the experiences during the past will be valid nowadays. As the time past away, the situation of the market, the preference of the consumers, the availability of the raw materials etc will change. Especially for Food producers, acute vision of the market and innovation of the products are critical for a high profits.

To sum up ,the conclusion lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to the arguer’s claim. To make the argument convincing , the arguer would have to provide more specific evidence concerning that the profits of OLYMPIC FOODS will increase.

第一次写作文,可是字数不到400,387个字,郁闷 实在写不出来了 .欢迎大家修改,谢谢大家了.写的不好,见笑了

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