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错的“英语写作必背200句”变成了“句型完美,经典文章,精华中的精华”
[center]Part I[/center]
很多论坛上都有转载“英语写作绝对有用200句/英语写作必背200句/雅思优秀作文必背200句/经典200句/英语高级写作必背200句/雅思写作必背200句/考研必背200句/写作地道200句…”。有些论坛更有四，五个同样的贴。有些贴是连有这个有如此惊人之序言：“这200句是我们写作教学组6年时间提举出来的国外经典文章中的句子，是精华中的精华。” 或是“这些句子是从近百篇雅思优秀作文中摘录下来并经反复推敲提炼而成的。” 或是“英语高级写作必背200句，为经典之作，不仅仅句型完美” 是真的吗？答：不是。The article "200 English sentences that you must commit to memory" is ubiquitous on "Learn English" Chinese BBSes. It and its various incarnations sometimes come with sensational--and definitely exaggerated--prefaces such as "These 200 hundred sentences are the creme de la creme of foreign classic compositions", " These are perfect sentences", "These are distilled from hundreds of fine Ielts compositions", and so on. Is that true? The answer is a resounding "NO."
This set is identifiable by the first sentence:
1. According to a recent survey, four million people die each year from diseases linked to smoking. (wordy: 修改 (see试修改‘英语写作绝对有用200句/英语写作必背200句  "(看例子一至一百  连接在此: http://www.rainlane.com/dispbbs.asp?boardid=11&id=19210)
: A recent survey shows four million people died from smoking related diseases annually.)

以 CET4/6 程度来说，这些句子可以说是“合格” 。但是说它们是“点睛之笔” ，“精华中的精华” ，“句型完美” ，就是有夸大之嫌.
大家注意。这网上非常流行的贴子，其内错误甚多，请不要轻信这是“国外经典文章中的句子，是精华中的精华。“那就是骗人之言。这些句子用来应付考试作文或可以。它们的结构有很多是与英语国家教写英文作文背道而驰。(Although it is over 45 years ago when I took English composition 101 at first year University, I can still remember some of the rules I was taught, and they run contrary to the style of these sentences.)

 I am not the only person who notices the problem in these sentences. Here is another individual who is also sceptical, and decided to show it to people who should know. (Quote): 引：Dendis http://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1 另外需要提醒大家的是感觉这个里面有些可能是中国人自己写的句子，因为问过一些老外说里面的句子和词的用法有的是有问题的. (End of quote.)

 If you are still not convinced, all you have to do is to read through the list of sentences carefully and you will pick up some very obvious mistakes.
E.g.

引: Yeti: 试修改‘英语写作绝对有用200句/英语写作必背200句  "(看例子一至一百  连接在此: http://www.rainlane.com/dispbbs.asp?boardid=11&id=19210)

(Next: Part II, examples.)

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Part II Example of mistakes.
13 . 　 A proper part-time job does not occupy students' too much time. In fact, it is unhealthy for them to spend all of time on their study. As an old saying goes: All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.
修改为 A proper part-time job would not occupy too much of a student’s time. In fact, it is unhealthy for them to spend all their time on their studies. As an old saying goes: “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.” (Please note this same quote is repeated in #79)
26. The information I've collected over last few years leads me to believe that this knowledge may be less useful than most people think.
修改为(The information…over the last few years…less useful than what most people think.)
27. Now, it is generally accepted that no college or university can educate its students by the time they graduation.  改为(--> by the time they graduate.)
44. It is commonly (改为 generally) accepted that no college or university can educate its students by the time they graduation (修改 graduate). (This is essentially the same as 27. My suspicion is that one is a partially corrected version from the same essay, with the second mistake missed.)


32. Although many people claim that, along with the rapidly  economic development, the number of people who use bicycle are decreasing and bicycle is bound to die out. The information I've collected over the recent years leads me to believe that bicycle  will continue to play extremely important roles in modern society.
修改: the rapidly economic development--> the rapid economic development; bicycle is bound to-->the bicycle is/bicycles are; that bicycle will continue--> the bicycle will/bicycles will.


76. It is hard to imagine a student focusing their energy on textbook while other children are playing. 修改: ( a student …his…textbook)(students…their…textbooks)

I don't think I need to say more. You can judge for yourself. Sure, if all you want is to pass an exam, go ahead and learn from them. If you really want to learn good English, stay away!
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Part III

On the other hand, another “collection of sentences” is quite acceptable: “英文写作佳句300例”, not to be confused with the other one, can be found in many BBSes. You can search for it by using Baidu.com. Here is one on  the diandian.net
反之，网上流传的“英文写作佳句300例“却是不错，值得一读。 (可在百度搜索，很多论坛都有，以下的是点点论坛的连接) 。http://blog.diandian.net/bbs/dispbbs.asp?boardid=2&id=46453


If you want good sentences to learn from, you should pick the ones written in fluent idiomatic English. There are limitless such sentences in books, newspapers and magazines. If you don't have time to read a whole book, here is a collection of short sentences and paragraphs picked for students (or anyone who is interested)  at diandian.net and Rainlane.com to read.
你们若是想学习真正写作能力强母语人士的句子，一定要从真正写作能力强母语人士所写的文章里去找。例如这写作论坛上的贴子
(i)“有帮助写作的短段精读, 不断加新”http://www.rainlane.com/dispbbs. ... ID=15724&page=1
(ii) 从实例学写或翻译公司简介及其它翻译例子  
http://www.rainlane.com/dispbbs.asp?boardID=11&ID=18461
(iii) Short and interesting news items
http://www.rainlane.com/dispbbs. ... ID=15393&page=1
以上贴子所引用的例子，都是从英语国家的英文书，报，杂志, 公司网页，。。。上找来的。

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Part IV


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The same quality problem goes for the many 范文 one finds on "Learn English" BBSes in China. A few are very good, but some are not worth reading--they may even be harmful. 国内的英语论坛上流传的作文范文也是质量有好有坏。有些是老师或专家写的。有些只是收集学生的作业，稍为修改集成。其中仍有很多错误。而且“中国化” 得很。用来过 4,6,8考试免强可以。用来学写得地道英语万不可用。

好的范文： The ones by Partick (of 51ielts),王军美 (of yummy English), 丁晓钟 (of diandian),金陵教授 (ep66.com.tw),...are quite good. (See link at the bottom of the page. 连接在下面)

有少错的范文： 新东方四、六级写作背诵范文(These is probably a collection of student works; not teacher's samples.) and 《新东方四级30天90分》are acceptable, but they have minor mistakes and are quite "Chinese" in character.

多错的范文： 四十二天学会英语的模范短文 and 四六级作文写作模版 are full of mistakes, and should be avoided.

不是范文 (这是不跟中国考试试题上的指示而写。是作者随意而写的。请勿转贴：不是范文 1 to 22
http://www.rainlane.com/dispbbs. ... ID=14772&page=1

I am sure there are lots more good and bad ones. I have not mentioned them because I have no time to check them all out.

For more details, and links to these sample essays, read section III and IV of 网上各英语园地与英语学习,翻译, 有关的好文章/贴子 in the Web Page

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