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AA12 The following appeared as part of a promotional campaign to sell advertising space in the Daily Gazette to grocery stores in the Marston area.

“Advertising the reduced price of selected grocery items in the Daily Gazette will help you increase your sales. Consider the results of a study

conducted last month. Thirty sale items from a store in downtown Marston were advertised in the Gazette for four days. Each time one or more

of the 30 items was purchased, clerks asked whether the shopper had read the ad. Two-thirds of the 200 shoppers asked answered in the

affirmative. Furthermore, more than half the customers who answered in the affirmative spent over $100 at the store.”

Discuss how well reasoned . .

To encourage people to advertise in the Daily Gazette, the author declares that advertising the reduced price of selected items in the Daily Gazette will help increase the sales. The author bases his conclusion on the reason that 30 sales items from a store in downtown Maston were advertised in the Gazette for four days, and it turns out that the advertisement works. Furthermore, the author provides another evidence to support his argument: when the clerks conducted an oral survey among the shoppers,  most shoppers said they had read the advertisement and more than half ones spent over 100 bucks at the store. Despite the reasons stated, the argument is problematic for several aspects.

In the first place, the author attributes the sale of the 30 items to the ad. in Daily Gazette without any evidence. Just because the 30 items have been advertised in daily Gatte, the author establishes the causality between them. It is possible the sale has nothing to do with the Daily Gatte but just is related to the reduced price. It means that no matter they are advertised in Daily Gatte or not, only if the items are discounted, there will be the sale of them. The author's statement is unconvincing, because he has not offered any persuasive evidence.

In the second place, the author cites an undependable survey to demonstrate his argument. Since the survey is hold by the clerks of the shop, it is suspect whether the survey reflect the truth. Since the clerks are not the professional investigators, it is possible the survey was not conducted properly, and the result may deviate from the truth. For example, the clerk asked two hundred shoppers. But whether the 200 shoppers were representative of the whole shoppers? What if there were over 1000 shoppers and most ones didn't know the ad. at all? Therefore, without any evidence to prove the 200 shoppers are sufficient and representative of the over all shoppers, the survey conducted by the clerks is not sufficient to confirm that the sale of the item is the result of the advertisement.

In the third place, even if it is the case that the survey is effective, this survey alone does not constitute the compelling evidence to support the author’s standpoint. For example, the author mentions that 200 shoppers read the advertisement, but he does not state if the shoppers is the new customers who came to buy the advertised items. What’s more, the figure that over half shoppers asked spent more than 100 dollars is not meaningful here, Since we don’t know what does the money spend on. There is the possibility that the shopper asked were the long stand consumers who only bought the items only stated in the advertisement. Hence, the author failed to provide useful figures in the survey.

To conclude, the author's advice to advertise in the Daily Gatte to enhance the sale is logically unreasonable because of the lack of evidence and the suspect survey. To substantiate his argument, the author should demonstrate that the sale of the items is only because of the advertisement in Daily Gatte,and the survey is dependable to illustrate the effect of the advertisement.

刚写完的时候count一下400多一些,后然修改一下,再加了一段,就500多了,当然时间也超了不少了.请指教了

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-10-5 0:02:58编辑过]

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以下是引用12345678912345在2005-10-4 9:02:00的发言：

AA12 The following appeared as part of a promotional campaign to sell advertising space in the Daily Gazette to grocery stores in the Marston area.

“Advertising the reduced price of selected grocery items in the Daily Gazette will help you increase your sales. Consider the results of a study

conducted last month. Thirty sale items from a store in downtown Marston were advertised in the Gazette for four days. Each time one or more

of the 30 items was purchased, clerks asked whether the shopper had read the ad. Two-thirds of the 200 shoppers asked answered in the

affirmative. Furthermore, more than half the customers who answered in the affirmative spent over $100 at the store.”

Discuss how well reasoned . .

To encourage people to advertise in the Daily Gazette, the author declares that advertising the reduced price of selected items in the Daily Gazette will help increase the sales. The author bases his conclusion on the reason that 30 sales items from a store in downtown Maston were advertised in the Gazette for four days, and it turns out that the advertisement works. Furthermore, the author provides another evidence to support his argument: when the clerks conducted an oral survey among the shoppers,  most shoppers said they had read the advertisement and more than half ones spent over 100 bucks at the store. Despite the reasons stated, the argument is problematic for several aspects.

In the first place, the author attributes the sale of the 30 items to the ad. in Daily Gazette without any evidence. Just because the 30 items have been advertised in daily Gatte, the author establishes the causality between them. It is possible the sale has nothing to do with the Daily Gatte but just is related to the reduced price. It means that no matter they are advertised in Daily Gatte or not, only if the items are discounted, there will be the sale of them. The author's statement is unconvincing, because he has not offered any persuasive evidence.

In the second place, the author cites an undependable survey to demonstrate his argument. Since the survey is hold by the clerks of the shop, it is suspect whether the survey reflect the truth. Since the clerks are not the professional investigators, it is possible the survey was not conducted properly, and the result may deviate from the truth. For example, the clerk asked two hundred shoppers. But whether the 200 shoppers were representative of the whole shoppers? What if there were over 1000 shoppers and most ones didn't know the ad. at all? Therefore, without any evidence to prove the 200 shoppers are sufficient and representative of the over all shoppers, the survey conducted by the clerks is not sufficient to confirm that the sale of the item is the result of the advertisement.

In the third place, even if it is the case that the survey is effective, this survey alone does not constitute the compelling evidence to support the author’s standpoint. For example, the author mentions that 200 shoppers read the advertisement, but he does not state if the shoppers is the new customers who came to buy the advertised items. What’s more, the figure that over half shoppers asked spent more than 100 dollars is not meaningful here, Since we don’t know what does the money spend on. There is the possibility that the shopper asked were the long stand consumers who only bought the items only stated in the advertisement. Hence, the author failed to provide useful figures in the survey.

To conclude, the author's advice to advertise in the Daily Gatte to enhance the sale is logically unreasonable because of the lack of evidence and the suspect survey. To substantiate his argument, the author should demonstrate that the sale of the items is only because of the advertisement in Daily Gatte,and the survey is dependable to illustrate the effect of the advertisement.

刚写完的时候count一下400多一些,后然修改一下,再加了一段,就500多了,当然时间也超了不少了.请指教了

看了lz的文章，532个词，天啊！！！觉得lz写的很好了，我的水平是改不出什么来了！只觉得it is possible 后面应该加个that，其他的单词没找出什么错误，语言词语句子都很好

反正我觉得很好，如果lz能在规定时间内写出来，更加厉害了。觉得lz现在应该攻克的问题是规定时间内如何写出这种水平的文章来，觉得有的地方可以少说一点，即句子简略一点可能会好一点，然后觉得首段写的太多了，也可以精炼一下。省下时间写正文！！！

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judy提纲讨论的内容，你也可以看一下拉

在把Gazette日报的广告版向Marston地区的蔬菜商销售的计划：

在Gazette日报宣传特价菜会帮助你提高销售额。考虑上月的一个研究的结果。Marston中心区的一个商店的30种特价菜在Gazette做了4天广告。每当有特价菜被卖出，职员就问顾客是否读过广告。200顾客中的2/3回答是肯定的。而且，持肯定回答的顾客中有超过一半的人在店里的消费超过100美元。

读了广告之后买了特价菜，并不意味着是因为看了广告才去买特价菜。可以有很多因素促使消费者买特价菜。此外作者是想说可以提高总体销售水平但他的论证实际根本没有涉及这一点。起码要给出没有做广告时候一天销售额和做了广告之后的对比。

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at the very least

To strengthen the argument, the author must, at the very least, provide comparisons of overall sales reports as described above.

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btw

lz的id好有意思！！！！

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今天对相好谈起了作文的事情,我说一开始不敢正视作文,后然写着写着还上瘾了!相好说,是啊,作文就是练出来的啊.我说,那你当初为何不练啊?(他的gre作文3分,考前从来没练过)他说,我那是不练也心慌,练了也心慌,干脆不练了.

倒是后然他给我支了一招,关于时间的问题,他说,可以先写开头＆结尾,然后中间慢慢补,我还真欣赏这招,今天晚上可以拿来试试.

to happyfish, 每次我都是匆匆忙忙贴帖子,因为题目的copy＆题号的寻找确实比较麻烦.谢谢你啦.

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我的建议：

填充式：GMAT作文比较八股一点，建议：先开头，再中间段每段的首句中心句，再结尾，然后填每段的具体内容（说理+例子）

觉得先写完中间段的中心句后，再写结尾比较有的放矢

以上属于个人意见（我写的时候就是这样听别人建议的），你可以都试试看那种更适合你！！！

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相好是bf吗？

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是老公啊.