【求大神】PREP0727

Dreamout

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When drafting the Declaration ofSentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's

Rights Convention in 1848, included in itby the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for

female enfranchisement.

(A) When drafting the Declaration ofSentiments that was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's

Rights Convention in 1848, included in itby the author, Elizabeth Cady Stanton, was a call for

female enfranchisement.

(B) Including a call for femaleenfranchisement, a draft of the Declaration of Sentiments was

adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's RightsConvention in 1848 that Elizabeth Cady Stanton

wrote.

(C) When the Declaration of Sentimentsdrafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the

Seneca Falls Women's Convention in 1848,a call for female enfranchisement had been

included in it.

(D) A call for female enfranchisement,included in Elizabeth Cady Stanton's draft of the

Declaration of Sentiments in 1848, thatwas adopted by the Seneca Falls Women's Rights

Convention.

(E) WhenElizabeth Cady Stanton drafted the Declaration of Sentiments that was adoptedat the

Seneca Falls Women's Rights Convention in1848, she included in it a call for female

enfranchisement.

考点:句子结构（Grammatical Construction）、逻辑表达（Logical Predication）

1)  修饰成分应该尽量靠近修饰对象

2)  逗号+ -ed形容词的结构中, -ed形容词从语法上修饰的是逗号前最后一个名词

3)  分词短语在句首起状语作用,逻辑主语等于句子主语

(A) when drafting…结构中缺乏逻辑主语; included…结构中缺乏句子主语 应该在included之前加

上一个what用来做was a call的主语; 即使上面两个问题修改后,句子结构仍然复杂,笨拙.

(B) that从句离修饰对象a draft太远,  给人感觉that从句修饰的是Convention;  整个句子结构笨拙

(C)  原句中没有标志表明要用过去完成时; a call for female enfranchisement had been included

in it.使用被动语态无法表示出施动者是谁,并且it指代模糊

(D) 整个句子缺乏谓语成分; included从语法上修饰enfranchisement,    而从逻辑上应该A call

(E)  正确, when连接完整的句子,that从句紧靠修饰对象,句子结构清晰,用词简洁

求问C用过去完成时哪里有问题？前面不是有指出具体的过去的时间When the Declaration of Sentiments drafted by Elizabeth Cady Stanton was adopted at the Seneca Falls Women's Convention in 1848来着？

Fiona09

C项 前半句是drafted，后半句是had been included 也就是起草的时候，call就已经发生了。

显然不对

Dreamout

Fiona09 发表于 2017-3-22 17:38
C项 前半句是drafted，后半句是had been included 也就是起草的时候，call就已经发生了。

显然不对 ...

不是。你再细看一下。C选项是adopted，不是drafted

Fiona09

Dreamout 发表于 2017-3-22 17:41
不是。你再细看一下。C选项是adopted，不是drafted

哦，是我看得太急了，不好意思，但其实是一个意思。

C项前半句是was adopted，我觉得过去完成时had been的表达，意味着inclusion在adoption之前就发生了，但其实是要表达的是”同时“。

而且C项全局从头到尾都是被动语态。。。看着好怪异

Dreamout

Fiona09 发表于 2017-3-22 18:13
哦，是我看得太急了，不好意思，但其实是一个意思。

C项前半句是was adopted，我觉得过去完成时had been ...

不是啊……我觉得OK啊。在接受之前，已经被Included了，因为是draft的时候就include了啊。。。

Dreamout

有没有大神有别的高见啊？？？~~~