AA008: workers apathetic about management issues

wwwhahchn

谢谢Judy~~听了你的话，觉得好温暖吖~~~

我还没定考试日期，想8月份考，目标750，作文也争取能考好一点，因为T的作文只有4.0，不知道能不能用G的作文来弥补

小女公子

倒数往上二楼的mm不着急的呵呵，字数很好凑的，我刚开始也是370左右，后来慢慢就好了，要加油哦

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-7-3 0:24:41编辑过]

wwwhahchn

谢谢小女公子，你好像刚考过啊，不知考得怎样？？

ailingzh

看看这篇如何.

Based on a survey among workers which indicates a high level of interest in the topics of corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs, the arguer concludes that workers are not apathetic about management issues. Specially, it is argued that since 79 percent of the 1200 respondents of the survey expressed their interest in these topics, the notion that workers are apathetic about management issues are at least outdated. A careful examination would reveal two flaws in this argument.

First, a threshold problem is that the arguer provides no evidence to claim that workers in the corporate as a whole possess the same point of view. The example cited, while suggestive of this view, is insufficient to warrant its truth because there is no reason to believe that the respondents are representative of the whole general group. For instance, this is a multinational company and owns more than 10,000 employees, the 1200 workers is only a small portion of the entire group. As a result, there is no way to verify the overall opinion in the argument. In face of such limited anecdotal evidence, we can only say that it is fallacious for the arguer to draw any conclusion.

Second, Even if the result of survey can express the overall opinion of the whole worker group, there is still a methodology problem for the conclusion. That is, the arguer has focused only on a subgroup of management issues such as corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs to conclude that the workers are not apathetic about all the management issues. As we know, management issues are so complicated that they can not be generalized with one or two factors. Although the programs listed in the argument relate to the workers closely, it is unfair to assume that they would similarly interested in other management issues----those do not affect them so directly. Therefore this conclusion is very hasty.

Finally, this argument is not persuasive as it stands. Accordingly, it is imprudent for the arguer to claim that. To make the argument logically acceptable, the arguer would have to show that the survey is of sufficient representation of the whole workers. In addition, to solidify the conclusion, the arguer should provide concrete evidence as well as to demonstrate that workers are enthusiastic about other management topics but not only those that affect them directly.

judydongxueni

以下是引用ailingzh在2005-7-3 22:16:00的发言：

看看这篇如何.

Based on a survey among workers which indicates a high level of interest in the topics of corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs, the arguer concludes that workers are not apathetic about management issues. Specially, it is argued that since 79 percent of the 1200 respondents of the survey expressed their interest in these topics, the notion that workers are apathetic about management issues are at least outdated. A careful examination would reveal two flaws in this argument.

First, a threshold problem is that the arguer provides no evidence to claim that workers in the corporate as a whole possess the same point of view. The example cited, while suggestive of this view, is insufficient to warrant its truth because there is no reason to believe that the respondents are representative of the whole general group. For instance, this is a multinational company and owns more than 10,000 employees, the 1200 workers is only a small portion of the entire group. As a result, there is no way to verify the overall opinion in the argument. In face of such limited anecdotal evidence, we can only say that it is fallacious for the arguer to draw any conclusion.

Second, Even if the result of survey can express the overall opinion of the whole worker group, there is still a methodology problem for the conclusion. That is, the arguer has focused only on a subgroup of management issues such as corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs to conclude that the workers are not apathetic about all the management issues. As we know, management issues are so complicated that they can not be generalized with one or two factors. Although the

个人觉得用since更符合逻辑

programs listed in the argument relate to the workers closely, it is unfair to assume that they would similarly interested in other management issues----those do not affect them so directly. Therefore this conclusion is very hasty.

Finally, this argument is not persuasive as it stands. Accordingly, it is imprudent for the arguer to claim that. To make the argument logically acceptable, the arguer would have to show that the survey is of sufficient representation of the whole workers. In addition, to solidify the conclusion, the arguer should provide concrete evidence as well as to demonstrate that workers are enthusiastic about other management topics but not only those that affect them directly.

judydongxueni

写的很好哦！字数略少了点，其实还有错误的呀。可能找3个会比较好。

文字十分流畅短语和句式的用法十分得体。

还有一些特别小的错误我没一一改，应该都是马虎的问题包括大小写什么的呵呵。