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soaring

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142 A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child's development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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To enhance children's development, some parents select a fairy tale book as a gift; others choose a stuffed doll; still others pick a basketball up. Although every item has its value, personally I find a stereo advantageous for a child's growth to lean languages, music, and communication.

First, children can gain knowledge through language cassettes. For example, while listening to tapes of beginner English, children follow the directions to speak out simple words such as "A" means " Apple", "B" refers to " Bird" and " C" defines " Cat". With a "Rewind" button, children can repeat this basic vocabulary as many times as they want. Under these circumstances,repeated stimulation enables them to memorize quickly. So, a stereo can benefit children to study languages effectively.

Another contribution of a stereo for children's development is that children can learn the rhythm, melody and lyrics. Like " Elephants", the famous song tells kids why an elephant has a long trunk. Also, according to various rthym, children can express feelings in different ways. To illustrate, romantic music like Celine Dion's " My heart with go on" has smooth and slow pace. It makes the listener tranquil. However, pop music like Michel Jackston's " Thriller" thrills children. So, music inspires children's minds.

Most importantly, a stereo allows children to communicate with hosts of broadcasts. For example, they can turn into talk show on 99.1 FM. There is a program called "Take a guess" at 9:00am on weekdays. Unusually, the host asks questions like " what is the largest animal in the world?" Every child can respond through a phone. If someone gets the wrong answers, the host would provide more hints and clues to children until they get the right answers. In this way, children can improve their imagination and creativity; in addition, they learn how to communicate with others.

All in all, little kids can feel frustrated playing tapes and CD's. Also, impatient children cannot stick with hour long or more cassettes. Nevertheless, I strongly think a stereo is worthwhile for children's development because it helps them become gifted in language, music and speech.

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Thanks~!

elena0675

说实话哦，写得比我强，可是那个for example 能不能换一换。for instance,take...for example之类的话。像你那个to illustrate就用得挺好的。我都不会。

我作文最臭了。有空多交流阿。

[此贴子已经被作者于2004-10-26 20:13:53编辑过]

soaring

谢谢

以后注意哦

llllyyyy

it is better than what i can write! The studcture is very clear and there is no basic grammar mistakes. Just prcticing, you can get at least 5 on your writing.

By the way, you are my exampler on the writing.

Good luck!