我自己的第一篇托福作文 希望大家帮我改改 谢谢大家^_^

xuechenjing

When it comes to the question, whether students graduating from high school shuold have the option to directly entre the workforce or to attend college,people`s opinions are divergent on such a controversial issue. The overwhelming majority would support that studengts should directly go to college before finding jobs, others, however, take the negative attitude. To choose to attend college or choose to find jobs directly is something of a dilemma, because we always confused by the seemingly good qualities of finding jobs and neglect the genuinely profound aspect of entering the college.

From the personal perspective,I prefer to attend collegedirectly after graduating from high school as my inclination. There are numerous reasons why I advocate my opinion, and I would explore only a few of the essential ones here.

First of all, it goes without saying that Knowledge is Power, a famous proverb.Nothing could be more important than learning knowledge, especially specialized knowledge. Before attending college, students have limited opportunity to specialize. It is college the most suitable place to learn specialized knowledge. After obtaining a specific college degree, because of having specialized knowledge, a job applicant can be more competitive in an increasing fierce job market.

Additionally,employees are willing to pay a premium for high qualified applicants. Because of the  extend to which a coollege degree is accepted by employers as a proof of cpmpetence in a given field, college graduates are not only more likely to receive more job offers, but also command higher salaries than applicants without college diplomas.

We cannot deny that the advantages of finding jobs directly after graduating from high school because in that way students can learn social experience which can`t be learned in any college. However, we can see more disadvantages. For instance, students without college degree couldn`t find a valuable job to show their perfect abilities.Therefore, based on the above statement, I still hold my opinion that students graduating from high school should attend college directly instead of having the opition to the workforce.

TOMOE

开头太纠结啦，不用这么转弯抹角的啦

xuechenjing

好滴好滴 我改.. 谢谢了^_^