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这是我的独立写作部分的作文，花了我好长时间才费尽心思，鼓起勇气，来丢人。敬请大牛，小牛和自认为不是牛的点评。顺便打个分，还有10多天考试， 好确定该怎么调整复习准备步伐。多谢多谢！

sample 7:how do movies and television influence people's behavior?
 After a long time development ,movies and television becomes pervasive in people's daily life .cosequently , they have changed people's life and behavior .for instance ,some people change their styles to comply with that of the actor of a film once they saw .Meanwhile , people are inspired to buy things by ads exposured on the tv. what's worse , some childre learn to behave offensively from the violent movies .
  many people chang their styles since they want act as the actor does in the film .some may change their speaking and accents and expressions as well .one of my friends is very fantastic with ,if not addicted to , operas acted by koreans.I just name a few of her behaviors to show how she was effected :  she buy her idol's picture or  decorates in an unexpected huge sum .she also dreeses herself like a korean girl .And she even go to a languge school to learn korean for one day she can go to korea and live there.It is apprently that there are many such people who were that effected by the movies or films.
 Additionaly, the ads broadcasted on the tv have greatly changed people's  comsume behavior.people get a wide range of information about new appliances and make-ups and so forth. accordingly people get able to compare the price ,quality and comvinience of commodities made from different firm and then make a more reasonable choice.In the same time , the tv has some other shows besides advertisements,such as sports , talks and news. Thus people can watch the olympic games at home rather than spend money to by a tiket to see the race on the stand .
 The most worse influence would be the the children's agreesive behaviorthat they from violent movies.Violent movies can be seen whenever you want on the tv ; it got so popular because these movies always give the bad a death and the hero a happy end .children expoused to these films indeed learn to be a descent peoson and yet learn to treat bad people ,according to their value, violently  and cruly .
 with those considered above , movies and television also have some other impacts on people ,such as spare the time thatis scheduled to excerse to watch tv and films, and so that people have more topics to share and therefore enhance the relationship .In a word , movies and films have significantly varify ourlife,positively and negatively.

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我只能在这儿等啊? 可不可以直接请某人修改啊? 或着直接发到他的油箱?有这个功能吗?

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这个是口语的东东，以点概面：跪求意见和指导！

1.Some students prefer to choose a university in their home region to study at while others prefer to study away from home or abroad. Which do you prefer and why? Include details and examples to support your explanation.

Keys: I would like to study away from home or abroad rather than choose a university in my home ,because: first , I can learn independence , that is, I have to make decision by myself and take care of myself to avoid getting cold or hurt ed. And secondlly , I can learn to make friends with shool mates from different place . also , I become familiar with another languge and distinctive culture .and doing so consequently abroad my vision. This is the reason why I prefer to study away from home.

2.Some people only go to the movies if they know that they will enjoy the film. Others like to be surprised and to see films they know nothing about. Discuss the issue and choose which side you prefer. Include details and examples to support your explanation.

Keys:   For me , I prefer to movies that I know it is my favorite style. Because : first : it is a time comsuming job to select a movie from kinds of movies., you know , the directors are so productive that diversity movies come out at a time . and also . to see a movie I don’t like will interrupt my good emotions and thus make me feel awful. On the other hand , it will be an enjoy to watch tvs I like .it will be interesting  and amazing.so I absolutely like to go to movies that I know I will enjoy .