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楼主
发表于 2007-5-18 18:38:00 | 只看该作者

谢谢!!

这是我写的第三篇作文,希望高手可以帮我看看,我要2个半月后才考试,现在每隔3天写一篇作文.谢谢!

When it comes to whether playing a game is fun only from winning a game. Undoubtedly , the confidence and a good mood grow when I am success in conquering a game.Usually it seems the game is fun becouse of our success.However, is this the unique reason to think how fun the game is? Virtually, my anwer is not completely for sure.There are several reasons from my aspect.

 

In the frist place ,winning the challenge game, especialy the game I never defeat,certainly makes me exciting and delightful. However, while keening on a game, I do enjoy the process which fills of adventure,stimulation,and happyness. The most hardly forgettable part is the process rather than the result. Playing a game means enjoying the entertainment,Whatever you win or fail.

 

Sencond, the process of playing a game is funny to me. In the meantime, it is really helpful to improve my abilitise, thinking how to get to the highest class, analysing the hard questions, and imagining the following dangerous situation. Also my complicated mood grows during "the war".When all these draw to a close, it means that the good or bad result is coming. But to me,the amusement process is always primary !

 

Finaly, as a kind of amusement in the leisure time, playing a game means shareing happy with friends. However, on the contrary, if winning a game makes someone go into a raptures and regard it as unique origin of happyness,and think only the game is fun,it is easier for him to treat the life extremly.As a result, someone get used to concentrate on only the result and disregard the experience,which will contribute to more faitures in the near furture.

 

Although success in a game is the last common target to many people.But playing a game is not a true struggle.It is just a type of relaxament for killing the time when you feel boring
沙发
发表于 2007-5-18 19:09:00 | 只看该作者

每个标点的后面都要打逗号

模版的痕迹太重,建议你研究一下NCE4和NCE3

板凳
发表于 2007-5-18 19:56:00 | 只看该作者

看看 论坛上的那些修改吧,说不定有帮助,

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