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发表于 2005-5-6 01:09:00 | 只看该作者

请打分,拍砖!--TWE026

topic 026:



There is an announcement that a new movie theater is going to be build in our neighborhood. It becomes to be a debate. But I really cannot be more exciting about the news.






I support this plan, because I love movies, the most charming and amazing type of arts, since I was a college student. From the movie, I can learn different cultures, economies and policies though different actors with different thoughts in different countries in only one or two hours. What’s more, we even can get much useful information such as how to get along with others. I will be moved by the feeling that I haven’t tasted in the film.






And I am not alone here. Many persons have the same opinion of the movies. Most boys and girls are all fond of enjoying the movies and exchanging the senses of them in the BBS, the most popular place that college students communicate with each other and express their own thoughts.






The view above is base on the love of movies. But the new movie theatre will also bring benefits to the persons who are not crazy about movies. Movies will enrich the topics and color their boring daily life. And the distance between them will be disappear. They could talk about something new instead of the weather.






But each advantage always accompanies with a disadvantage. The theater may be noisy at night, as every body knows. Therefore the persons who live near by will be the objectors.






In conclusion, the potential benefits of a new movie theater will overweight the risks of it. So more of the neighbors will stand by this project. And I am one of the proponents.



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沙发
发表于 2005-5-7 22:20:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用morstar在2005-5-6 1:09:00的发言:

topic 026:




There is an announcement that a new movie theater is going to be build in our neighborhood. It becomes to be a debate. But I really cannot be more exciting about the news.






I support this plan, because I love movies, the most charming and amazing type of arts, since I was a college student. From the movie, I can learn different cultures, economies and policies though different actors with different thoughts in different countries in only one or two hours. What’s more, we even can get much useful information such as how to get along with others. I will be moved by the feeling that I haven’t tasted in the film.






And I am not alone here. Many persons have the same opinion of the movies. Most boys and girls are all fond of enjoying the movies and exchanging the senses of them in the BBS, the most popular place that college students communicate with each other and express their own thoughts.






The view above is base on the love of movies. But the new movie theatre will also bring benefits to the persons who are not crazy about movies. Movies will enrich the topics and color their boring daily life. And the distance between them will be disappear. They could talk about something new instead of the weather.






But each advantage always accompanies with a disadvantage. The theater may be noisy at night, as every body knows. Therefore the persons who live near by will be the objectors.






In conclusion, the potential benefits of a new movie theater will overweight the risks of it. So more of the neighbors will stand by this project. And I am one of the proponents.




如果楼主的时间还较多,建议先在不限定时间的情况下写几篇,从结构和语言上找找感觉。然后再开始限定时间写,写完后自己花点时间改改,充分内容,修改语言。就本篇而言,结构是完整的,但主体部分和结尾稍显单薄。语言上,语法错误较多,句式较单一。还须多加练习。

板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2005-5-8 00:42:00 | 只看该作者
谢谢。。。
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