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echosun2002

独立作文10.15

TOPIC: the car hashad a greater effect on society than airplane?

ESSAY:

As technology hasadvanced by leaps and bounds, it's more effectively and efficiently for peopleto take transportation. Undoubtedly, various vehicles, especially two of which:car and airplane, play more and more crucial roles in our daily life. On a personallevel, I agree that the car has a more far-reaching impact on society than theairplane. The reasons are presented below.

In the firstplace, there is no denying that it's more possible for people to take cars thanairplane. That is to say, in comparison to airplane, the car is more closelyrelated to people's life. As a result, the car affects our societydramatically. In fact, nowadays, not only do we commute to work every day butalso we rely on cars to improve our work efficiency. This point can be bestillustrated with the case of me. I am a client manager in a bank. Every day Iwill drive my car to visit three to four of my clients. In contrary, if I hadno car, I would definitely waste a lot time on my way. How markedly the cardoes good to my work! On the contrary, except people who always on theirofficial business, most people rarely take the plane because the plane is usedto travel for a long distance. Most of us would rather travel one or two timesin a year. Therefore, when it comes to the importance of two modes oftransportation, people would give priority to the car instead of the plane.

In the secondplace, the high fare of plane inhibits many people from using it. While mostpeople frequently utilize the car as normal transportation. As a cheap andconvenient transit tool, the car has an important influence on people's life.In light of the low fare of car, even the poor can afford to take car to wherethey want. According to the survey conducted by the Academy of Social Sciencein 2013,in province of Jiangsu, there are 40 percent of people who have nevertaken plane. In contrast, there are 3 percent of people who have not gone bycar. Apparently, it's hard to overstate the significance of the car to themodern society.

Given all thesefactors I have outlined above, we can easily reach a reasonable conclusion thatcompared to plane, the car more greatly satisfies the needs of people in dailylife and plays a more crucial role in our society.

echosun2002

独立写作10.14

TOPIC:

For success in school and work, the ability to adapt or toadjust to a changing condition or circumstances is more important than havingexcellent knowledge of a job or a field to study

ESSAY:

Evidently, the road to success is full of thorns. For thesake of success, people should be able to adapt to a mutable condition and haveexcellent knowledge. However, when these two factors are mutually exclusive, Iprefer the good adaptability to excellent knowledge. The reasons are presentedbelow.

In the first place, when we face up with a variety ofobstacles in reality, the ability to adaptation plays a more important role insuccess than excellent knowledge does. Apparently, there are some conditions outof our expectation. Under no circumstance could we obtain all of the excellentknowledge to deal with those unexpectedly problems. On the contrary, if we havethe ability to adjust to a changing condition, we could definitely straightenout the confusion situations and successfully cope with obstacles. This pointcan be best illustrated with the case of me. One of my clients asked me to helphis overseas company get a loan from a bank abroad. However, the overseascompany does not have any real estate which is the prerequisite for bank loans.More awfully, my client also does not have a credit commitment in my bank.Neither have I confront such problem nor my colleagues have. At this moment,all of my financial knowledge became useless. Fortunately, thanks to my abilityof adaptation, I concentrated on researching all policies of credit commitmentin my bank and finally I found a method to resolve this difficulty. At last, myclient's company succeeded in obtaining a loan from a Korean bank using an internationalletter of financial guarantee as a collateral. It's hard to overstate thesignificance of the ability to adapt to a mutable condition.

In the second place, as we are in such a changing world,there is no denying that knowledge is dramatically altered from day to day.It's possible that excellent knowledge of today might be outdated tomorrow. Andit is the vital reason why Nokia lost most of its market share of the cellphone. Undoubtedly, a decade ago Nokia had excellent knowledge and state-of-the-arttechnology of cell phone. However, because of lacking the ability to adapt tothe changing market, finally, Nokia could not retrieve its market share.Therefore, as knowledge advanced by leaps and bounds, we ought to spare noeffort to elevate the adaptation ability to reach successful goal.

Given all these factors I have outlined, we could easilyreach a reasonable conclusion that there is no better way to succeed than to begood adaptability. The more adaptable you are, the more possible you willachieve success.

echosun2002

独立作文10.13

topic:

Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and letthem learn from their own mistakes

essay:

Historically, we, human beings, are continuously undergoingthe process from making mistakes to achieving success. By making mistakes,people could obtain wisdom which will lead to the final success. By the sametoken, when it comes to child education, there is no doubt that it isbeneficial for children to make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes.

In the first place, it's universally acknowledged that makingand learning from their own mistakes enables children to obtain impressiveexperience which will do good to their next solution of obstacle. In other words, there isno better way to be smarter than to make and learn from mistakes. Parentssacrifice a part of themselves for the betterment of their children. If theyare aware of the importance of mistakes, they could definitely permit theirchildren to make mistakes. This point can be best illustrated with the case ofme. When I was in junior school, most female students, including me, wereaddicted to romantic novels. Not only did we read novels after class but alsoin class. My parents didn't prevent me from wasting valuable time on suchuseless books. On the contrary, they allowed me to make such mistake. As aresult, I got a poor score in my final examination and then I realized what wasthe most important to me. Therefore I abandoned all of my romantic novels andconcentrated on my study. In contrast, my classmates were dramaticallyforbidden to read novels by their parents. They didn't suffer the academicfailure by their own and they never stopped to read more novels. What's thegood of preventing children from making mistakes?

In the second place, there is no denying that out of mistakescomes the ability of independent. Because of parents' protection, childrennever allowed to make mistakes will be overly depend on their parents. Under nocircumstance could they rely on themselves to cope with problems. In fact, whenchildren make mistakes, they can learn how to rise to the occasion, what themethod to deal with mistakes and who they can seek for help. All of theseinformation plays a crucial role in coping with another obstacle. Therefore,children who make and experience their own mistakes will be more confident andindependent in comparison to those under overly protection.

Granted, letting children make mistakes also has somenegative effects, for instance there are indeed existing some fatal mistakessuch as playing fire or making dangerous movements. However, as long as parentscould pay more attention and give useful suggestions to their children, theproblem will be avoided.

Given all these factors I have outlined, we can easily reacha reasonable conclusion that parents are supposed to have tolerant attitudes tochildren's mistakes and let their children learn more from mistakes alone.

echosun2002

谢谢美眉的点评，非常有用的建议，另外没有语法错误是因为我复查的结果

angla

sorry for late！

echosun2002

Which way would you like to take to improve your health?
A eatmore healthy food
B do more exercise
Creduce stress

As the modern society develops, people have undergone tremendous pressure from various directions and been tempted by sufficient gourmet food. Apparently, the viewer is not aware that we will lose track of body weight. So it's very important for us to keep fit. On a personal level, exercising does a great deal to improve my health.

In the first place, it's arguable that doing exercise enables people to relieve stress. Without pressure people will be more close to health.There is no better way to relax myself than to do exercise. Every week, I continuously participate in the class of Latin dance. Music of Latin dance is imbued with enthusiasm and energy. As long as the music starts, I can indulge myself in dancing. After two hours practices, under no circumstance could I feel any pressure although so tired am I that I can hardly stagger to my feet.Moreover, communicating with people who exercise together is a good way to reduce fatigue. After class, it is customary for us to discuss the dance moves and correct the mistakes. Some people would like to perform a phrase of dance.The others will encourage them by applauding. How happy time we have! From exercise, not only do I reduce pressure but also I obtain a wealth of happiness.

In the second place, there is no denying that keeping exercise will do good to our health.Because exercise could boost blood circulation and fuel a lot of extra fat. According to the study conducted by Academic of Social and Science, the amount of calories that burned up when people sport is two times the amount of calories that fueled in daily life. It's universally acknowledged that extra fat is closely related to disease such as obesity and diabetes. In addition,exercise plays a crucial role in keeping slim figure. As we all know that people with slim figure seem to be more attractive and graceful. For the sake of health, people are supposed to spare no effort to do more exercise.

Given all of these factors I have outlined above, we can easily reach a reasonable conclusion that the optimal access to health is to do more exercise. The more we exercise, the more we will be healthy. If  people pay more attention to exercise, they will be more healthy. As a result, the cost of medicine will be dramatically reduced and our society will be full of cheerfulness.

echosun2002

多谢提醒，花了点时间终于搞清楚让步段该怎么写了

loverony713

echosun2002 发表于 2014-10-10 08:51
独立写作10.9

TOPIC: the best way to learn about a foreign country is toread the newspaper and magaz ...

Nowadays, the world has become more and more globalization（觉得说的有点Chinglish 你可以说 全球化的趋势越来越明显 套用某个高级句型）. So prevalent is international communication that it's worthwhile for us to learn more aboutforeign countries. So how can we know about a foreign country effectively andaccurately? Media such as newspaper and magazines from that country seems to bea good method if people are familiar with the local language and culture andthe media is objective and neutral. However, in reality, it's difficult to satisfy all of the standards addressed above.
In a personal level, I don't think that newspaper andmagazines are the best way to know about a foreign country. The reasons are presented below.

First and foremost, it's unlikely for people to master languages of every foreign country. Although there is a wealth of articles andstories about the country, owing to the barrier of language, people can hardlyunderstand what the meanings of those articles and stories. For instance, I aminterested in Japan but I cannot understand Japanese. So under no circumstancecould I comprehend what those Japanese newspaper and magazines express. Instead I read a book named The Chrysanthemum and the Sword written by a socialist ofAmerica. This book is imbued with（字面意思理解 不知道用在这是是否合适） accurate analysis of Japanese culture,customs and history. From this book, I can know well about Japan and put thecountry in perspective.

咋说呢 你的主题句说的是不可能掌握所有的外国语言，本段的末尾是你通过别的外国语言的书了解到了某个国家。这一段可以再完善一些吧？

What's more, it's universally acknowledged that there is a lot riding on(?) the media and in some situation （少个连词？）newspaper and magazines no longer act simply as objective and neutral carriers of facts. From newspaper of NorthKorea, we all know that this country is filled with harmony and the people ofNorth Korea are the happiest human in the world. In fact, people who escapedfrom the country tell us different stories（重点就在这个different story 你咋就不多解释几句呢！！！）. If we believe in that the best wayto know a foreign country is to glance over the local media（比如？ps 你觉得北京晚报 和人民日报说的不一样么？我觉得这一点我不是很理解）, （加一句 如果local这么说 然后）we woulddefinitely agree that North Korea is so beautiful that we are supposed totravel there. So what's the good of depending on newspaper and magazines from aforeign country?

Granted, there is no denying that newspaper and magazines indeedcontain a lot of information about food, culture and custom of a foreigncountry. Providing that we already master the language of a foreign country andthe media is relatively objective（赶脚着这不是让步的味... 让步是那种自我驳斥的感觉。我觉得你可以说， 报纸可以provide XXX，但是电影也能provide XXX，反而更好地能体现XXX）, browsing newspaper and magazines of thecountry could be an effective and convenient way to learn about the country.

Contemplating all of these factors, we can easily reach areasonable conclusion that in most of the time it's not the best method for usto read newspaper and magazines from a foreign country in order to be familiarwith the country. Fortunately, owing to the state-of-the-art equipments,nowadays, there are more and more great ways to know about a foreign country.