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Argument 45
The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.

"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

The speaker recommends that the Humana University should adopt similar measure as Omni University to promote the online enrollment program and consequently the increase in total enrollment and profits are predictable. To elaborate the argument, the president cites the successful precent in Omni University and current dilemma of Humana University. Although seemingly plausible, the argument is still problematic in failing to clarify several crucial questions.

Firstly, the speaker fails to provide persuasive information to response whether online program is the decisive factor for the declination or not. Apart from online program available, diverse explanations potentially contribute to the success. For instance, if supplementary evidence indicates that the Omni University also executed a series of energy-protective measures last year, the alleged influences of online program should be questioned. These measures, such as requiring faculties and students to turn off the light while leaving, modifying new showerheads to restrict the maximum water flow, are liable to curtail the maintaining expenses on electricity and water. Thus it is likely principally the energy-protective measures instead of online programs that produced such commendable decrease and correspondingly the conclusion presented will be undermined. To comprehensively understand online program's benefits on less expenditure, an thorough and circumstantial evaluation report will be conducive, which could inform to which extent the online program have declined the expenses.

Another question deserved to be further investigated is concerning the necessity of this proposal. Even though circumstantial information justifies the online program’s efficacy in Omni University, it doesn’t necessarily assure that Humana University is bound to receive anticipated sequel. What if the expenditures on maintaining dormitory and classroom merely have inconsiderable impacts on the budget. Instead repair expense of education-related facilities instead of maintaining expenditures, such as experiment devices and the public facilities in campus, accounts for the largest proportion of the financial budget in the past three years. Under this circumstance, the online program can merely ameliorate rather than eradicate the budget intension. Unless the excessive repair problem is effectively resolved, we can prudently speculate the ending of inadequate budget. To contradict the possibilities mentioned above, the president are obliged to provide thorough and sufficient statistic to substantiate that redundant expenditures accounts for large proportion of the overall outlay in last three years.

To comprehensively evaluate the conclusion, the president appraises the problem regarding the feasibility of this proposal, though the memorandum presented are rife with optimistic anticipation. No cogent evidence presented circumstantiates that Humana University possesses ample instructors and technology level to institute the online program, which will undermine the validity. Funding, human resources and current technology are essential requirements for a projected proposal, without the online program is merely a fantasy. Stubborn insistence to the suggestion without prudently considering the resource is doomed to produce counterproductive consequences. Take the human resources for example, without sufficient people to maintain the basic management of the program and experienced lectures to teach, the quality of online program will be jeopardized. Under this circumstance, the online program show no potential in appealing applicants to obtain revenue and the reputation of Humana University will certainly be stained. Therefore, the president should answer whether the program is feasible grounded on research.

Conclusively, while we concede the well-intention of the author, the argument is comparatively fragile. Before executing, the question about the feasibility, the necessity and the influence of online program should be reconsidered meticulously.

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