“我把托福踩脚下的作文贴10.30开始

我把托福踩脚下

先写点感受：
拜读了依晨的写作贴，她对写作认真的态度给我留下了深刻印象。
希望我自己也能认真踏实的完成每一篇作文贴，在写作上取得进步。
2012年10月30日开贴
不积跬步，无以至千里；不积小流，无以成江海  从每一天的坚持开始。

txwilliam

回来你的作文我可能晚点给你看，我的作文今天有可能就算了，也有可能继续？哈，
qq多少？

我把托福踩脚下

谢谢意见。综合最近老是抓不好细节。 检查的时候主要是语法，要是point写偏题了， 也没办法修改了。独立我再整理一下逻辑

txwilliam

The lecture discusses that new rules which published in 1990 changed whole archaeological field in Britain that refutes the main idea in the reading passage that the science of archaeology and old cultural artifacts faced with serious problems there. The new guidance improved situation in all three areas discussed in reading passage.

First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that many valuable artifacts cannot be protested （拼写小失误）well. She argues that new guidance stated that before construction projects started, it had to been examined by archaeologists to see if this site is interesting or valuable. If it is, the next step was that builder, archaeologists and local government have to work together and do plans to preserve artifacts and important site.还有细节吧

Furthermore, while the passage declares that archeologists suffered a bad financial supports and could not be paid by government any more, the professor contradicts this by saying that any worker in this field could be paid by Construction Company but not by government. Additionally, the company also could pay everything included examining and other works under this constructions project. Besides, she mentions that company provided funding to allow archaeologist to work far-growing what they could not do in the past.

Finally, the passage asserts that the career fell in trouble in Britain due to unpaid work and less positions, but the lecture rebuts the idea and saying that the new statement ruled that company paid all for archaeological works, such as evaluating preserved area, doing plans, professor manner(?这个我也没听好), processing date and writing report or article. A lot of unpaid works didn't process before but can be done now. What’s more, increasing work opportunity absolutely increased the number of worker in archaeology.

点都全没问题，挺好的，我想请教你一个问题，就是你的综合写作之后，你是先对照材料检查对一下点全不全，还是就检查完语法，就完了哈，

txwilliam

There is a hot topic people discuss whether governmentshould neglect environmental concerns for achieving the ultimate goal toincrease economic growth. Different people hold different perspectives. Somepeople believe that nothing is more important than economic growth so peopleshould take economy as the foremost concern while others hold the positiveattitude of environmental friendship. From my perspective, government whoneglects environmental protest would be a featherbrain.


To begin with, a swift economic growth must be based on agood environment around. Nobodydislikes a gorgeous landscape, a comfortable house garden, or a tidy street,doesn’t it?! A goodsurrounding which could be quiet and clean, maybe with flower favor or singingfrom birds absolutely would attract more people than a smelly and poor placewould do. For example, my hometown where locates close to a crystalriver intrigues thousands travelers and hikers to come here. I am proud of mytown because we have green hills and mountains covered with lush vegetation,and big green canopy with many sorts of birds. In this case, local governordetermined to develop tourism there in order to increase the overall GDP of mytown. Based on the effective environmental protests and renewable naturalresource concerning, tourism has become a major financial resource in my townuntil today. At least of me, wouldn’t imagine what will change without goodlocal environment.


Moreover, it is unwise decision that government doesnothing to awful circumstance. The most direct hurt would be an overwhelmedenvironmental contamination. Take some examples, an awful air pollution for anunlimited private cars, or messy water or lake pollution for uncontrolledchemistry industry, or a nuclear leakage accident for hasty construction ofpower plant. For instance, in order to raise income, some local travellingagencies extend animal- hunting times and uncontrolled quantities of hiker ortraveler rather than thinking of the landscape's ability of adaptation. At end,the animals have gone away, and splendid landscape and attraction places have become barrenwhile they trampled upon natural green vegetative thousands times more thanbefore. On the other hand, one indirect result will come out if nobody paysattention to condition changing, travelers would not come back any more becausethere is nothing can attract travelers; local residents also will move to newplace as a result of heavy smoking and big noise from around industries. Thus,It is nonsense to develop economy.


Besides, it is reported by American Scientific Magazinesthat people ability of hearing has impaired by 20 percent than in the pastamong recent 30 years due to a seemingly uncritical noise pollution whichpossibly comes from living nearby train station, industry or shopping mall andso on. Thus, to individual, lives in a quiet and comfort neighborhood would behelpful to do his/ her social work better. Both of social development andeconomy growth must depend on its local residence and constructors, I believethat government see this point clearly.


In general, economy and environment coordinate as a whole.A poor environment causes a barren economy. From history, People are good attapping surroundings to develop economy, but they are lack of idea andexperience to recover environment as it in the past. Government who relies onsacrificing environment only to save economy is really fatuous. Anyway, government should take along-term look to develop economy and protest local environment.


好词，好句，好文章，我感觉在加强一下逻辑，就更好了，没什么大问题，看看老美的分文吧，加油，我的也发过去了，哈

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Integrated Writing: TPO 16

The lecture discusses that new rules which published in 1990 changed whole archaeological field in Britain that refutes the main idea in the reading passage that the science of archaeology and old cultural artifacts faced with serious problems there. The new guidance improved situation in all three areas discussed in reading passage.

First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that many valuable artifacts cannot be protested well. She argues that new guidance stated that before construction projects started, it had to been examined by archaeologists to see if this site is interesting or valuable. If it is, the next step was that builder, archaeologists and local government have to work together and do plans to preserve artifacts and important site.

Furthermore, while the passage declares that archeologists suffered a bad financial supports and could not be paid by government any more, the professor contradicts this by saying that any worker in this field could be paid by Construction Company but not by government. Additionally, the company also could pay everything included examining and other works under this constructions project. Besides, she mentions that company provided funding to allow archaeologist to work far-growing what they could not do in the past.

Finally, the passage asserts that the career fell in trouble in Britain due to unpaid work and less positions, but the lecture rebuts the idea and saying that the new statement ruled that company paid all for archaeological works, such as evaluating preserved area, doing plans, professor manner(?这个我也没听好), processing date and writing report or article. A lot of unpaid works didn't process before but can be done now. What’s more, increasing work opportunity absolutely increased the number of worker in archaeology.

我把托福踩脚下

超时完成

21 December
Independent Writing: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns.
Integrated Writing: TPO 16

There is a hot topic people discuss whether government should neglect environmental concerns for achieving the ultimate goal to increase economic growth. Different people hold different perspectives. Some people believe that nothing is more important than economic growth so people should take economy as the foremost concern while others hold the positive attitude of environmental friendship. From my perspective, government who neglects environmental protest would be a featherbrain.


To begin with, a swift economic growth must be based on a good environment around. Nobody dislikes a gorgeous landscape, a comfortable house garden, or a tidy street, doesn’t it?! A good surrounding which could be quiet and clean, maybe with flower favor or singing from birds absolutely would attract more people than a smelly and poor place would do. For example, my hometown where locates close to a crystal river intrigues thousands travelers and hikers to come here. I am proud of my town because we have green hills and mountains covered with lush vegetation, and big green canopy with many sorts of birds. In this case, local governor determined to develop tourism there in order to increase the overall GDP of my town. Based on the effective environmental protests and renewable natural resource concerning, tourism has become a major financial resource in my town until today. At least of me, wouldn’t imagine what will change without good local environment.


Moreover, it is unwise decision that government does nothing to awful circumstance. The most direct hurt would be an overwhelmed environmental contamination. Take some examples, an awful air pollution for an unlimited private cars, or messy water or lake pollution for uncontrolled chemistry industry, or a nuclear leakage accident for hasty construction of power plant. For instance, in order to raise income, some local travelling agencies extend animal- hunting times and uncontrolled quantities of hiker or traveler rather than thinking of the landscape's ability of adaptation. At end, the animals have gone away, and splendid landscape and attraction places have become barren while they trampled upon natural green vegetative thousands times more than before. On the other hand, one indirect result will come out if nobody pays attention to condition changing, travelers would not come back any more because there is nothing can attract travelers; local residents also will move to new place as a result of heavy smoking and big noise from around industries. Thus, It is nonsense to develop economy.


Besides, it is reported by American Scientific Magazines that people ability of hearing has impaired by 20 percent than in the past among recent 30 years due to a seemingly uncritical noise pollution which possibly comes from living nearby train station, industry or shopping mall and so on. Thus, to individual, lives in a quiet and comfort neighborhood would be helpful to do his/ her social work better. Both of social development and economy growth must depend on its local residence and constructors, I believe that government see this point clearly.


In general, economy and environment coordinate as a whole. A poor environment causes a barren economy. From history, People are good at tapping surroundings to develop economy, but they are lack of idea and experience to recover environment as it in the past. Government who relies on sacrificing environment only to save economy is really fatuous. Anyway, government should take a long-term look to develop economy and protest local environment.

阿伦艾弗森

The lecture argues the accuracy of Chevalier's memoir which refutes the main idea in the reading passage that Chevalier made up many events in his memoir to make his life seem glamorous.



First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that Chevalier is actually poor because the evidence showed that he borrowed a large amount of money from a Swiss merchant. She（最好用pro，会认为是chevalier） argues that Chevalier's loan doesn't enough mean that he is poor；It is more possible that he used this loan to cope with his cash emergency and buffered the waiting of his cash arrive from selling something.（covert access to cash）



Second, while the passage describes that some critics are skeptical about the detailed conversation between him and Votaire, the professor contradicts this by saying that Chevalier noted down everything included conversation’s contents at each night, then tapped his notes when he finally proposed to write his memoir.



Finally, the passage questions Chevalier's story about escaping from Italy's prison with making a hole in the ceiling, and speculates that Chevalier jailers were bribes to free him. The professor in lecture rebuts this by saying that none of powerful friends refers to this prison case. （有一个和其他狱友的小比较可以加上）Additionally, the old policemen documents pointed out that ceiling of prison room had been repaired that convinces people to trust chevalier’s escape as he said in his memoir .

我把托福踩脚下

12.13综合tpo 8
The lecture argues the accuracy of Chevalier's memoir which refutes the main idea in the reading passage that Chevalier made up many events in his memoir to make his life seem glamorous.



First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that Chevalier is actually poor because the evidence showed that he borrowed a large amount of money from a Swiss merchant. She argues that Chevalier's loan doesn't enough mean that he is poor；It is more possible that he used this loan to cope with his cash emergency and buffered the waiting of his cash arrive from selling something.



Second, while the passage describes that some critics are skeptical about the detailed conversation between him and Votaire, the professor contradicts this by saying that Chevalier noted down everything included conversation’s contents at each night, then tapped his notes when he finally proposed to write his memoir.



Finally, the passage questions Chevalier's story about escaping from Italy's prison with making a hole in the ceiling, and speculates that Chevalier jailers were bribes to free him. The professor in lecture rebuts this by saying that none of powerful friends refers to this prison case. Additionally, the old policemen documents pointed out that ceiling of prison room had been repaired that convinces people to trust chevalier’s escape as he said in his memoir .

我把托福踩脚下

谢谢依晨
eating habit --diet perference
2段的首句前半句 误导本段内容--。应该改为Having a friend with fun is not exclusive to have a friend who is helpful.