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lmylacoste

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严重超时8分钟，还检查了两分钟，共计40分钟，明天打得要更快！
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should focus its budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development.


   erhaps no issue is as significant to people's daily life as that one whether  or not the government will allocate its budget more on environmental protection than on economic part. A myriad of responses people may hold on the topic concerning the issue regarding what should the budget mainly aim at.  Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost in my mind is that the environment is the primary consideration.
   To begin with, the top of list of my mind is that environment intrinsically ties the people 's health. Both common sense and the experience from the daily life inform us that staying in a severely polluted environment will definitely result in a sheer number of illness. In this situation, it is indisputable that we need more funds to improve the living place. To make my demonstrate more profoundly and comprehensively, I'd like to refer to a survey conducted by the Social Department in PeKing University from which my point can draw strength, since no one will deny the fact displayed by number. It shows that the odds of people to be caught by untreatable illness is 30% higher in place where is surrounded by serious pollution like released chemical gas and polluted water than those who live in place filled with trees and across by clean rivers.
   In addition, another equally compelling and essential argument is that the environment is one of the dominant force for the development of a country, as the city Shanghai aptly illustrates. In east China Shanghai is the most promising city, since it  reserves rich natural resource which may be an advantages for tourism besides its financial position. More people will be attracted to such a place with comfortable living conditions, a striking contrast with those industry cities. From the part-and-parcel of our daily life, this reply may lead those people who have been told for so long by so many who are selfish and short-sighted to put their hands on the arc of the "budget" to bend it once more toward environment.
   Admittedly, it is necessary to suspend hastily proceeding to the conclusion before the opposition has a hearing under some conditions. Human nature being what it is, the investment on economic development will nevertheless be considered to be capable of improving the economy. There is no better illustration to demonstrate the point than my own experience. During the recent years, especially in the financial crisis, my country put a lot of money to develop the economic development and it did work. It is essential for people to be aware of the benefits of this kind of investment, but this case is so specific because it mainly deals with the bad influence caused by the crisis and this kind situation in favor of economic development is so occasional and negligible that it fails to constitute a sufficient support for the adverse side. After carefully weighing the advantages and weaknesses, the obvious upshot is that environment protection should obtain more attention and reinforcement.
   In conclusion, although someone may still be unconvinced, the reasons and factors why the environment should be the best candidate for national budgets I have analyzed will at least serve the purpose to propel them to be aware of various dimensions of . And I hope more people will share the same idea with me.

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The reading passage casts light on the ways to limit the spread of the cane toad population in Australia. The professor's lecture covers the same topic, yet with the totally opposite attitude. Likewise, the professor utilizes three distinctive reasons to justify her perspective.

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the reading passage that the national fence will be an effective method to keep the cane toad population from increasing. On the contrary, she asserts that the national fence is not likely to be successful. To be specific, her claim is grounded on the fact that the river flow will easily carry the young toad and toad's egg from one side to the other side despite the fence because they are mostly living near the river. Apparently, the viewpoint of the professor is definitely incompatible with the reading passage.

In addition, as well-defined as the reading material, the professor's statement once again contradicts with the points made in the reading material. She contends that although it is possible for volunteers to trap and even destroy the cane toads, this campaign will bring about a extremely bad influence on the related frog species, some of which are in danger, because the when these frog species are young , it is difficult to tell one from another. Clearly, having taken these reasons into consideration, the professor has sounded doubts on the campaign.

What's more, the reading pinpoints that the disease-causing virus will be a good way to restrict the cane toad's population for the virus is specially designed, not harmful to most of infected species. However, the professor challenges that solution by arguing that this virus will influence the original habitat of the cane toad and even destroy the ecology system. She said that this virus may have an bad influence on America where is the original habitat of cane toad through the transportation of some infected cane toads by researchers. And once the native cane toads are infected by this virus, the whole ecology system will be broken because the cane toads are the vital part in that system.

In conclusion, the professor discerns the drawbacks of the reading material and with one more step to reveal that the fallacious argument needs a closer scrutiny.

In addition, as well-defined as the reading material, the professor's statement once again contradicts with the points made in the reading material. She contends that although it is possible for volunteers to trap and even destroy the cane toads, this campaign will bring about a extremely bad influence on the related frog species, some of which are in danger, because the when these frog species are young , it is difficult to tell one from another. Clearly, having taken these reasons into consideration, the professor has sounded doubts on the campaign.

What's more, the reading pinpoints that the disease-causing virus will be a good way to restrict the cane toad's population for the virus is specially designed, not harmful to most of infected species. However, the professor challenges that solution by arguing that this virus will influence the original habitat of the cane toad and even destroy the ecology system. She said that this virus may have an bad influence on America where is the original habitat of cane toad through the transportation of some infected cane toads by researchers. And once the native cane toads are infected by this virus, the whole ecology system will be broken because the cane toads are the vital part in that system.

In conclusion, the professor discerns the drawbacks of the reading material and with one more step to reveal that the fallacious argument needs a closer scrutiny.

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the reading passage that the national fence will be an effective method to keep the cane toad population from increasing. On the contrary, she asserts that the national fence is not likely to be successful. To be specific, her claim is grounded on the fact that the river flow will easily carry the young toad and toad's egg from one side to the other side despite the fence because they are mostly living near the river. Apparently, the viewpoint of the professor is definitely incompatible with the reading passage.

In addition, as well-defined as the reading material, the professor's statement once again contradicts with the points made in the reading material. She contends that although it is possible for volunteers to trap and even destroy the cane toads, this campaign will bring about a extremely bad influence on the related frog species, some of which are in danger, because the when these frog species are young , it is difficult to tell one from another. Clearly, having taken these reasons into consideration, the professor has sounded doubts on the campaign.

What's more, the reading pinpoints that the disease-causing virus will be a good way to restrict the cane toad's population for the virus is specially designed, not harmful to most of infected species. However, the professor challenges that solution by arguing that this virus will influence the original habitat of the cane toad and even destroy the ecology system. She said that this virus may have an bad influence on America where is the original habitat of cane toad through the transportation of some infected cane toads by researchers. And once the native cane toads are infected by this virus, the whole ecology system will be broken because the cane toads are the vital part in that system.

In conclusion, the professor discerns the drawbacks of the reading material and with one more step to reveal that the fallacious argument needs a closer scrutiny.

Crystal的秋天

There is perhaps no issue morecontroversial than this one whether or not people are healthier healthier in currentsituation than status quo ante. A myriad of responses people may hold on thetopic concerning the issue regarding what benefits or threatens the developmentof science and technology has brought to us. Although the individual's tastedoes differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that it is more likely forpeople to keep fit.

First of all, the top of the list of myviewpoints is that a good physical condition is intrinsically tied with thefood people have. From common sense and experience from our daily lives, themore diverse and nutritious the meals a person has, more healthy healthier he or she will be.And thanks to our advanced technology and developed trade network, we not onlydo not worry about the food supply, but also we may even enjoy a variety of things eat things 好奇怪 what we want toeat. To make my demonstration more comprehensive, I would like to refer to theexperience of my father from which my point can draw strength. In that timewhen my father was just a child, the food was insufficient to meet all people'sneed and starving was so common that my father could not absorb enoughnutrients which unfortunately limited his height and left him a weak body. But now he is as healthy as otherssince he can have anything he wants without any worries. 觉得这句话在这个例子里不是很恰当，最好拿过去的人跟今天的人比，因为你前面已经讲了父亲这辈都是缺乏充足的营养和食物，现在生活条件好了，拿他和其他人对比不是很恰当 And as for us,who live in such a peaceful and fluent time, the physical conditions of us areobviously better than those lived in the past.

In addition, another compelling pointworth being mentioned is that we can take part in a lot of exercise due tothe new equipments and facilities in gyms and the government and media lay emphasis on the importance ofphysical exercise dueto 后面不能接句子, as my ownexperience aptly illustrates. When I am in childhood, I never went to thestadiums or gyms because of the unreliable and outdated equipments. However, with more and morepeople having realized that the sports can help them keep fit and the public equipments having beenestablished sponsored by government, now I can enjoy the sports convenientlyand comfortably. The reply from the part-and-parcel of my daily life may leadthose who have been told for so long by so many, who are cynical, fearful anddoubtful, to put their hands on the arc of their credit to bend it toward thatthe development of the country is beneficial to people's well-being.

Admittedly, it is necessary for us to cut short the relentless pacetoward the assertion, before the opposition has been taken into consideration.Human being what it is, the development will to some extent increase thecompetition so that the stress level will correspondingly rise. There is nobetter illustration than this one. 模版痕迹很严重，导致作者的观点被掩藏在很复杂的句子里面不突出My best friendJack works in a computer company. It's a famous company, 有转折关系吗？ the requirement for its employees isalso strict. The employees will be evaluated quarterly and the unqualifiedones, who may fail to accomplish the herculean tasks, will be dismissed. This kind of cases shouldbe taken into account, but it is too occasional and specific because most of ushave easier and happier lives than elder generation. 其实前面有了because应该不需要so了So it fails to constitute a sufficient support for the adverse side.After weighing the pro and con, the obvious upshot is that health is muchcloser to us now.

In sum, although some people remain unconvinced about my demonstration,the reasons and factors--we have more food and more facilities--will at leastserve the purpose to propel those opponents to notice the various dimensions ofthe issue and reconsider the parts they have ignored. Hence, if now let youchoose between the past andthe present as the answer to the issue, will not you consider the present amore persuasive candidate for that question?

lmylacoste

There is perhaps no issue more controversial than this one whether or not people are more healthyhealthier in current situation than status quo ante. A myriad of responses people may hold on the topic concerning the issue regarding what benefits or threatens the development of science and technology has brought to us. Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that it is more likely for people to keep fit.

First of all, the top of the list of my viewpoints is that a good physical condition is intrinsically tied with the food people have. From common sense and experience from our daily lives, the more diverse and nutritious the meals a person has, more healthy healthier he or she will be. And thanks to our advanced technology and developed trade network, we not only do not worry about the food supply, but also we may even enjoy a variety of things what we want to eat. To make my demonstration more comprehensive, I would like to refer to the experience of my father from which my point can draw strength. In that time when my father was just a child, the food was insufficient to meet all people's need and starving was so common that my father could not absorb enough nutrients which unfortunately limited his height and left him a weak body. But now he is as healthy as others since he can have anything he wants without any worries. And as for us, who live in such a peaceful and fluent time, the physical conditions of us are obviously better than those lived in the past.

In addition, another compelling point worth being mentioned is that we can take part in a lot of exercise due to the new equipments and facilities in gyms and the government and media lay emphasis on the importance of physical exercise, as my own experience aptly illustrates. When I am in childhood, I never went to the stadiums or gyms because of the unreliable and old equipments. However, with more and more people having realized that the sports can help them keep in the optimized conditions and the public equipments having been established sponsored by government, now I can enjoy the sports conveniently and comfortably. The reply from the part-and-parcel of my daily life may lead those who have been told for so long by so many, who are cynical, fearful and doubtful, to put their hands on the arc of their credit to bend it toward that the development of the country is beneficial to people's well-being.

Admittedly, it is necessary for us to cut short the relentless pace toward the assertion, before the opposition has been taken into consideration. Human being what it is, the development will to some extent increase the competition so that the stress level will correspondingly rise. There is no better illustration than this one. My best friend Jack works in a computer company. It's famous company, but the requirement for its employees is also strict. The employees will be evaluated quarterly and the unqualified ones, who may fail to accomplish the herculean tasks will be dismissed. This kind of cases should be taken into account, but it is too occasional and specific because most of us have easier and happier lives than elder generation. so it fail to constitute a sufficient support for the adverse side. After weighing the pro and con, the obvious upshot is that health is much closer to us now.

In sum, although some people remain unconvinced about my demonstration, the reasons and factors--we have more food and more facilities--will at least serve the purpose to propel those opponents to notice the various dimensions of the issue and reconsider the parts they have ignored. Hence, if now let you choose the past or the present as the answer to the issue, will not you consider the present a more persuasive candidate for that question?

Crystal的秋天

There isperhaps no issue more controversial than this one whether the current mediawill bring about more benefits or not on youngster's behavior. A myriad ofresponses people may hold on the topic concerning the issue regarding what rolethe movies and television play on the young generation. Although the individual' 少了s taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mindis that these media programs will be beneficial to young people.
First of all, onthe top of the list of my viewpoint is that these programs will help youngpeople keep optimistic attitude to confront the annoyed annoying problems and herculean challenges.From common sense and experience from in our daily lives, a lot of programs convey us themeaningful stories what may be the fountain of our perseverence perversance. To make my demonstration morecomprehensive, I would like to refer to the experience of my own from which mypoint can draw strength. The most unforgetable unforgettable movie I remembered have seen is the old man and the seawhich described 一般现在时就好，表客观事实 a man who had caught a big fish but lost it during thefight with the shark. The movie is consisted with simple epsoides episodes, but I was moved a lot since the senseof not giving up and the bravery to fight a shark impressed on my mind and Ilearned that maybe the case will not end up with a happy ending, but if we donot 可以这样用嘛？attemptto try what wecan get is only failure.
In addition,another essential point worth being mentioned is that these programs willsometimes give us inspiration and improve us to be excellent, as this story ofmine aptly illustrates. I have watched 缺冠词 movie, an especially meaningful lesson for me. Although I cannot rememberthe exact name, what happened to the main character, 加个转折词what responses she made to the unfortunate live and whatachievement she finally got left me a deep impact. Her parents were not likeours. Both of them were died when she was in senior high school and there wasno money source for her. But she was a persistent person and a hard-workingstudent and she was admitted by Harvard University. The parts shock me mostwere that she studied on the underground train because of no place for her tocome back and that she accomplished such an impossible mission through her work.Inspired by her story, I determined to study harder. The reply from the movies may lead those who have beentold for so long by so many这句话意思很模糊，没特别明白你讲什么, who are cynical, fearful and doubtful, to put their handson the arc of the trust to bend it toward the benefits of the media programs.
Admittedly, it isnecessary for us to cut short the relentless pace 这个词表达的准确吗？toward the assertion until theopposition has been taken into consideration. Human being what it is, someprograms producer will add some volence violence and other factors--which may have anegative influence on young people--into their products to get more profits.There is no better illustration than this one. The most popular films like theIron Man which successfully attract so many young audiences are full of volence violence and young people are actually becomingvolent violent compared with their counterparts.However, under the supervision from parents and the regulation of thegovernment, the negative effects are down on their luck这句话什么意思？; Most young people will be insulatedfrom these dangers. After carefully weighing the pro and con, the strikingupshot is that the media programs will lead young generation to be better.
In sum, althoughsomeone will remain unconvinced about my demonstration, the reasons andfactors--reinforcing the ability to face difficulties and encouraging boostingour ambitious attitude--will at least serve the purpose to propel the opponentsto notice the various dimensions of the issue and reconsider the parts theyhave ignored before. Hence, if you expect to have a colorful life, why not letthe movies and televisions to embellish your part-and parcel daily activities.


LZ的单词量好大，有的地方标注出来，可能是错误，也可能是我理解有误。文章好长。。。。。而且读起来长句，大词也多，读起来有点吃力。语言上肯定没什么大问题，加油！冲满分！

lmylacoste

The reading passage casts light on the three approachs approaches people will take advantage to control the spread of cane toad. The professor's lecture covers the same topic, yet with a totally opposite attitude. Likewise, the professor utilizes three distinctive reasons to justify her perspective.

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the passage that the national fence will be useful to limit the skyrocketing population of cane toad. On the contrary, she asserts that this measure will not have any influence on the species. To be specific, her claim is grounded on the fact that the young toads and the toad eggs are located near the rivers and streams. And no matter where the fence is, the rivers and streams will carry the young toads and toad eggs from this side to the other side to colonize the new place. Apparently the professor's point is incompatible with the reading passage.

In addition, as well-defined as the reading passage is, the professor's statement once again contradicts the points made in the reading. She contends that although the volunteers will capture and destroy the cane toads, the untrained people may also inadvertantly inadvertently damage the native frogs some of which are even in danger. Besides, when the frogs are young, it is hard for people to distinct the cane toad from other frogs. Having taken this fact into consideration, the professor has sound doubts on the reading passage.

What's more, the reading passage pinpoints that the disease-causing virus is capable to control the cane toad population and will have slight negative on other animals. However, the professor challenges the point by arguing that the virus may cause the native cane toad to experience a disaster and may even hurt the whole eco-system. To further verify her point, she claimed that the virus in Australia will influence the cane toad in America through the transportation by the researchers and pet collectors. And since the cane toads in America are the native dwellers and important parts of the whole eco-system, the virus may have a negative effect on it. The credibility starts shrink, after the reason has been taken into account.

In sum, the professor carefully discerns the drawbacks of the reading passage and takes one more step to reveal that the fallacious needs a closer scrutiny.

lmylacoste

There is perhaps no issue more controversial than this one whether the current media will bring about more benefits or not on youngster's behavior. A myriad of responses people may hold on the topic concerning the issue regarding what role the movies and television play on the young generation. Although the individual' taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that these media programs will be beneficial to young people.
First of all, on the top of the list of my viewpoint is that these programs will help young people keep optimistic attitude to confront the annoyed problems and herculean challenges. From common sense and experience from our daily lives, a lot of programs convey us the meaningful stories what may be the fountain of our perseverence perversance. To make my demonstration more comprehensive, I would like to refer to the experience of my own from which my point can draw strength. The most unforgetable unforgettable movie I remembered is the old man and the sea which described a man who had caught a big fish but lost it during the fight with the shark. The movie is consisted with simple epsoides episodes, but I was moved a lot since the sense of not giving up and the bravery to fight a shark impressed on my mind and I learned that maybe the case will not end up with a happy ending, but if we do not attempt to try what we can get is only failure.
In addition, another essential point worth being mentioned is that these programs will sometimes inspire and improve us to be excellent, as this story of mine aptly illustrates. I have watched movie, a especially meaningful lesson for me. Although I cannot remember the exact name, what happened to the main character, what responses she made to the unfortunate live and what achievement she finally got left me a deep impact. Her parents were not like ours. Both of them were died when she was in senior high school and there was no money source for her. But she was a persistent person and a hard-working student and she was admitted by Harvard University. The parts shock me most were that she studied on the underground train because of no place for her to come back and that she accomplished such a impossible mission through her work. Inspired by her story, I determine to study harder. The reply from the movies may lead those who have been told for so long by so many, who are cynical, fearful and doubtful, to put their hands on the arc of the trust to bend it toward the benefits of the media programs.
Admittedly, it is necessary for us to cut short the relentless pace toward the assertion until the opposition has been taken into consideration. Human being what it is, some programs producer will add some volence violence and other factors--which may have a negative influence on young people--into their products to get more profits. There is no better illustration than this one. The most popular films like the Iron Man which successfully attract so many young audience are full of volence violence and young people are actually becoming volent violent compared with their counterparts. However, under the supervision from parents and the regulation of the government, the negative effects are down on their luck; most young people will be insulated from these dangers. After carefully weigh the pro and con, the striking upshot is that the media programs will lead young generation to be better.
In sum, although someone will remain unconvinced about my demonstration, the reasons and factors--reinforcing the ability to face difficulties and encouraging to boost our ambitious attitude--will at least serve the purpose to propel the opponents to notice the various dimensions of the issue and reconsider the parts they have ignored before. Hence, if you expect to have a colorful life, why not let the movies and televisions to embellish your part-and parcel daily activities.

lizchang1990

亲哇,貌似我俩改作业的哈~我的上传了!

浅吟天

黄色 好的，绿色 建议，红色 有问题的
住的地方的网很好~~

There is perhaps no issue more significant for us than this one about whether or not we should take action at first when facing troubles. A myriad of responses people may hold on the topic concerning the issue regarding which the better strategy is（这。能把concerning the issue去掉吗，特复杂而且没有实际内容）. Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that being patient should be the primary consideration.

First of all, on the top of the list of my viewpoints is that patience allows you to have enough time to pierce the problem and find out the solution. From common sense and the experience from our daily lives, if you can keep calm and stay far away from just coming through without any preparation, the consequence will always be fine. To make my demonstration more comprehensive, I would like to refer to the story of my own from which the point can draw further strength. One day, when I decided to go out to attend my friend's wedding, the door of my house was locked. I spared no efforts, but ended up with a failure. The sudden accident did not shock me, and after five-minute cousideration(consideration), I found the security lock was not open. After having unlocked it, I successfully opened the door, and if I insisted on opening it with the security lock unopen unopened, the door might be broken and I would undoubtedly miss the wedding. The lesson from the case is that patience will bring about what we want if you carry it with yourself.(个人觉得这句有点中式哈，当然可能是我没见过这个表达~~普及一下我)

In addition, another compelling point worth being mentioned is that spending a few minutes to consider will give you the ability to find the most suitable help as my own experience aptly illustrates. Once I missed a flight in Heathrow Airport and the airport was cold enough to stay overnight. Besides, I have（过去式） no enough money to live in a local hotel. Thanks to the clear mind and deep thoughts, it occured occurred to me that one of my classmates in high school, who was studying in London, was a good candidate for helping me. What happened next verified that it was a good plan. This reply from the part-and-parcel of my daily life may lead those who have been told for so long by so many, who are doubtful, fearful and cynical, to put their hands on the arc of their trust to bend it towards patience.

Admittedly, it is necessary for us to cut short the relentless paces of the assertion before the opposition has been taken into consideration. There is no better illustration than this one. Human nature being what it is, when meeting with some unpredicted cases, people are inclined to take immediate measures no matter whether it will be useful or not and defend their points by arguing that if not acting timely, you will lose the opportunaties opportunities to molierate meliorate the situation. However, such kind of cases will（这里用一般时会不会好一点？） rarely wind up with good consequences and the successful examples are too specific and occasional to constitute a sufficient support for the adverse side since the situation will always get worse if the action is not thought through thoroughly. After weighing the pro and con, the striking upshot is obvious that people should stay calm when meeting with problems.

In sum, although some people will remain unconvinced about what I have demonstrated, the reasons and factors----the patience will bring us about the information about the core of the problems and the ideal ways and help to solve the herculean challenges----will at least serve the purpose to propel the opponents to notice the various dimensions of the issue and to understand the credibility and persuaiveness persuasiveness of my argument.

弱弱的觉得第一，二个论点：发现问题本质，更好解决问题。其实有点相似。特别是你第一个例子也说了after five-minute ，你找到了suitable way。这就是第二点了~~我也有这个问题，所以我觉得这篇特难。小点不好分。

那，以下是把你当潜力牛给出的建议：
我一直觉得Lmy的功底是很不错的，从口语和作文都看出，模板都很好很好了，不大众化。但我觉得以你的实力你可以跳出模板了！！有些表达不用套句式反而来的明了。你打了600多字呢亲，削减到500字也不会是少字数的，但精炼有力度了！

浅吟天

黄色 好的，绿色 建议，红色 有问题的

The reading casts light on the negative influence on bird population caused by the increase of human populations and settlements and the loss of the traditional suitable lands for birds. The professor's lecture covers the same topic,yet with the totally opposite attitude. Likewise, the professor utilizes three distinctive reasons to justify her perspective.(这是模版还是自己想的，很好)

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the reading passage that the（去掉把，我还等着the more…the more句式出现呢，结果后面没有） more bird habitats have been occupied by human population and settlements and have been converted into urban parts. On the contrary, she asserts that this process of urbanization won't be harmful to birds. To be specific, her point is grounded on the fact that although the urban will affect some bird species, but it will also benefit other species and（我觉得这两者是个递进关系，thus这类要比and好些~） the population of birds will increase. For example the number of some birds will have some increase like seagull and the pigeon（厉害！木有听出来）. And other birds like the hawk will also experience some increase because there will be more food(foods 其实我觉得prey更好啦). Apparently, the professor's point is incompatible with the reading passage.

In addition, as well-defined as the reading passage is, the professor's statement once again contradicts the points made in the reading passage. She contends that despite the increase need of the food, the more productive corn will meet the need of the people with more yields（我个人弱弱的觉得这个不是despite什么不管的问题，后面就是针对前面的，所以这个介词是不是有点问题） and there is no need（我发现你很喜欢用and哈，但这个there be句型和前面的并列我觉得不是很好。这也是一个递进，as a result这类的把） to exploit the wilderness areas. Having taken this evidence into consideration, the professor has sound doubts on the reading passage.

What's more, the reading pinpoints that the increase use of the pesticides will be a significant factor for the decline in birds population. The professor challenges the point by arguing that the birds will not be threatened by the pesticides as the reading tells. To verify her point, she claims that the new and less toxic pesticide will be used and, more importantly, a kind of plant which is resistant to the pest will limit the damages to the bird population because the plant is designed not to attract the insects and the plant itself is not harmful to the birds. The credibility of the reading passage starts to shrink, after the reason has been taken into account.

In sum, the professor carefully discerns the drawbacks of the reading passage and takes one more step to reveal that the fallacious need a close scrutiny.



很好！这是改到现在我见过的最好的模版了。。lz半小时敲出来的？

我没觉得我比你多写了啥啊，你也没漏点的~~~

语法，时态我认真看了，没挑出问题来。

lmylacoste

The reading casts light on the negative influence on bird population caused by the increase of human populations and settlements and the loss of the traditional suitable lands for birds. The professor's lecture covers the same topic, yet with the totally opposite attitude. Likewise, the professor utilizes three distinctive reasons to justify her perspective.

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the reading passage that the more bird habitats have been occupied by human population and settlements and have been converted into urban parts. On the contrary, she asserts that this process of urbanization won't be harmful to birds. To be specific, her point is grounded on the fact that although the urban will affect some bird species, but it will also benefit other species and the population of birds will increase. For example the number of some birds will have some increase like seagull and the pigeon. And other birds like the hawk will also experience some increase because there will be more food. Apparently, the professor's point is incompatible with the reading passage.

In addition, as well-defined as the reading passage is, the professor's statement once again contradicts the points made in the reading passage. She contends that despite the increase need of the food, the more productive corn will meet the need of the people with more yields and there is no need to exploit the wilderness areas. Having taken this evidence into consideration, the professor has sound doubts on the reading passage.

What's more, the reading pinpoints that the increase use of the pesticides will be a significant factor for the decline in birds population. The professor challenges the point by arguing that the birds will not be threatened by the pesticides as the reading tells. To verify her point, she claims that the new and less toxic pesticide will be used and, more importantly, a kind of plant which is resistant to the pest will limit the damages to the bird population because the plant is designed not to attract the insects and the plant itself is not harmful to the birds. The credibility of the reading passage starts to shrink, after the reason has been taken into account.

In sum, the professor carefully discerns the drawbacks of the reading passage and takes one more step to reveal that the fallacious need a close scrutiny.