狗子的作文贴。。还有10天考G求狠拍……11-1更新

d0gzi

Issue 112
Requiring university students to take a variety of courses outside their major fields of study is the best way to ensure that students become truly educated.

Have you ever seen students who can compose heart-touching articles feel so stressed as they lose their science subjects and spend most of their time on their weakest subject of mathematics and physics and barely have time to write and read more? Have you ever seen students tough feel reluctant to learn anything about art apprehension and music are forced to learn those courses as universities think they are “useful”? Have you ever talked with professors who complain that half of the students fall a sound sleep in the classroom because of lack of interest in that compulsory or required course? Thus, I think forcing university students to dabble courses beyond their majors would pose more problems, though merits exist.
First, the speaker implies taking more courses of a larger variety is the very best way to make students more learnt. I concede that students may know more about historical, philosophical and scientific facts than before, yet this is far from giving the ultimate decision of whether a person is educated, or rather, intellectual enough. However, as pointed out by Socrates, an outstanding philosopher in ancient Greek, God has grown a spark in man’s heart. One, and only he/her can, kindle it to a frame. If this is the case, then the essence of education is not about to teach, but to inspire. Thus, it is the students that should take the responsibility to choose different woods or even petrol to keep their flame burning. Imposing and regulating courses out of students’ major then seem ridiculous. As students are given the right to choose their major, they, instead of the university, should have the ability and freedom to choose to whether learn courses in other fields. Forcing students to learn certain subjects because they are useful is like forcing lamb to eat meat as meat is delicious and nutrient.
Additionally, courses irrelevant to their major may not be always considered useful for their careers, most of the time, they are not. Therefore, students may spend much more time studying one subject that not only they are not good at, but turn out to be less useful. For example, as a student majoring in Literature Studies, I as well as many of my classmates find mathematics, one of the compulsory courses we studied for a whole year in Year one, totally useless as normally none of us will take up a job related to mathematics. Even though it is almost useless, we have to spend much time discussing it, as it takes up six credits out of thirty for each semester.
I can not deny this result can result from the inefficiency of curriculum in our university; however, it is impossible for faculties to arrange a curriculum suiting the needs for each and every student, even some of them share the same major. Those who are more capable or curious can choose to learn more diversity of courses, while whose who are more determined can choose to stick to their own major.
To sum up, it may seem to be reasonable for universities set certain requirements and urge students to learn some courses unrelated to their major; students, nevertheless, can learn more effectively and freely if they are given the freedom to choose whether to do this or not.

d0gzi

The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary 预算的priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
1.    twice,same residents
2.    collect from   … government
3.    schools that

This argument is well-presented yet ill-conceived. The author assumes that Parson City residents pay more attention to good education as they place the budgetary priority on education. Though this argument seems to be plausible at the first sight, there are several flaws preventing it from being logically convincing.
To begin with, a problem arises when the author assumes that government in P City spends more on education as it has been put a greater budgetary priority. Although it is entirely possible, the author fails to offer sufficient evidence about the real circumstances to back his idea. Therefore, it is also likely that the government finally fails to do so and the real amount of money applied to education in P City is less.
In the second place, the arguer assumes that schools in P City receives more money as recently education system in P City receives twice as much as that in C city. Nevertheless, this is not necessarily the case, as the arguer does not offer enough evidence to bolster his idea. A proper alternative is not far to seek. The author fails to provide how long the time period is, thus maybe he is comparing the amount of money which schools receives in two years with those C city receives in a year. Or perhaps this is just aberration; in other time C city has always support its education system with much more money. We just do not know. Only through providing more evidence could the arguer convince me that schools in P City have always been receiving much more money.
Finally, even if the author has provided evidence for the foregoing assumptions, one crucial problem still remains when he/she suggests that schools in P city and C city need the similar amount of money.  It is also highly possible that C city does not have as many school as P city does. Even through there are similar amount of residents in P and C city, the number of students who need to attend school might be quite different. Moreover, it is also highly possible there are only one big public school in C city and many private schools of good quality that the government need to support, while in P city the government has to spend more as there are much more public schools. Additionally, even if all these are true, we simply can not judge the merit of a education system from the amount of money its government supplies, as these cities differ in the purchase abilities of residents, salaries of their teachers and different prices for teaching instruments and tools. Thus, to bolster his assumption, the author will need to explain why none of other alternatives are able to sustain.
To sum up, the author jumps to a hasty conclusion that P city enjoys a great education based on a chain of problematic assumptions. To support those assumptions, the author must offer more persuasive evidences and take every possibility into consideration.


可怜自己之前太懒。。。模板弄的太晚了。。所以填起来感觉好费劲= = 。。。在纠结要不要到时候先打模板再填。。。

d0gzi

True success can be measured primarily in terms of the goals one sets for oneself.



The speaker contents that it is goals one sets for himself that matters for true success, rather than other factors. I generally agree with this statement, as it is the ideal condition that every man pursues- to be oneself and fight for and uphold one’s dream and virtue. Yet, sometimes human beings, as the product of the interdependent society, have to yield to the values and goals set by the society to a certain extent.

First, individuals can not be fully motivated by the values and goals set by the society alone. Even when they have achieved what the whole society may acknowledge as great or outstanding, they can merely feel satisfied or even feel more stressed if their own concept of success has been greatly undermined. Consider the high suicide rate of movie stars, who are regarded as successful people due to their wealth, beauty and impacts on the general public, still always feel unfulfilled as they have to adjust every and each action and emotion to satisfy the general public and the mass media. This kind of example also lies in scientific realm. Einstein devoted twenty years of his life to reconcile the relativity theory and quantum theory and never felt relieved because of his failing in this, after he had already been ranked among the most greatest people in modern society. In this way, life is not about how much praises others give you, but how much applaud you give to yourself.

Additionally, it is important for one to stick to his/her dream and goals, as sometimes the society, whose goals tend to be more pragmatic and thus less ideal, may fail to appreciate individual goals, especially goals and perspectives of prodigies. Consider Van Gogh, who is now regarded as one of the most intellectual painters in human history, devoted his whole life, heart, and soul to painting until he could not even pick up a pencil. He, however, only managed to sell one painting throughout his life. Yet who, in this modern society, can diminish the insight and greatness of Van Gogh? Who can argue Van Gogh is a loser as his goal contradicts with the society in his age?

Admittedly, the standard set by the society to evaluate success has its own merits as well. The society can not hardly prosper or make any progress if every and each individual pursues what they dreams, as no one, if given the chance, is interested in working hard and become slaves of power and money. Moreover, goals of individuals and society are not necessarily mutually exclusive, such as goals for peace, equality, morality, love among neighbors and relatives. Therefore it is possible for people to evaluate their success upon both standards.

To sum up, I generally agree with the speaker that goal of oneself is more effective to evaluate whether one is successful or not, yet goals between society and individuals can be reconciled and over-emphasis on individualism may do harm to the progress of the society.

d0gzi

恩……感觉总是不是很会写……估计这次杀G又要死翘翘了……谢谢版主！

竹林中人

其他两点类似，另外这篇作文ＬＺ写的可能有些匆忙，一些小语法错误没改过来，考试加油，尽力就好

竹林中人

S/he ？
Though seems to be ？
the author assumes attributes the？
the argument also fails to provide statistics about how significant the number of audiences have increased and is像这种结论写出来之前，你肯定有个分析，题目的结论需要什么样的依据或者信息什么的，才可以得到，然后再出来，否则就显得很突兀，每段里面不急于说出自己的结论，重在自己的那个分析推理过程。

竹林中人

Politicians should pursue common ground and reasonable consensus rather than elusive ideals.
22:52-35
I agree with the speaker that most of the times the politicians should be committed to common and reasonable consensus as that is the primary mission and one of the most essential standard to evaluate a politician-whether he has helped the people to come nearer, or even fulfill their basic demands. Nevertheless, there may be some exceptional circumstances under which the politician should choose to fight for the ideals rather than common ideas.

It is reasonable for politicians to take measures according to the general benefit of the general public, considering both our empirical and normative experiences. That is why politicians are being selected-not to govern people, but to lead, help, or even serve them to live a better life. Politicians who fail this mission will always be criticized by the people and may even experience a fall-down. History is replete with such examples. Qinshi Huangdi, the first emperor in China, commanded to burn books of Hundreds of Schools and bury scholars to achieve his ultimate dream- a society without any dispute. That emperor only lasted for few decades and Qinshi Huangdi is always refered to by historians as a despotic tyrant.

Another compelling example demonstrating the drawbacks of commitment to extreme idealism involves the Great Leaps Forward in China. During that period, Chairman Mao, the most influential politician in China at that time, urged people to melt their own pans and pots to produce more metal and thus improve the national GDP. Every and each person was then given a job and asked to eat together in a communal canteen. This action, though embodied the ultimate goal of economical development and absolute equality, failed at last, for that it was merely a dream without considering a common consensus.

However, sometimes elusive ideals can also be beneficial; it serves as a goal for the whole society to strike towards. If were not for a dream and desire for pure equality, peace, happiness, love and care between neighbors and citizens, why should the politicians struggle to find and try out different policies which enhances the stability and prosperity of the whole society? Moreover, the speaker may indicate politicians should follow opinions of most people in opinions by using words like “common” and “consensus”. However, under some special circumstances, it should be the politician who have been selected and voted by the public for his/her insight and sagacity to make decisions based on the ideals and ultimate goals of the whole society. Consider the example of China’s economic reform. Deng Xiaoping, the governor who was in office at that time, insisted the shift from planed economy to socialist market economy though it touched interests of many people and were fiercely opposed to. The main reason for his stubborn commitment lies in his thoroughly understanding of the ultimate goal for that period- to drug the people out of the mire of poverty. Time has proven the insight of his decision as China has ranked among one of the most rapidly developing countries ever since then.

To sum up, the speaker is reasonable when emphasizing the importance of common ground and reasonable consensus, as that is the very foundation why the politician is elected. Yet sometimes it is necessary for a politician to suspense those consensus for a while, or find an alternative yet more beneficial way.

-- by 会员 d0gzi (2012/10/29 23:41:47)

我觉得LZ这篇写的不够好，这个题目可能本身不太好写。政治家们是寻求共识还是寻求政治理想，其实任何政治家都有一个自己的政治理想，然后才聚集到一起形成政党，而并非只是为了寻求和其他的政治家或者民众意见一致。寻求共识只是为了减少实现自己理想的障碍，而并非政治家的目的。当然这是我的理解。另外在写法上，我建议像第三段这样的内容安排以后不要出现，Issue的例子不是主要的，也不是说从例子中归纳观点，而只是对自己观点和分析的一个具体说明。

d0gzi

谢谢版主！！！！111T-T
ORZ!!!!

d0gzi

第一篇ARGUMENT....后天考G真是想死= =
Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.
21:01-41

The author recommends that KICK should include more call-in advice programs to attract a larger number of audiences in Medway. S/he cites the sharply increase of audiences of WCQP radio station who enhances a similar call-in advice as well as a survey which implies many listeners are in favor of such programs. Though seems to be plausible at the first sight, the argument is logically unconvincing in several aspects.

First, the author assumes attributes the success of WCQP absolutely to a measure to enhance advice programs, which was taken two years ago. Yet the author fails to consider other possibilities which may lead to the increasing number of audiences. Perhaps during those two years, WCQP also employed better broadcasters, more amusing other program, better ways to manage the radio station, which are the real factors leading to its success. Without considering and ruling out all these possibilities, the author can not convince me that advice program itself can make the radio station more popular.

Second, the argument also fails to provide statistics about how significant the number of audiences have increased and is. It is entirely possible that the number of audiences of WCQP is still not as great as KICK even after their enhancing of advice programming. If this is the case, then it may not be wise to follow WCQP’s step. Even if WCQP has more audiences than KICK , it still not necessarily indicates such a change will be similarly beneficial, as taste of audiences in Rockville may differ from audiences in Medway.


Third, the argument unfairly assumes that the nation-wide survey of radio listeners’ interests towards call-in services necessarily indicate the preferences of people in this region. However, the author does not provide enough evidence to support his/her idea. It is entirely possible that people in Medway have a preference different from nation-wide taste. Additionally, the credibility of the survey is also a problem. What is the percentage of people who are in favor of call-in programming? Whether there are any other programs that are more popular than call-in ones?  Were participants given enough options to choose or did the questions on the survey misleading? Therefore, it is very likely that there are better alternatives other than call-in programs.


In conclusion, the argument is not well-supported. To convince me that an increased call-in program is a good choice to attract more audiences, the author should not only rule out other possibilities of the success of WCQP, give out statistical evidence to support audiences in Medway share the interests and tastes of those in Rockville, but prove the adaptability of the nation-wide survey to Medway.

竹林中人

mark，上课回来再改。前天没看到，抱歉