d0gzi 狗子狗子最后一周作文贴……把我拍晕吧……

d0gzi

最后剩一周了。

xeyyxzty

According to modern sociology, thereare mainly three types of people in our society: some live in yesterday andalways praise the merits of the past; some seize the day and cherish everyminute to enjoy themselves; and others who work hard for the present to preparefor a better tomorrow. The debatenowadays, however, mainly focuses on which is a(the)(个人感觉这样写比较好哈~) better onebetween the last two. As a young Chinese adult, I agree with the idea to savemoney for future when taking the special condition of my country into account.

At the first place,future is unpredictable yet a considerable and abundant amount of money isalways needed in case of emergency.（亲~观点一样哦）Although it is not likely for us to catch a sever disease because of(because we are young感觉这样比较好哈) our young age, ourparents, who are getting older and olderday by day（感觉好重复呀~getting older gradually怎么样呢）, may not be as strong and resistant to diseases and as we do.What if our beloved parents have a deadly disease yet we cannot afford thecostly medical treatment? Additionally, because of the one child policy, mostyoung adults in Chinalike me is the only child in his/her family, meaning usually there is no oneelse apart from our fiancé(finance?未婚夫/未婚妻之类的？那用Spouse怎么样，管他已婚未婚，还是结没结婚呢，你说呢) to share the burden of the whole family. In this way,saving money seems not only favorable, but necessary.

Additionally, saving money instead of spendingthem on travelling can also prepare us for a better life in future. As atraditional Chinese girl, I have a strong desire to own an apartment of my own.On no account can I achieve this if I keep spending my salary for travelling.What I prefer is not a life full of excitement or risks, but a tranquil andpeaceful one which can provide me with the sense of safety. For an averagechinese boys, however, this issue is of more considerable importance. Accordignto a survey conducted by China Daily, a lead newspaper in China, 97.4% Chinesegirls shows reluctance to marry a boy without the potential topurchase an estate of their own, indicating only a handsome saving can promiseboys in China a future fiance（这种法语词考试的时候能够打出来吗？） to the largest extent.

Although I may save most of my incomings, I willalso spend small amount of it for money for enjoyment and pleasure, such astravelling, to refresh myself and thus I got a part-time job and workedthroughout last summer to earn abundant money to go to Tibet. When I stoodunder the blue sky on a mountain and tried to distinguish the coming directionof the coming breeze, all thetiredness and the miserable moments in life seem worthwhile.
可能理解能力有问题哈，感觉最后一句话的跳转有点快，不是很理解
To sum up, although saving the most part ofincomings prevents us frompleasures and luxuries in life（个人观点哈，这句话有点绝对，感觉好像花钱能带来pleasure一样~）, an abundant andfixed（为什么要fixed呢~不理解） amount of money could prepare for a better future and deal withemergency. Meanwhile, it is also possible for us to apply a certain andrelatively small amount of budget on pleasing activities like travelling to cheerup our life.

fuzhengrui

The reading talks about three recent discoveries by opening（examining可能更好) the T.rex's leg bone, while the professor is skeptical and refutes all these findings by providing counter evidence respectively.

First, according to the writer, hollows in the bones should be the location of blood vessels, while the lecturer contradicts this idea and argues those small branching channels can be something else. These hollows can be made by bacteria. The flexible organic substance found by scientists can also be left by those bacteria.

Additionally, the professor points （out that）those spheres can not be remains of red blood cells, which is contrary to the idea of the writer. Researchers also found this kind of spheres in more(other可能好一点) ancient animals who were not supposed to have red blood cells. In this way, the spheres with dark red color may be a kind of reddish mineral instead of remains of red blood cells.

Last but not least, although the reading material maintains the finding of collagen indicate(s) the existence of collagen matrix, the listening material holds an opposite opinion. Those T. rex are around seventy million years old, and it is not possible for collagen to last that long. The collagen is more likely to come from a much more recent source, such as human skin from researchers who handed the bones.

To sum up, the professor is skeptical about three discoveries in the article and provides evident to prove they are invalid.

这个文章写的不错，要点比我的全多了。。  如果能把上面说的一点小错改了就肯定能得比较高的分^_^

d0gzi

921



According to modern sociology, there are mainly three types of people in our society: some live in yesterday and always praise the merits of the past; some seize the day and cherish every minute to enjoy themselves; and others who work hard for the present to prepare for a better tomorrow. The debate nowadays, however, mainly focus on a better one between the last two. As a young Chinese adult, I agree with the idea to save money for future when taking the special condition of my country into account.

At the first place, future is unpredictable yet a considerable and abundant amount of money is always needed in case of emergency. Although it is not likely for us to catch a sever disease because of our young age, our parents, who are getting older and older day by day, may not as strong and resistant to diseases and as we do. What if our beloved parents have a deadly disease yet we cannot afford the costly medical treatment? Additionally, because of the one child policy, most young adult in China like me is the only child in his/her family, meaning usually there is no one else apart from our fiance to share the burden of the whole family. In this way, saving money seems not only favorable, but necessary.

Additionally, saving money instead of spending them on travelling can also prepare us for a better life in future. As a traditional Chinese girl, I have a strong desire to own an apartment of my own. On no account can I achieve this if I keep spending my salary for travelling. What I prefer is not a life full of excitement or risks, but a tranquil and peaceful one which can provide me with the sense of safety. For an average chinese boys, however, this issue is of more considerable importance. Accordign to a survey conducted by China Daily, a lead newspaper in China, 97.4% Chinese girls shows reluctance to marry a boy without the potential to purchase an estate of their own, indicating only a handsome saving can promise boys in China a future fiance to the largest extent.

Although I may save most of my incomings, I will also spend small amount of it for money for enjoyment and pleasure, such as travelling, to refresh myself and thus I got a part-time job and worked throughout last summer to earn abundant money to go to Tibet. When I stood under the blue sky on a mountain and tried to distinguish the coming direction of the coming breeze, all the tiredness and the miserable moments in life seem worthwhile.

To sum up, although saving the most part of incomings prevents us from pleasures and luxuries in life, an abundant and fixed amount of money could prepare for a better future and deal with emergency. Meanwhile, it is also possible for us to apply a certain and relatively small amount of budge on pleasing activities like travelling to cheer up our life.

stefaniewyh

改20日独立

Recently, a survey has been conducted by a university to find out the most worthwhile investment for a company. Opinions vary from company to company and the diversified answers eventually converged into three: better facilities, more plausible advertisements as well as improvement of skills of employees. As far as I am concerned, applying an abundant budge in enhancing abilities of employees is the most important of all three. It is not only favorable, but necessary, for both new and experienced employees.

At the first place, a great amount of budge should be applied on trainings as it can enhance employees’ knowledge and skills in a certain field. For young people who just graduate from universities without plenty knowledge about their future career, this process is necessary for it exposes them with considerable knowledge, theories before they actually take over a new position. Only through this could a newly-recruited employee be prepared and thus qualified for a certain job. When I first obtained a part-time job as a waitress in a Café shop, I got strict trainings as I had not got a similar job before. After being supervised by a week, I could extinguish French toast from normal bread, Latte from espresso, though all of them are alien for Chinese people. Another girl, however, refused to get that training as she was extremely confident due to her previous working experience as a waitress in a Chinese restaurant. She screwed up by failing to distinguish different types of coffee eventually as there were(was) no need to remember all those complicated coffee names in her former working place. This kind of case is not rare; it is just one of many examples I have experienced. No matter how easy the job seems to be, a training period is always necessary and make new employees qualified for the work.

Though important the training is for new employees, it is also of enormous importance for experienced employees who have stayed in the enterprise for years. Along with the rapid development and change of world economy, senior employees should also be given the chance for re-training, which allows them to know how to use the most-updated equipments and catch up with the trend of market. According to statistics, companies constantly providing employees training program profit 76.8% more than those who do not. This definitely indicates how wise an investment is to improve employees’ skills. A company that is blind to the importance of employee training can not afford(afford在这里感觉不太对，按意思来讲用be rewarded by可能更明白点) the huge price.

Of course, more investments in equipments and advertisements are also needed. However, it is the employees who operate those investments and directly communicate with customers attracted by those advertisements. Without a team consisting of full-devoted and experienced employees, never could a company make a large profit and keep developing.



华丽的倒装句，贴切的例子，还有谁也不知道对不对但很有说服力的数据，很值得学习！

最后一段的观点写的很好，用另外两个方面证明训练员工的重要性！

stefaniewyh

改19日独立

Have you ever gone down names of contacts in your phone but could not even find one to talk with? Have you ever waken up during the midnight feeling so desperate but did not know whom to contact? Have you ever got lost in a strange district but had no one to pick you up? If you have had any of those experiences, you must have known the importance of having a real friend, in other words, a friend who will always be there for you whatever happens.
开头反问排比很好，内容值得学习。
As the saying goes, a friend in need is a friend in deed. A friend who can pull us out of a mire are of enormous importance as they gives us the courage and energy to keep on. On no account could we make it when facing a dilemma without such assistance. According to Nietzsche, an extraordinarily intelligent German philosopher, human beings are poor animals struggling alone in this lonely plant. Though great Nietzsche may be, I am opposed to this particular statement to a certain extent. However terrible and desperate situations could be, I believe the possibility to succeed, because I never fight this lonely life alone. When I first came to University of Macau to study English, I even could not distinguish “think” from “sink”. Local students whose mother tongue are Cantonese declared that they could not understand my English at all, for we are from different regions of China and thus have different accents. It is my friend back home who kept consoling me, assuring me everything will be fine as well as recommending me American TV shows which, by repeatedly watching, helps me to correct a bunch of pronunciation mistakes. I am not arguing friends I made in Macau whom I could go to parties and bars and share joy in life with are not good, yet only that friend could I share all the sorrows and helplessness. Only through the help from that friend（only 用的有点多，可以换个形式，例如he/she is the one 等等）could I pick up my dusted sword from the ground again and kept on fighting.
论证、引用和举例都不错

例子是不是应该用过去时？
Additionally, apart from the enormous（用过一次咯，换个吧，其实great就很好，好和多的意思都能表达） benefice and support a friend who can help you when needed brings, the difficulty to find such a friend also makes it important. It is possible and easy to find a friend who can share jokes and joy from（with） you, yet so hard to find someone to cry together. By paying fifty RMB or several dollars and going to any bar, you can always find tons of people who would like to swing, sing, dance, laugh and even scream with you. But when you feel frustrated, none of them can hand you over a single piece of tissue. According to a survey conducted by the Peking University, one of the leading university in China, 79% teenage and 87.6% adults claim that they have plenty friends who could hang out with yet none of them could they confide to or cry with. Almost every single one of the students involved in the survey, however, shows strong desire to have a "real friend", in other words, a friend who they can share sorrowness（sorrow本身就是名词啊） and sadness with. In this way, the very rareness yet benefice of such kind of friends urges us to find ones to share burdens in our lives with.
你这段物以稀为贵的观点还是挺亮点的，这点我还真没想到！
Of course, there is no definite thing in this world. It is no denying that we always need humorous and happy figures around us to remind us the meaning of life. However, by taking how rare and valuable a friend who can in fact help you in to account, the importance of finding this kind of friends overweighs having a friendly who merely can joke around.



有价值和稀缺的两个观点论证的都很到位

有些细节描述的很有情景感并且包含情感啊，非常值得学习

两个反问排比和倒装都用的挺好的。

词汇再多遍一些吧，多用些形容词或副词可以让文章更生动~

同学，你经常去酒吧吧。。。。。

d0gzi

920 综合

The reading talks about three recent discoveries by opening the T.rex's leg bone, while the professor is skeptical and refutes all these findings by providing counter evidence respectively.

First, according to the writer, hollows in the bones should be the location of blood vessels, while the lecturer contradicts this idea and argues those small branching channels can be something else. These hollows can be made by bacteria. The flexible organic substance found by scientists can also be left by those bacteria.

Additionally, the professor points those spheres can not be remains of red blood cells, which is contrary to the idea of the writer. Researchers also found this kind of spheres in more ancient animals who were not supposed to have red blood cells. In this way, the spheres with dark red color may be a kind of reddish mineral instead of remains of red blood cells.

Last but not least, although the reading material maintains the finding of collagen indicate the existence of collagen matrix, the listening material holds an opposite opinion. Those T. rex are around seventy million years old, and it is not possible for collagen to last that long. The collagen is more likely to come from a much more recent source, such as human skin from researchers who handed the bones.

To sum up, the professor is skeptical about three discoveries in the article and provides evident to prove they are invalid.

d0gzi

……啊……对不起我写的时候没注意是21号的……

19号的我发了。。。才发现当时日期写成“18号"了……我太晕了不好意思……

现在把20号的发上了~~不好意思啦~~~> <

d0gzi

920 独立

The most important investment of a company is to improve the skills of its employees.
12:51-35
Recently, a survey has been conducted by a university to find out the most worthwhile investment for a company. Opinions vary from company to company and the diversified answers eventually converged into three: better facilities, more plausible advertisements as well as improvement of skills of employees. As far as I am concerned, applying an abundant budge in enhancing abilities of employees is the most important of all three. It is not only favorable, but necessary, for both new and experienced employees.

At the first place, a great amount of budge should be applied on trainings as it can enhance employees’ knowledge and skills in a certain field. For young people who just graduate from universities without plenty knowledge about their future career, this process is necessary for it exposes them with considerable knowledge, theories before they actually take over a new position. Only through this could a newly-recruited employee be prepared and thus qualified for a certain job. When I first obtained a part-time job as a waitress in a Café shop, I got strict trainings as I had not got a similar job before. After being supervised by a week, I could extinguish French toast from normal bread, Latte from espresso, though all of them are alien for Chinese people. Another girl, however, refused to get that training as she was extremely confident due to her previous working experience as a waitress in a Chinese restaurant. She screwed up by failing to distinguish different types of coffee eventually as there were no need to remember all those complicated coffee names in her former working place. This kind of case is not rare; it is just one of many examples I have experienced. No matter how easy the job seems to be, a training period is always necessary and make new employees qualified for the work.

Though important the training is for new employees, it is also of enormous importance for experienced employees who have stayed in the enterprise for years. Along with the rapid development and change of world economy, senior employees should also be given the chance for re-training, which allows them to know how to use the most-updated equipments and catch up with the trend of market. According to statistics, companies constantly providing employees training program profit 76.8% more than those who do not. This definitely indicates how wise an investment is to improve employees’ skills. A company that is blind to the importance of employee training can not afford the huge price.

Of course, more investments in equipments and advertisements are also needed. However, it is the employees who operate those investments and directly communicate with customers attracted by those advertisements. Without a team consisting of full-devoted and experienced employees, never could a company make a large profit and keep developing.

stefaniewyh

亲啊。。你写的这是21号的独立。。。。。。
我明天写完再帮你改吧。
你19号的还写不？