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猫和鸭

《写作小分队》鲜花村
know about the events happening around the world that do not affect our life.D\A



As the modern society develops, there is a debate over whether we know about the events happening around the world that affect our life. Different people hold different opinions on this topic because of their distinct backgrounds. Some people arrest that it do not affect their life.In contrast, I prefer the view that know about events happening around the world that affect our life. My view can be greatly substantiated by following discussions.



The frist reason I want to put forward is that know about the event,especially,the security problem of different country or place really affect our life. A particular example for this is my parents who want to realize their dream that have a long trip by themself on Middle East,like Iran,Turkey...They concerned about the event happening around there before they would set out. By the news.,They know there had the bad situation because countries of Middle East were at war with each other. There is no denying that the security of Middle East have gone from bad to worse and it will risk the life. So they were compelled to give up having the long trip there. this example proves that know about events happening around the world is really important on our life.

The second reason I want to put forward is that know about the events happening around the world can make business avoid the bad economical situation.A good case in point is that my big brother Mike who run a big foreign trade business.he has a very good habit that concerns the world situation matters every day,and last year he had a hunch that the economics will depress，So he adjusted the market strategy in time and fortunately, tided over the crisis. What a great job my brother did!This case is not rare in reality.As a result,in order to running business on safety situation to improve the life of employer and employees,we have to know about the events happening around the world. But on the other hand,just imagine what would be like if he did not pay attention on the world economical events,he would out of control on his company,even put himself out of business.Not only would he get bankrupt,but his employees would lost their jobs which can keep their family's life.  



'Know the mutant; kill the mutant.' How many times we hear such words like this.It is conceivable that knowing about the events happening around the world plays an important role in our life. On no account can we ignore the importance of this. So from what had been discussed,I reinforce my standpoint to choose to disagree the topic that know about the events happening around that do not affect our life.

猫和鸭

11/9  Spending money on traveling and vacation vs. Saving for future.

  Some people prefer to spending their money on traveling，others believe that they have to save money for their future life，As far as I am concerned，I agree that people should to spend money on traveling and vacation.My arguments for this point are listed as follows.    One of the primary causes is that traveling can form people’s disposition. Because going out for traveling can let you meet more new people and things that you never met before. So you can develop your social skill about how to communicate with the stranger and how to deal with the special issues. Like my roommate Rose who’s almost a kind of traveler.She spends whole of her short-term and long-term holiday on her traveling and vacation,as well as spends every penny on it.She said the traveling teach her lots of good skills for the futures job and life.like persistence in life and learn how to friendly easy of approach and faced the difficulty with courage which are the important skills in future life and job. So we can clearly see what spending money on traveling and vacation is worth!
 What is more，I think people who like to traveling will more health than the people who has a sedentary life on his or her working and studying everyday. Not only for the physical health, but also for the thinking health,some travels like walking,hiking, even swimming are the very excellent exercise,meanwhile, these travel places where have the wonderful views and perfect air condition will also improve our physical drives and good moods.so from this reason,spending money on traveling and vacation will get great reward in the future.
 Of course, I do not deny that saving money for the future has its own merits,but now days, for people who get the big pressure on their job and study have to spend time to take a break for their bodies and minds . Otherwise,though they are possessed of great wealth or get enough accomplishments,it will pale without the guarantee of health.
   In summary, depending on those discussion above,I firmly support that people should spend money on the traveling and vacation.

猫和鸭

The reading passage explores the issue of disadvantages of communal online encyclopedias.The professor’s lecture deals with the same issue. However, she thinks that online encyclopedias have strong advantages , which contradicts what the reading states. And in the lecture, she uses three specific points to support her idea.
  First of all, the reading passage claims that online encyclopedias are not more professional than traditional encyclopedias. In contrast, the professor points out that actually we can’t find the totally perfect encyclopedias,whatever they’re on line or off line,and raise the problem that the mistakes from the encyclopedias have to be corrected.On this point,obviously,online encyclopedias are easy to corrected by the contributors, but for the traditional printed encyclopedias,they’re really hard to be corrected immediately. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.


Second, the passage demonstrates that the crucial articles from the online encyclopedias will be destroyed by some sabotages,such as the motions from vandals,hackers. In the lecture, the professor admits that on the online encyclopedias,some effectively protection ways have been implementing.including read-only format setting , editor-monitoring.Obviously, the professor’s argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.
Finally, the passage raises the issue The professor opposes to the writer's expectation. She asserts that , content that explicitly(明确地) contradicts that passage.

10-22 TPO6
  Finally, the professor asserts that diversity of information is the strongest advantage of online encyclopedias. whereas the author of the reading claims that the resources from communal online encyclopedias are disorderly and no focus. The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that diversity of informations is satisfy different users for their different needs,because of the plenty space to store more data than traditional printer encyclopedias’.
In conclusion, the point made in the lecture contracts with what is presented in the reading material.

猫和鸭

10/19 TOP5 烦请狠批！

The reading passage explores the issue of how the Chaco houses were used,and states three theories to support this issue.The professor’s lecture deals with the same issue. However, he raises doubt about three theories from the reading passage . And in the lecture, he claims another three different points for three theories.  
First, even though the reading passage suggests that Chaco great houses which each house can hold hundreds people are the perfect places to suitable live for such a large number of people, the professor argues in the lecture that it seems impossible. This is because the Chaco houses just have few fireplaces, which means the numbers of fireplaces can’t support such hundreds peoples who live together in Chaco houses. Obviously, the professor’s argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.
  A second theory from the reading passage states that the Chaco houses were used for store main food-maize which can support people to live for a long time. But the professor contends that Chaco houses never used for store food.Then he supports this point with the fact that there has no any traces of maize or maize containers to be found.
  Finally, the professor asserts that the huge mount which near Chaco houses is not the strongly evidence to support Chaco houses were used for ceremonies, it is exactly the opposite of the third theory from the reading passage. The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that the huge mount was just formed by some kinds of trashes,such as constructs trashes from the Chaco building, the meal cooking and container trashes from the constructors. In other word, these trashes were not those special stuffs for ceremonies.
  In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage about three theories,and convincingly shows that  each of arguments in the reading is indefensible.

AnthonySummer

10/17 TPO3 writing



The reading passage explores the issue of whether one painting is(was)painted by Rembrandt or not. The professor's lecture deals with the same issue. However, she thinks that the painting attributes to Rembrandt. This contradicts with the reading states.（用which不能另起一句，否则就是疑问句）And the lecture, she uses three specific points to support her idea.

First, even though the reading passage suggests that the elder woman in the portrait dresses inconsistent, because of the cheap cap and luxurious fur collar. The professor argues in the lecture that the fur collar is not the part of the original painting. This is because the fur collar was painted on the original painting by someone for making the painting seems like the formal portrait of an aristocratic lady, which（太多which从句了）means to increase the value of the painting. Obviously, the professor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that the light on the face of the portrait is (was) not fit together with the dark fur collar which can absorb the light but reflect the light to the face, so states that the painting don't attribute to Rembrandt since he would never have made such an error, but the professor contends that the painting is（was） a work by Rembrandt. Because she supports this point with the fact that the light on the face is (was)from the reflection of the original collar which is covered by a fur collar.

Finally, the professor asserts that Rembrandt never used the painting panel that made of several pieces of wood glued together, The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that the glued panel is from the someone who glued it on the top and sides of the original painting for making the painting grander and valuer,and actually the original paining is（was） painted on a single piece of wood panel which used the same wood panel on the other painting from the Rembrandt.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, the main point of the painting is could not be a work by Rembrandt is incorrect.（逻辑错误）

画是几百年前画好的，用过去时。一般过去式表示从过去发生一直持续到现在。某些地方我也不确定请多多指教。

听力不错，很多细节都听到了。

猫和鸭

10/18 TPO4


   The reading passage explores the issue of dinosaurs are endotherms. The professor’s lecture deals with the same issue. However, she thinks that dinosaurs are not endotherms, which contradicts what the reading states. And in the lecture, she uses three specific points to support her idea.
  First, even though the reading passage suggests that dinosaur’s fossils were found in polar regions where only the endotherms can active in such cold area , the professor argues in the lecture that dinosaurs were also available to live in the polar regions at that time. This is because when dinosaurs lived, the polar regions were warm enough to support reptiles to live. Even in the period of cold months, they still can choose either migrating to the warm area or hibernating there.Obviously, the professor’s argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.
  Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that the position of dinosaur’s legs which underneath their bodies is the evidence that improve dinosaurs are endotherms,since the legs on this positons are better for running which is the endotherms’s primary characteristics. the professor contends that this idea can’t strongly improve that dinosaurs are endotherms. Then she supports this point with the fact that because of the large size of dinosaurs’s body and its rapidly growing, they have to get enough support power from their legs under the bodies.In other words, the mammals which have the legs under bodies are not necessarily endotherms.
　　　　   Finally, the professor arrests that the Haversian canals which the endotherms usually have were found in dinosaurs’s bodies can confirm the dinosaurs are endotherms. The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that also the dinosaurs’s bodies surely have the Haversian canals which can prevent nerves and blood vessels to support the mammals to grow rapidly , but depend on the growth ring of dinosaurs,It seems their growth frequency which sometimes grow slowly,even stop in cold weather condition,and sometimes grow rapidly in warm weather condition is totally different with the endotherms’s which can grow even by keeping a constant body temperature year-around .
  In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading,dinosaurs are endotherms is incorrect.

猫和鸭

10/17   TPO3 writing

The reading passage explores the issue of whether one painting is pained by Rembrandt or not. The professor’s lecture deals with the same issue. However, she thinks that the painting attribute to Rembrandt. which contradicts what the reading states. And in the lecture, she uses three specific points to support her idea.
  First, even though the reading passage suggests that the elder wowan in the portrait dresses inconsistent,because of the cheap cap and luxurious fur collar. the professor argues in the lecture that the fur collar is not the part of the original painting.This is because the fur collar was painted on the original painting by someone for making the painting seems like the formal portrait of an aristocratic lady , which mean to increase the value of the painting.Obviously, the professor’s argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.
  Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that the light on the face of the portrait is not fit together with the dark fur collar which can absorb the light but reflect the light to the face,so states that the painting don’t attribute to Rembrandt since he would never have made such an error,but the professor contends that the painting is a work by Rembrandt. Because she supports this point with the fact that the light on the face is from the reflect of the original collar which is covered by fur collar.
  Finally, the professor asserts that Rembrandt never used the painting panel that made of several pieces of wood glued together,  The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that the glued panel is from the someone who glued it on the top and sides of the origianl painting for making the painting grander and valuer,and actually the original paining is painted on a single piece of wood panel which used the same wood panel on the other painting from the Rembrandt.
   In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, the main point of the painting is could not be a work by Rembrandt is incorrect.

猫和鸭

TPO20

The reading passage states the issue that the “let it burn”policy should to be replaced with a policy of extinguishing forest fires as soon as they appeared and put forward three arguments to prove this idea. However, the professor who is from the listening passage is not in agreement with what stated in the reading passage.To illustrate her opinion,she presents three sound reasons for these three arguments.
First of all,the professor claims that fires are natural part of ecological cycle and they are good opportunities for some certain plants and seeds to find their ways on the particular growing conditions and environments,such as open and shaded spaces where the trees have been destroyed by the fire, and the very high levels of heat in the soils after the fire.In contrast,the reading passage points out that the forest fire destroys the trees and other vegetation,and make the original forest look like a wasteland.So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.
Second, the professor assert that the fire also created new opportunities for the animals which live in the forest. For example, some certain small animals start thriving,like rabbits and hares which get the ideal habitat---the small plants that replaced trees after the fire,and then these small animals also become their predators’s foods. These form wonderful food chains and become stronger after the fire than before,contradicting what is stated in the reading that the forest fire threatens the wildlife,even destructs the wildlife’s habitats and disrupts food chains.
Finally,the professor illustrate that the development of tourism will not be influenced by the fire.For instance,1988 Yellowstone fire which caused by several unusual combinations of factors that year, and then there has not seen such a fire since 1988.Visitors came back to the park next year and each year after that. In contrast, the reading passage presents that the forest fire makes the Yellowstone Park a barren land and there has nothing to worth visiting---not to mention that the local businesses which depends on park visitors.
In conclusion, the point made in the lecture contracts with what is presented in the reading material.

猫和鸭

9/2 不好意思，这次交晚了，TPO6综合
The reading passage states the issue that communal online encyclopedias make much less valuable than traditional printed encyclopedias. However, the professor who is from the listening passage argue that this idea is skeptical. To illustrate her opinion, she presents three sound reasons for there three arguments.

In the first place, the reading passage thinks traditional printed encyclopedias are more authority by trained experts than communal online encyclopedias.In contrast,according to the listening passage, the professor thinks the wrong informations of encyclopedias online can easy to be corrected timely,but for printed encyclopedias,the errors will remain for long years before the publishing of revised version.

And secondly, the reading passage states that the entry in the online encyclopedia is unsafe because of hackers' invading and unscrupulous users.The professor argue that it cannot be true. She offers the fact that the online encyclopedias are applying a safeguard measure,such as the read-only format and the special editors who can monitor all changes made to the articles.

Finally, the reading passage assert that the the online encyclopedias' contents are in too great a depth and the focus are very frequently, so make the users disorientation on the demands that they really need. The professor opposes this assertion that this unfolding way of abundant and multiple informations are the right charm of communal online encyclopedia nowadays, because there have a great range of interests that users really have, so each takes by his judgment what he needs freely.

pedrohuo

红色为错误，蓝色为修改建议，绿色为段后总结，高亮为精彩！


As the modern society develops, there is a debate over whether people who go out from their village will be more successful and happier than people who stay in their village. Different people hold different opinions on this topic because their distinct backgrounds. Some people think that stay(staying) in their village will get more successes and happy lives. In contrast, I prefer to disagree on this view. Myself(My) view can be greatly substantiated by following discussions.

First, there is no doubt that having a good enterprise can make a(an) important role in the whole life, it relates to the family, wealth and the life's value. Like my friends Tom, who was running a furniture company in his mother(‘s) town-a small village wanted to develop his business career more powerfull(powerful), So he made a big decision---move his company to New York City which is the one of the most important international city(cities) of the world(也可worldwide). He thinks he can know and hires many excellent peers because of living in this commercial metropolis, and he can(也可is able to。否则CAN太多了) share many resources and consult many topics in the furniture field from them. Through years of his painstaking effort, he's(his) business is running more successful than before(去掉) he did in the village.

Secondly, we will no deny(we will no deny这种表述不好。很少见。还有最好不要总用将来时。我以前也特别喜欢用将来时，后来发现只有中国人有这种说话习惯。哈哈。这句可以换成Common sense informs us that…详见无老师作文。少用人做主语。) that big city has lots of convenient conditions for human's living. My friends who are living in Shanghai which is the famous metropolis of China（同时出现两个定语从句，略微啰嗦）, we（这个语法错误吧。前面的My friends是主语。这里又出现了We做主语） invariably live nearby and are always available for an informal chat, especially the evening's entertainment, such as the lastest(latest) films, exhibitions or some new restaurants, even some super deals on the vogue products. In the recent case(没有主语) concerned about my best friend Rose who likes to use brand name products, like Channel, LV, Tiffany. In the Thanksgiving Day(On Thanksgiving Day) of this year, she got a big news about the certain outlet store for big brand would hold a super deal event. She was so exciting(excited) and enjoying(enjoyable?). Not only is the shopping convenient, but also the public transport(transportation), such as metro is convenient(句子里出现3个convenient。感觉不是很合适。翻译成中文都感觉不是很书面化). Metro which is the typical product of the metropolis always make people's work and life efficiently---the one of the most important reasons of people feel they can get more successful and happier out of the village.

From all the above I have discussed, I can safely draw the conclusion that in order to pursuing the ideal life and work, we should choose a sound environment, therefore, it will be advisable for people to get more successful(这里不应该是形容词) and happier out of the village.

(实话实说啊。姐姐别郁闷。托福就是一个受挫的过程。感觉文中好多的表述感觉不是很地道。中式英语比较多。语法错误比较多。推荐读读老美185. CD上有下载的。辛苦了)
PS: 还有我感觉每个人的每一篇文章都是有提升的地方。如果仅仅简单的怕对方难过。就不指出来。是不负责任的互改。