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发表于 2012-7-23 11:38:39 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |正序浏览 |阅读模式
独立写作为主,二战T主攻作文。加油!=^_^+
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83#
发表于 2012-9-12 09:46:38 | 只看该作者
上次上网的时候,看见你的留言,你都考完了,我就想还改不改呢...  然后我现在在上课才有网..
fairy 童鞋 我得改你的9.6 的综合 也就TPO11,  但我明天有事 如果明天中午12点前没写好的话 我可能得过几天改咯 提前跟你说下哈
-- by 会员 ykhjy (2012/9/6 22:03:42)




啊正好 我还想跟你说呢我这明天考试了,这会儿要走了。回来再给你改!:)
-- by 会员 fairyfinger (2012/9/7 10:59:03)

82#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-7 10:59:03 | 只看该作者
fairy 童鞋 我得改你的9.6 的综合 也就TPO11,  但我明天有事 如果明天中午12点前没写好的话 我可能得过几天改咯 提前跟你说下哈
-- by 会员 ykhjy (2012/9/6 22:03:42)



啊正好 我还想跟你说呢我这明天考试了,这会儿要走了。回来再给你改!:)
81#
发表于 2012-9-6 22:03:42 | 只看该作者
fairy 童鞋 我得改你的9.6 的综合 也就TPO11,  但我明天有事 如果明天中午12点前没写好的话 我可能得过几天改咯 提前跟你说下哈
80#
发表于 2012-9-5 22:14:24 | 只看该作者
改好喽~~~
有个问题就是,这个题问的是agree or diagree the statement an efficient leader will always try to make everyone feel that he's in part of a decision making. 但是你转换的两个方面好像不对,有点太极端了~~也就是说agree 是leader一直是考虑的,但是diagree是有时不考虑,而不是从来不考虑~~
整个语言很好啦~~赞一个~~向你学习!!!

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 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-5 15:27:49 | 只看该作者
9.4

Agree or disagree, an effective leader will always try to make everyone feel that he's in part of a decision making.

How to define an effective leadership? The answer vary from person to person: some believe that a good leader should be cooperative and open to suggestions from team members; while others claims that only if a leader can make all the decisions for his team member can the teamwork process most fastly. As for me, an effective leader need to make everyone feel involved in decision making. And my reasons are listed as follows.

Being in part of a decision making would maximize the potential of every team member. It is a sense of participation that makes everyone behave more proactive to manage the goal: one would undoubtedly feel responsible for his own decision since he wants to prove he is right. On the contrary, if a leader prefer to make decisions alone rather than discuss with his team, his team members would just wish to finish the assigned work as quickly as they can, regardless of the quality. What's even worse? One would tend to deliberately finish the assignment badly as a way of detesting. Therefore, a sense of participation in decision making is critical for raising the morale of team members, and thus help the project progress more smoothly and vigorously.

The enrollment of all members is a catalyst for better cooperation within the team. Only when everyone takes part in decision making can each of them understand fully the big picture of the project and the specific role his work plays. In that way, the result will turn out to be closer to the initial expectation. More importantly, instead of blaming others, all members will take the responsibility if the decision proves to be wrong. In short, making decisions together tighten the tie between team members both in and after the work.

Admittedly, allowing each team member to freely express his own idea and harmonizing them is difficult and time-consuming. For instance, a supposedly  one-hour meeting may extend to a five-hour one since disputes among members will result in heated debate. Thus, the efficiency of the leadership will deteriorate.

In sum, although it takes more time to let everyone participate in decision making, it is quite rewarding in that the work can process more effectively and the result will be more close to the anticipation.
78#
发表于 2012-9-4 18:45:45 | 只看该作者
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

How one spends his money directly reflects his lifestyle and living philosophy. For people who are accustomed to save most of their salaries, they prefer a safe and stable life; yet for those who spend their major incomes inspend on是固定搭配么?) traveling and vacations, they value more on instant happiness and enjoyment, and their life may be much more colorful and unforgettable. As far as I'm concerned, I tend to spend my salaries on vacations rather than save them in the bank. And my reasons are listed as follows.

Spending money on traveling and vacation is actually an investment. Nowadays, people are confronting with heavy workload, fast living pace and undue pressure. They are, thus, in urgent need of total relaxation, namely go for a trip. A trip means more than just a way of relaxing, it's more about refreshing and self-exploration: one can get rid of his immediate surroundings and his present identity while traveling, and thereby the shuttles of responsibility and social rules will fall off. In that way, one can rethink about his initial dream and recharge himself. People usually work more effectively and proactively after a trip, which in return help them get promoted and earn more money. In short, spending money on vacations enhance one's performance at work, in that traveling is a way to relax as well as regain one's esteem
.(这一段真好。)

More importantly, I strongly believe that people should live every moment to the full since life is ephemeral and caprious. To be more specific, no one can exactly tell when he would die or get severely injured. It is possible that when one finally saved enough money for buying a delicate house, he has already afflicted by a sever cancer; it happens occasionally that a person who plans to take a worldwide trip has been saving money for thirty years, but at the moment he accumulated enough money, he no longer has a vigorous body to go abroad. What do we earn and save money for? The answer is self-evident: enjoying life more. However, youth cannot wait, and death is unpredictable. Only if people seize every chance to do whatever they wish for can they leave no regret when dying. Therefore, it is more suggestive to travel now than to save the dream for the future.
(这个也是不错)

Admittedly, there are occasions under which people may be in desperate need of a large sum of money. Unexpected situations like car accident, kidnapping, severe diseases and robbery all require abundant money. And if people do not have enough deposit, they may die or live in poverty.
(总是感觉这里有点不顺,Unexpected situations like car accident, kidnapping, severe diseases and robbery all require people have enough deposit, and if they do not have abundant money in these cases, they may suffer or even die

In conclusion, it's much more rewarding to spend money on vacations than save them in banks; yet it's necessary to lay aside some salaries in case of emergency.

总体说很好,就是说理很多,举个具体的例子吧。

TPO8
In the lecture, the professor disputes the passage that the memoir of the Chevalier is mostly a reliable source. He believes that the content of the memoir is accurate and demonstrates that in the three episodes mentioned in the passage.

First, instead of being poor,
thethe这里不用吧) Chevalier actually just lacks cash. The passage says that the Chevalier borrowed considerable sums of money from a Swiss merchant and thereby was not rich. Yet the professor ponits out that the property gained in parties and gambling must be converted into chasescashbefore they can be put into use. Thus, according to the lecturer, the Chevalier had to borrow money while waiting his own money. That is one part where the lecture directly oppose(第三人称单数) the passage.

Second, the Chevalier in fact had an accurate record of his conversations between Voltair. The professor claims that the Chevalier wrote down every part of their conversation each night after it was over. Moreover, one person who live with the Chevalier confirms
(这里应该用过去式)that he referred to the records when he wrote his memoir. Therefore, the lecture directly contradicts the passage which doubts the reliability of their conversations since it is impossible for one to remember exact phrases from extended conversations held many years earlier.

Third, many prisoners who had more powerful friends than the Chevalier did
(这里did是强调的意思么?)were all confined in the prison in Venice. As the passage says, the Chevalier is more likely to have bribed the jailers than to have escaped from the prison through the roof, in that he knew a number of politically well-connected friends. However, the lecturer indicates that prisoners who were more likely to be set free through bribe were still in the prison. Besides, the old Venice government claims that the celling of the prison had to be repaired after the Chevalier's escape. In that sense, the lecture contrasts the passage evidently in terms of the validity of the Chevalier's escaping from the prison roof.  

In a nutshell, the passage cast douts on the accuracy of the memoir of the Chevalier and demonstrates it in three episodes; while the lecturer refutes that the memoir could possibly be correct and gives his own proofs.

时态和人称一致就好,听力和句子都木有问题
77#
发表于 2012-9-3 22:09:02 | 只看该作者
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

it is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Do you agree?

When under severe pressure, what would you do? Some people prefer to go to the cinema or read books, which can temporarily get them away from the current pressure; while others tend to do some sports so as to refresh themselves both physically and mentally. As for me, instead of reading or watching movies, some physical exercises is more suitable and effective. And my reasons are listed as follows. (开头不错)

By doing physical exercises, one can stay in a good health. Nowadays, it is sitting all day long that makes modern people tortured by diseases like adiposity, cardiovascular problems and muscle stiffness. It is highly recommended that people go out in fresh air and do some physical exercise, namely football, basketball, tennis, swimming, running, jogging and badminton, which can activate muscles and maintain physical fitness. On the contrary, if one still prefer to read a book in the sofa or watch a movie in the cinema or in front of his computer, he can hardly hadhave time (其实这里我觉得用willing比较好点)to move from his seat, which is detrimental to his fitness. In that sense, doing some sports makes people more salubrious than reading or going to the cinema do.

Playing sports games with others is a lubricate for social communication. As almost all sports and exercises need more than one participant, doing sports is also a good way for modern people to create a tighter tie with others. With the development of technology, people in our generation become more and more isolated: working places are segregated by tiny booths, where everyone has his or her own private space; children are addicted to television, computer games or cell-phone apps and thereby seldom go out playing with their neighbors or classmates. However, humans are social animals who instinctively need social interaction. Therefore, doing physical exercises together is better than reading alone or enjoying a film, during which no teamwork or frequent communication is required. Moreover, only after experiencing the limitation of one's own physical strength can one realize how tiny he is and how trivial his worries are.(最后一句不知道加上还好不,以为上面已经论述完整了哈)

Admittedly, comparing with physical exercise, reading and seeing a movie is more easily accessible and convenient. This is because they can be achieved without any requirements for place or participants: one can watch a movie online or read a book when waiting a bus or sitting in a subway; one can start put aside a movie or book and choose to continue it at any time without losing any interesting points. For modern people, they are much more time-saving than doing sports.

In sum, although doing physical exercises is more troublesome than enjoying a movie or book, it is much more beneficial to the doers in that it help keeping one's physical fitness and promoting association among modern people.

楼主句式多样,词语丰富,论述也很详细,不错的作文呢。

76#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-3 21:44:00 | 只看该作者
9.3
Do you agree that it is better to spend money on traveling and vacation than save money for the future?

How one spends his money directly reflects his lifestyle and living philosophy. For people who are accustomed to save most of their salaries, they prefer a safe and stable life; yet for those who spend their major incomes in traveling and vacations, they value more on instant happiness and enjoyment, and their life may be much more colorful and unforgettable. As far as I'm concerned, I tend to spend my salaries on vacations rather than save them in the bank. And my reasons are listed as follows.

Spending money on traveling and vacation is actually an investment. Nowadays, people are confronting with heavy workload, fast living pace and undue pressure. They are, thus, in urgent need of total relaxation, namely go for a trip. A trip means more than just a way of relaxing, it's more about refreshing and self-exploration: one can get rid of his immediate surroundings and his present identity while traveling, and thereby the shuttles of responsibility and social rules will fall off. In that way, one can rethink about his initial dream and recharge himself. People usually work more effectively and proactively after a trip, which in return help them get promoted and earn more money. In short, spending money on vacations enhance one's performance at work, in that traveling is a way to relax as well as regain one's esteem.

More importantly, I strongly believe that people should live every moment to the full since life is ephemeral and caprious. To be more specific, no one can exactly tell when he would die or get severely injured. It is possible that when one finally saved enough money for buying a delicate house, he has already afflicted by a sever cancer; it happens occasionally that a person who plans to take a worldwide trip has been saving money for thirty years, but at the moment he accumulated enough money, he no longer has a vigorous body to go abroad. What do we earn and save money for? The answer is self-evident: enjoying life more. However, youth cannot wait, and death is unpredictable. Only if people seize every chance to do whatever they wish for can they leave no regret when dying. Therefore, it is more suggestive to travel now than to save the dream for the future.

Admittedly, there are occasions under which people may be in desperate need of a large sum of money. Unexpected situations like car accident, kidnapping, severe diseases and robbery all require abundant money. And if people do not have enough deposit, they may die or live in poverty.

In conclusion, it's much more rewarding to spend money on vacations than save them in banks; yet it's necessary to lay aside some salaries in case of emergency.
独立总是时间不够。T T

TPO8
In the lecture, the professor disputes the passage that the memoir of the Chevalier is mostly a reliable source. He believes that the content of the memoir is accurate and demonstrates that in the three episodes mentioned in the passage.

First, instead of being poor, the Chevalier actually just lacks cash. The passage says that the Chevalier borrowed considerable sums of money from a Swiss merchant and thereby was not rich. Yet the professor ponits out that the property gained in parties and gambling must be converted into chases before they can be put into use. Thus, according to the lecturer, the Chevalier had to borrow money while waiting his own money. That is one part where the lecture directly oppose the passage.

Second, the Chevalier in fact had an accurate record of his conversations between Voltair. The professor claims that the Chevalier wrote down every part of their conversation each night after it was over. Moreover, one person who live with the Chevalier confirms that he referred to the records when he wrote his memoir. Therefore, the lecture directly contradicts the passage which doubts the reliability of their conversations since it is impossible for one to remember exact phrases from extended conversations held many years earlier.

Third, many prisoners who had more powerful friends than the Chevalier did were all confined in the prison in Venice. As the passage says, the Chevalier is more likely to have bribed the jailers than to have escaped from the prison through the roof, in that he knew a number of politically well-connected friends. However, the lecturer indicates that prisoners who were more likely to be set free through bribe were still in the prison. Besides, the old Venice government claims that the celling of the prison had to be repaired after the Chevalier's escape. In that sense, the lecture contrasts the passage evidently in terms of the validity of the Chevalier's escaping from the prison roof.  

In a nutshell, the passage cast douts on the accuracy of the memoir of the Chevalier and demonstrates it in three episodes; while the lecturer refutes that the memoir could possibly be correct and gives his own proofs.
75#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-9-3 21:39:45 | 只看该作者
啊啊我写了忘了发了~~!!滴汗!快考试了脑子不规律了..

9.2

it is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Do you agree?




When under severe pressure, what would you do? Some people prefer to go to the cinema or read books, which can temporarily get them away from the current pressure; while others tend to do some sports so as to refresh themselves both physically and mentally. As for me, instead of reading or watching movies, some physical exercises is more suitable and effective. And my reasons are listed as follows.




By doing physical exercises, one can stay in a good health. Nowadays, it is sitting all day long that makes modern people tortured by diseases like adiposity, cardiovascular problems and muscle stiffness. It is highly recommended that people go out in fresh air and do some physical exercise, namely football, basketball, tennis, swimming, running, jogging and badminton, which can activate muscles and maintain physical fitness. On the contrary, if one still prefer to read a book in the sofa or watch a movie in the cinema or in front of his computer, he can hardly had time to move from his seat, which is detrimental to his fitness. In that sense, doing some sports makes people more salubrious than reading or going to the cinema do.



Playing sports games with others is a lubricate for social communication. As almost all sports and exercises need more than one participant, doing sports is also a good way for modern people to create a tighter tie with others. With the development of technology, people in our generation become more and more isolated: working places are segregated by tiny booths, where everyone has his or her own private space; children are addicted to television, computer games or cell-phone apps and thereby seldom go out playing with their neighbors or classmates. However, humans are social animals who instinctively need social interaction. Therefore, doing physical exercises together is better than reading alone or enjoying a film, during which no teamwork or frequent communication is required. Moreover, only after experiencing the limitation of one's own physical strength can one realize how tiny he is and how trivial his worries are.



Admittedly, comparing with physical exercise, reading and seeing a movie is more easily accessible and convenient. This is because they can be achieved without any requirements for place or participants: one can watch a movie online or read a book when waiting a bus or sitting in a subway; one can start put aside a movie or book and choose to continue it at any time without losing any interesting points. For modern people, they are much more time-saving than doing sports.



In sum, although doing physical exercises is more troublesome than enjoying a movie or book, it is much more beneficial to the doers in that it help keeping one's physical fitness and promoting association among modern people.



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