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包子不包子

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to choose a friend with whom you can have fun than to choose a friend that will help you when you are in need. Use specific examples to support your answer.





Nowadays, with the expansion influence of easy communication among people, like telephone, internet and instant messages. it is increasingly important for us make correct choice in making friend, a friend to have fun with or a friend who will help us out of trouble. For me, both kinds of friends are of great needed, which depends on the differences of situations.

When summer holiday is coming, what will happen if i spend the entire holiday with myself is hard to imagine. Therefore, a friend who i can have fun with will help to color my vacation life a lot. For example, jo, a friend of mine, he is such a kind person. i remember in my last high school summer holiday, in order to memory our beautiful three-year-long high school life, a trip to Hong Kongwas created. Though it was in the middle of July, long trip and hot weather, we still had joke with each other, talked about the past three years studying together and imagined about the coming future. Even now, I insist that the trip with jo was one of my most unforgettable and funny trips.

for other situation, when i am in trouble, a friend who is always willing to get me out of difficulties is whom I appreciate most, and i am lucky enough to have another friend Zoë, who is kind to assist those who are in trouble. Once, in the middle of nowhere, i lost my way to the city town hall, with no map, not enough money but only a Mobil phone. Zoë rang a bell in my mind immediately. i called her, she said no problem and drove her tiny old car to give me a ride within 15 minutes. Thanks for her kind heart, or i had to walk 4 hours without water and light!

In a word, hardly is it easy for us to make on or two close friends. Accordingly, friends of different kinds, who is easy to have fun with and who is willing to help me out of trouble, are all of equal importance for me.

包子不包子

tpo9

Both ofthe professor and the writer explore the issue about whether hydrogen based fuel engine has advantages over the internal combustion engine for cars. The author lists three aspects of advantages to support that the hydrogen based fuel engine is a good solution. The speaker, on the contrary, insists that the writer is too optimistic in the hydrogen based engine because hydrogen is not the solution.

First, hydrogen is not as easily available as the writer described in the passage, claims the professor, its common present -water- is not the usable form of hydrogen to produce energy. The energy can only be produced through the pure liquid state of hydrogen, which is a highly artificial process. Besides, it is difficult to produce and store, which has to be kept in extremely cold environment that is -253 Degree Celsius听的好细节啊. Imagine how complex the technology could be, the fuel cell engine is not that practical and hydrogen is also not an easy approached substance. Therefore, this disproves its counterpart in the reading directly.

Moreover, the speaker declares that hydrogen is not the solution to the pollution problem. He explains that producing the pure hydrogen creates pollution. Purification technology is required to generate pure hydrogen, which needs energy that is provided by the burning of coals and oil. Accordingly, although cars are not the origin of pollution, the factories produce pure hydrogen are. Consequently, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that hydrogen based fuel cell engine does not cost less. The reason is that platum, a kind of rare and expensive metal, is required in this engine. Without that the hydrogen cannot go through the process of chemical reaction in order to produce energy. Furthermore, the replacement of another cheaper material has so far been unsuccessful. Accordingly, the last point is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, the advantage of hydrogen based fuel cell engine overweighs that of internal combustion engine, is incorrect.

哈哈，其实每段后面总结我也抄别人的

-- by 会员 qianjun06 (2012/7/20 8:05:13)

谢谢qianjun06修改 包子考完再给你改哦~~

qianjun06

tpo9

Both ofthe professor and the writer explore the issue about whether hydrogen based fuel engine has advantages over the internal combustion engine for cars. The author lists three aspects of advantages to support that the hydrogen based fuel engine is a good solution. The speaker, on the contrary, insists that the writer is too optimistic in the hydrogen based engine because hydrogen is not the solution.

First, hydrogen is not as easily available as the writer described in the passage, claims the professor, its common present -water- is not the usable form of hydrogen to produce energy. The energy can only be produced through the pure liquid state of hydrogen, which is a highly artificial process. Besides, it is difficult to produce and store, which has to be kept in extremely cold environment that is -253 Degree Celsius听的好细节啊. Imagine how complex the technology could be, the fuel cell engine is not that practical and hydrogen is also not an easy approached substance. Therefore, this disproves its counterpart in the reading directly.

Moreover, the speaker declares that hydrogen is not the solution to the pollution problem. He explains that producing the pure hydrogen creates pollution. Purification technology is required to generate pure hydrogen, which needs energy that is provided by the burning of coals and oil. Accordingly, although cars are not the origin of pollution, the factories produce pure hydrogen are. Consequently, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that hydrogen based fuel cell engine does not cost less. The reason is that platum, a kind of rare and expensive metal, is required in this engine. Without that the hydrogen cannot go through the process of chemical reaction in order to produce energy. Furthermore, the replacement of another cheaper material has so far been unsuccessful. Accordingly, the last point is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, the advantage of hydrogen based fuel cell engine overweighs that of internal combustion engine, is incorrect.

哈哈，其实每段后面总结我也抄别人的

sherryzhangh

The society is developing, so does the accumulation of problems in today's world.Hundreds of thousands（留一个就好） African children are dying of starvation. Millions of people are losing their job in each minute in the rapidly changing economic world. Moreover, thousands tons of carbon dioxide is emitted into the atmosphere and worsen the global warming. The list of problems will go on. With such a large scale of problems, facing them necessitate the distribution of great endeavor into small parts. Therefore, hardly can there be a problem be solved in our lifetime.

To begin with, global warming, the most controversial problem that has been discussed fiercely is so severe that seems impossible to be enhanced. The recent research results from the academic group in Japan shows that the acceleration of the warming in worldwide is increasing by 12% compared with the same time in the past. What can people obtain from this piece if truth? More glacial is melting to destroy more available land in the populated area. Soaring temperature negatively affects the already hot tropical areas. Endangered animals died from the intolerable climate change which will impair human's food chains at last. When encountering with such a wide range and severe problem, human's devotion may not help. Additionally, only by controlling the emission of co2 can people solve this problem. However, this directly contradicted with the improving needs of lots of developing countries for an extent period of time. Due to those reasons, the wide influential range of the problem and the contradiction in the needs of some countries, problems cannot be solved in a limited length of time.

Another equally important point is that there are too many problems now showing on the stage require people’s attention. The outcome is that no one can gain enough attention. The ability of human is restricted, especially when facing with a complex world. Problems are coming from every aspects of the world-unevenly distribution of natural resources and capital, high extinction rate of wild animals and enlarged gap between the poor and the rich. Economy, nature and resource, are where thousands of problems generating from. Even if people own great power to deal with the difficulties, when distributing that power to diverse aspects, the efficiency will be impaired mostly. It is the same with students' studying. Using the limited time, space and attention to command eight difference courses makes it difficult to be done in quickly. Accordingly, hard it is indeed for people to achieve the goal of solving the problems in their lifetime.

Admittedly, others may against my point by stating that with assistance of advanced technology people can find the solutions sooner or later. The point is that those people are too optimistic. Up till now, not even an environmental problem is accomplished by technology. Furthermore, people have to devote much endeavor and time that can be utilized to solve problems in improving technologies. In all, nothing can be modified through this way.

In conclusion, the wideness spreading and the diverse classifying of problems, accompanied with the limited capital and time owned by people, produces the situation that cannot be corrected in people’s lifetime.哇哇哇 简明有力写的太好了再次Orz膜拜大神 话说我专门弄了个WORD文档搜集包子大神的好句子 哈哈

-- by 会员 hansxiao7 (2012/7/16 8:09:32)

哈哈哈，楼上，有同感，包子的被动句和倒装句让人很读起来很舒服顺畅， By the way, 能把你搜集的包大神句子贴给我吗？：）
这个 包子不算大神 还年轻哈~~

-- by 会员 包子不包子 (2012/7/16 23:02:16)

大神也不一定是老头呀，很多年轻风流倜傥的说

qianjun06

7月17日
Do you agree or disagree, the most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.
The ultimate goal of any company is to make profits, which depends on a variety of aspects. From the preparation of the least cost and most profitable raw material to the most suitable way of promotion about products to the potential customers, are crucial for a company's success. Apparently, the investments that insist a company to be the best are not limitedly in the working skills of its employees only. Therefore, personally, the statement -the most investment of a company should be spent in improving its employees' skills- is what I disagree strongly.
To begin with, investment should also be put into the research of advertising products, especially to the potential consumers. If the company possesses the ability to produce the best products in the country, another factor needed to consider is that whether people are aware about the high quality of this kind of product. Consequently, this is where advertisement comes up. Investment devoted into this research has to cover a vast range of subjects such as the age of potential consumers, their geographic locations and the time to advertise. No wonder it necessitates investment to success. Imagine that a company sells the best boats in the country promotes its products to people who even have not seen ocean or river,what will happen? No purchase indeed, which is due to the lacking in research investment that company cannot make the right advertisement based on the research results. Accordingly, input of enough investment is necessary in this field either.
Another equally important point is that the technologies or the facilities used to produce products should be keep in pace with the world class level, which requires great investment. Even the company owns the top employees, who are well trained and can produce things in exchange for countless profits, without the proper equipment, not even a single product can be created. In this way, the investment to improve employees' skills is useless. I used to hear story from my grandpa that describes about the harsh working environment in the past. Each employee was highly skilled with flexible hands. The problem is that the machines were too old to accelerate the process of earning money. Lacking in the investment to upgrade the machines and technologies, the best employee can do nothing about it. At least, comparison between human labor and productivity of a machine is unfair clearly. Therefore, no investment in improving equipment, no enough output, needless to talk about the profits.
Admittedly, others may against my point by insisting that employees are people who control the equipment, and machines cannot work by themselves. However, the truth is that nowadays, in the developed countries, 72% of the products can be generated without the watching of human, according to a recent studying in the United State. Simply by the advanced machine and technology people can achieve more than they can imagine. Accordingly, the power of investment in other area cannot be overlooked.这段到底是支持还是不支持？ 第一句说有些人反对我的意见，最后说应该注意其他领域。
In conclusion, investments in researching about the method to advertise products and upgrading the facilities are even more important than improving the employees' skills.

每次都要好好研究你作文方法，呵呵，句子写的很流利，而且很少是主语用人开头的

包子不包子

1Why would they repair the celling（ceiling） unless Chevalier really escaped as he describe


Sorry 这句后面的as he describe 没有看到， describe 应为过去式


2 his old prison room



其实楼主能把信息听得如此详细已经很不容易了，我没有听的那么细。。。所以就prison带过了。。


3 bribe to freedom


这个地方感觉用for 更好，或者用bribe their way to freedom



4 he had wealth


只是感觉assets 更好一些。若用wealth 也无妨。


5 Chevalier spent large amount of money on parties and gambling and he had wealth，which is(was) a kind of property that have to sale（sell） first.


刚刚翻过了听力文本，这个and he had wealth 后边是没有东西的。若楼至要加定语从句，最好另分一句，而且，第二个and前没有像听力文本中有停顿，也就是逗号，若再加上定语从句，感觉不顺畅，要来回看上两遍方能领悟楼主意图。






翻看原文才发现楼主的记忆能力和记笔记的能力真的好强！！！！不过我想说，在考试的时候最好转述，有些东西是最好用自己的话流畅地表达出来。另外，对我的疏忽表示歉意！上边第一点真的是没有看到后面那个as he described 。。。。
楼主的信息量掌握得真的太好了！！huluhulufei 像楼主学习！！！

-- by 会员 huluhulufei (2012/7/18 22:21:53)

fei改的那么仔细 要谢谢呢 包子还是要注意细节滴

huluhulufei

1Why would they repair the celling（ceiling） unless Chevalier really escaped as he describe


Sorry 这句后面的as he describe 没有看到， describe 应为过去式


2 his old prison room



其实楼主能把信息听得如此详细已经很不容易了，我没有听的那么细。。。所以就prison带过了。。


3 bribe to freedom


这个地方感觉用for 更好，或者用bribe their way to freedom



4 he had wealth


只是感觉assets 更好一些。若用wealth 也无妨。


5 Chevalier spent large amount of money on parties and gambling and he had wealth，which is(was) a kind of property that have to sale（sell） first.


刚刚翻过了听力文本，这个and he had wealth 后边是没有东西的。若楼至要加定语从句，最好另分一句，而且，第二个and前没有像听力文本中有停顿，也就是逗号，若再加上定语从句，感觉不顺畅，要来回看上两遍方能领悟楼主意图。






翻看原文才发现楼主的记忆能力和记笔记的能力真的好强！！！！不过我想说，在考试的时候最好转述，有些东西是最好用自己的话流畅地表达出来。另外，对我的疏忽表示歉意！上边第一点真的是没有看到后面那个as he described 。。。。
楼主的信息量掌握得真的太好了！！huluhulufei 像楼主学习！！！

包子不包子

回复  TPO 8

Both of（应去掉） the professor and the lecturer explore the reliability of Chevalier's memoir. The author lists three episodes（points更好）to dispute that the memoir is unbelievable. The professor, on the contrary, insists that no memoir can be correct in every detail. Besides, Chevalier's memoir is accurate overall and is a kind of reliable historical source.开篇很好~语言简洁，观点明确~

First, about the loan from the merchants, it does not explain the poverty of Chevalier exactly, says the speaker（the loan from the merchants doesn’t reflect Chevalier’s poverty, as the speaker says. 这么说更好，感觉原句有语法问题）. In Switzerland, Chevalier spent large amount of money on parties and gambling and（两个and 连一起，若非看后面，则容易困惑。最好另起一句。） he had wealth(最好用 assets, wealth 感觉偏向于财富，泛泛，而assets 更显资产的韵味。资产中毕竟有现金与不动产之分，更易理解。), which is(was) a kind of property that have to sale（sell） first（楼主应再仔细斟酌这句话，可以换个更流畅的句式）. Therefore, he has to wait for few days（若是这么写，那就是不几天就能换得现金。应用： a few days, 一个a 可不能小看，不能省却了~）before his asset can be converted to real money（感觉怪，还是用cash或者是 actual money 鲜明易懂，更地道。real 这个词是表明真假的，real money 是强调真实的钱，是真币，不是假币。侧重点并非楼主所说是现金的意思。）. During that period of time, he had to borrow money from the merchants. However, that does not mean that Chevalier is poor. Accordingly, this disproves its counterpart in the reading directly.观点明确，无信息缺失~

Moreover, the lecturer declares that Chevalier wrote down everything he could remember after the conversation with Voltaire each night, which was used as his reference for the writing of his memoir（which was used as his reference for writhing memoir. 这么说是不是更好？）. Also, further support is provided by the witness who lived with Chevalier in his late years. They states that Chevalier consulted to his notes and journals frequently when he was writing the memoir. Consequently, the truth of the conversation content is proved, which is another place whereexperiencesthe contradicted theory with the passage.观点明确~无信息缺失。

At last, others(指代不明，前文没有铺垫) in prison with Chevalier had ever（even）more powerful friends than him, but none of them bribeto（bribed for, 或者 bribed their way to） freedom（语义有问题，此句结尾翻译过来是：他们中没有一个人为了自由而贿赂。原文应为：没有一个人因为贿赂而获得自由。此句应为：At last, there were other people in prison who had even more powerful friends than Chevalier, however hadn’t been freed by bribery ）. The professor thereby asserts that bribe(bribery) hardly can explain the escape of Chevalier. According to the old document(government document in Venice), soon after Chevalier's escape, the celling(ceiling) of his old prison room(直接为 prison即可) was repaired. Why would they repair the celling（ceiling） unless Chevalier really escaped as he describe(此句翻译过来应为：为什么他们要修屋顶，除非Chevalier 真的逃跑了呢？这句话不通。应改为： They wouldn’t need to repair the ceiling unless…….)? Consequently, the last episode is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, Chevalier's memoir lacks credibility, is incorrect.



整体框架很好，信息也无确实。但楼主在句式和用词上还需斟酌，尤其是细节部分。

-- by 会员 huluhulufei (2012/7/18 21:00:03)

谢谢fei改的那么仔细~
包子有些问题啊 文章里面出现的一些句子词汇 是按听力复述的 这样，这样。。。怎么说啊 考试的时候改么？O(∩_∩)O谢谢~~

Both of（应去掉） the professor and the lecturer explore the reliability of Chevalier's memoir. The author lists three episodes（points更好）to dispute that the memoir is unbelievable. The professor, on the contrary, insists that no memoir can be correct in every detail. Besides, Chevalier's memoir is accurate overall and is a kind of reliable historical source.开篇很好~语言简洁，观点明确~

First, about the loan from the merchants, it does not explain the poverty of Chevalier exactly, says the speaker（the loan from the merchants doesn’t reflect Chevalier’s poverty, as the speaker says. 这么说更好，感觉原句有语法问题）. In Switzerland, Chevalier spent large amount of money on parties and gamblingand（两个and 连一起，若非看后面，则容易困惑。最好另起一句。）he had wealth(最好用 assets, wealth 感觉偏向于财富，泛泛，而assets 更显资产的韵味。资产中毕竟有现金与不动产之分，更易理解。), which is(was) a kind of property that have to sale（sell） first（楼主应再仔细斟酌这句话，可以换个更流畅的句式）. Therefore, he has to wait for few days（若是这么写，那就是不几天就能换得现金。应用： a few days, 一个a 可不能小看，不能省却了~）before his asset can be converted to real money（感觉怪，还是用cash或者是 actual money 鲜明易懂，更地道。real 这个词是表明真假的，real money 是强调真实的钱，是真币，不是假币。侧重点并非楼主所说是现金的意思。）. During that period of time, he had to borrow money from the merchants. However, that does not mean that Chevalier is poor. Accordingly, this disproves its counterpart in the reading directly.观点明确，无信息缺失~

Moreover, the lecturer declares that Chevalier wrote down everything he could remember after the conversation with Voltaire each night, which was used as his reference for the writing of his memoir（which was used as his reference for writhing memoir. 这么说是不是更好？）. Also, further support is provided by the witness who lived with Chevalier in his late years. They states that Chevalier consulted to his notes and journals frequently when he was writing the memoir. Consequently, the truth of the conversation content is proved, which is another place whereexperiencesthe contradicted theory with the passage.观点明确~无信息缺失。

At last, others(指代不明，前文没有铺垫) in prison with Chevalier had ever（even）more powerful friends than him, but none of them bribeto（bribed for, 或者 bribed their way to） freedom（语义有问题，此句结尾翻译过来是：他们中没有一个人为了自由而贿赂。原文应为：没有一个人因为贿赂而获得自由。此句应为：At last, there were other people in prison who had even more powerful friends than Chevalier, however hadn’t been freed by bribery ）. The professor thereby asserts that bribe(bribery) hardly can explain the escape of Chevalier. According to the old document(government document in Venice), soon after Chevalier's escape, the celling(ceiling) of his old prison room(直接为 prison即可) was repaired.Why would they repair the celling（ceiling） unless Chevalier really escaped as he describe(此句翻译过来应为：为什么他们要修屋顶，除非Chevalier 真的逃跑了呢？这句话不通。应改为： They wouldn’t need to repair the ceiling unless…….)? Consequently, the last episode is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, Chevalier's memoir lacks credibility, is incorrect.

huluhulufei

回复  TPO 8

Both of（应去掉） the professor and the lecturer explore the reliability of Chevalier's memoir. The author lists three episodes（points更好）to dispute that the memoir is unbelievable. The professor, on the contrary, insists that no memoir can be correct in every detail. Besides, Chevalier's memoir is accurate overall and is a kind of reliable historical source.开篇很好~语言简洁，观点明确~

First, about the loan from the merchants, it does not explain the poverty of Chevalier exactly, says the speaker（the loan from the merchants doesn’t reflect Chevalier’s poverty, as the speaker says. 这么说更好，感觉原句有语法问题）. In Switzerland, Chevalier spent large amount of money on parties and gambling and（两个and 连一起，若非看后面，则容易困惑。最好另起一句。） he had wealth(最好用 assets, wealth 感觉偏向于财富，泛泛，而assets 更显资产的韵味。资产中毕竟有现金与不动产之分，更易理解。), which is(was) a kind of property that have to sale（sell） first（楼主应再仔细斟酌这句话，可以换个更流畅的句式）. Therefore, he has to wait for few days（若是这么写，那就是不几天就能换得现金。应用： a few days, 一个a 可不能小看，不能省却了~）before his asset can be converted to real money（感觉怪，还是用cash或者是 actual money 鲜明易懂，更地道。real 这个词是表明真假的，real money 是强调真实的钱，是真币，不是假币。侧重点并非楼主所说是现金的意思。）. During that period of time, he had to borrow money from the merchants. However, that does not mean that Chevalier is poor. Accordingly, this disproves its counterpart in the reading directly.观点明确，无信息缺失~

Moreover, the lecturer declares that Chevalier wrote down everything he could remember after the conversation with Voltaire each night, which was used as his reference for the writing of his memoir（which was used as his reference for writhing memoir. 这么说是不是更好？）. Also, further support is provided by the witness who lived with Chevalier in his late years. They states that Chevalier consulted to his notes and journals frequently when he was writing the memoir. Consequently, the truth of the conversation content is proved, which is another place whereexperiencesthe contradicted theory with the passage.观点明确~无信息缺失。

At last, others(指代不明，前文没有铺垫) in prison with Chevalier had ever（even）more powerful friends than him, but none of them bribeto（bribed for, 或者 bribed their way to） freedom（语义有问题，此句结尾翻译过来是：他们中没有一个人为了自由而贿赂。原文应为：没有一个人因为贿赂而获得自由。此句应为：At last, there were other people in prison who had even more powerful friends than Chevalier, however hadn’t been freed by bribery ）. The professor thereby asserts that bribe(bribery) hardly can explain the escape of Chevalier. According to the old document(government document in Venice), soon after Chevalier's escape, the celling(ceiling) of his old prison room(直接为 prison即可) was repaired. Why would they repair the celling（ceiling） unless Chevalier really escaped as he describe(此句翻译过来应为：为什么他们要修屋顶，除非Chevalier 真的逃跑了呢？这句话不通。应改为： They wouldn’t need to repair the ceiling unless…….)? Consequently, the last episode is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, Chevalier's memoir lacks credibility, is incorrect.



整体框架很好，信息也无确实。但楼主在句式和用词上还需斟酌，尤其是细节部分。

包子不包子

7.18综合

tpo9

Both of the professor and the writer explore the issue about whether hydrogen based fuel engine has advantages over the internal combustion engine for cars. The author lists three aspects of advantages to support that the hydrogen based fuel engine is a good solution. The speaker, on the contrary, insists that the writer is too optimistic in the hydrogen based engine because hydrogen is not the solution.

First, hydrogen is not as easily available as the writer described in the passage, claims the professor, its common present -water- is not the usable form of hydrogen to produce energy. The energy can only be produced through the pure liquid state of hydrogen, which is a highly artificial process. Besides, it is difficult to produce and store, which has to be kept in extremely cold environment that is -253 Degree Celsius. Imagine how complex the technology could be, the fuel cell engine is not that practical and hydrogen is also not an easy approached substance. Therefore, this disproves its counterpart in the reading directly.

Moreover, the speaker declares that hydrogen is not the solution to the pollution problem. He explains that producing the pure hydrogen creates pollution. Purification technology is required to generate pure hydrogen, which needs energy that is provided by the burning of coals and oil. Accordingly, although cars are not the origin of pollution, the factories produce pure hydrogen are. Consequently, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that hydrogen based fuel cell engine does not cost less. The reason is that platum, a kind of rare and expensive metal, is required in this engine. Without that the hydrogen cannot go through the process of chemical reaction in order to produce energy. Furthermore, the replacement of another cheaper material has so far been unsuccessful. Accordingly, the last point is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, the advantage of hydrogen based fuel cell engine overweighs that of internal combustion engine, is incorrect.