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超级无敌小鹤鹤

哎呀呀~~ 不行不行~ 人老了，就素不自觉！

嗯嗯！索性厚着脸皮挖个小坑！把各种弱爆了的作文埋进去！！
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童颜公主

收藏哦～～～～ 慢慢研究中～～～

summerwaker

啊。。。integrated writing的字数这样会不会太少了？

超级无敌小鹤鹤

额  木有啦。。。 模板式的啦~~~
发现这篇好多无可饶恕的错误。。。蹲墙角反省去。。。

易雨水巷

TPO7
高亮为精彩 蓝色为意见或者建议  绿色为总结
The reading and the lecture bothdiscuss theecocertification whichhelps to encourage ecologically sustainable forestry practices. The reading passage givescredence to the claim that American wood companies may be (maybe/may  后面有动词do不能与be 连用呐)unlikely do the same asother companies; meanwhile,the professor provides evidences contrary to this assertion.

It ismentioned in the passage that American consumers will not pay much attention tothe advertising because it is just so much. The professor, however, declaresthat companies in the United States do not treat all advertising the same. He points out that Americansusually have a lot of confidence in dependent （independent?） agencies and so they will reactfavorably to wood products with the ecocertification.

The nextview made by the reading is that the ecocertified (certified?)wood will cost more than uncertified ones, thus making American consumers whocare deeply about the price choose cheaper uncertified products. But theprofessor demurs about (demur 不及物动词， 表示反对，+to) this idea. According to him,American consumers are likely to do choose on factories other than price whenthe difference between two products is small. Additionally, the professor also maintains that Americanscare a lot about the value of preserving and protecting the environment.

Finally, to counter the assertionthat pursuing certification will make almost no sense for American woodcompanies because their most products are just sold in the United States, theprofessor claims that these companies should also pay attention to the globalwood business because of foreign competitors. As the professor says, foreigncompanies will soon start crowding into American markets if the local ones areslow capturing their consumers.

Inconclusion, the reading strongly believes that there is no good for Americanwood companies to pursue the ecocertification; however, the professor refutesthese evidences and provides his own proofs of this very fact.

To 鹤鹤：
雨巷拜读完毕！
只想说，听力要不要听得这么好啊。。。。
开头要不要这么好啊。。。。

超级无敌小鹤鹤

5.6 IntegratedWriting TPO 7

The reading and the lecture both discuss the ecocertification which helps to encourage ecologically sustainable forestry practices. The reading passage gives credence to the claim that American wood companies may be unlikely do the same as other companies; meanwhile, the professor provides evidences contrary to this assertion.

It is mentioned in the passage that American consumers will not pay much attention to the advertising because it is just so much. The professor, however, declares that companies in the United States do not treat all advertising the same. He points out that Americans usually have a lot of confidence in dependent agencies and so they will react favorably to wood products with the ecocertification.

The next view made by the reading is that the ecocertified wood will cost more than uncertified ones, thus making American consumers who care deeply about the price choose cheaper uncertified products. But the professor demurs about this idea. According to him, American consumers are likely to do choose on factories other than price when the difference between two products is small. Additionally, the professor also maintains that Americans care a lot about the value of preserving and protecting the environment.

Finally, to counter the assertion that pursuing certification will make almost no sense for American wood companies because their most products are just sold in the United States, the professor claims that these companies should also pay attention to the global wood business because of foreign competitors. As the professor says, foreign companies will soon start crowding into American markets if the local ones are slow capturing their consumers.

In conclusion, the reading strongly believes that there is no good for American wood companies to pursue the ecocertification; however, the professor refutes these evidences and provides his own proofs of this very fact.

Crystaljoy

5.5 IntegratedWriting TPO 6

The reading and the lecture both discuss the communal online encyclopedias. The reading passage gives credence to the claim that these new encyclopedias are not as useful as traditional ones because of some important problems; meanwhile, the professor provides evidences contrary to this assertion. （Perfect！）

It is mentioned in the passage that the encyclopedias online may have some errors. The professor, however, declares that even traditional encyclopedias can hardly expect（be expected） to be perfectly accurate. She points out that it is online encyclopedias that make it easy for errors in factual materials to be corrected in time. (我突然搞不清楚强调句的V看谁了。)

The nest（next?） view made by the reading is that the online encyclopedias are just easily hacked into by some malicious users. But the professor demurs about this idea. According to her, two strategies have already been developed to protecting (protect) the articles. One is to put the crucial facts in the articles with a read only format that no one can make changes to, and the other is to have special editors to keep a lookout over the articles.（好！）

Finally, to counter the assertion that the online encyclopedias create a false impression of what is important, the professor claims that the problem is just that traditional encyclopedias have limited space so that they should decide what is important（感觉没说完，试试：have too limited space to cover various topics except for the most important ones）. What is more, the judgments that make these decisions do not reflect the great range of interests that people really have.（好吧，看到这发现你说完了~） So the professor declares that the diversity of use(删除) in topics is actually one of the online encyclopedias’ great advantages.（great advantages of online encyclopedias）

In conclusion, the reading strongly believes that online encyclopedias are much less valuable than traditional ones; however, the professor refutes these evidences and provides her own proofs of this very fact. （Perfect！）





语言，结构，内容。。各种完美！无懈可击！

超级无敌小鹤鹤

5.5 IntegratedWriting TPO 6

The reading and the lecture both discuss the communal online encyclopedias. The reading passage gives credence to the claim that these new encyclopedias are not as useful as traditional ones because of some important problems; meanwhile, the professor provides evidences contrary to this assertion.

It is mentioned in the passage that the encyclopedias online may have some errors. The professor, however, declares that even traditional encyclopedias can hardly expect to be perfectly accurate. She points out that it is online encyclopedias that make it easy for errors in factual materials to be corrected in time.

The nest view made by the reading is that the online encyclopedias are just easily hacked into by some malicious users. But the professor demurs about this idea. According to her, two strategies have already been developed to protecting the articles. One is to put the crucial facts in the articles with a read only format that no one can make changes to, and the other is to have special editors to keep a lookout over the articles.

Finally, to counter the assertion that the online encyclopedias create a false impression of what is important, the professor claims that the problem is just that traditional encyclopedias have limited space so that they should decide what is important. What is more, the judgments that make these decisions do not reflect the great range of interests that people really have. So the professor declares that the diversity of use in topics is actually one of the online encyclopedias’ great advantages.

In conclusion, the reading strongly believes that online encyclopedias are much less valuable than traditional ones; however, the professor refutes these evidences and provides her own proofs of this very fact.

maylovehe1

The reading and lecture both discuss the Chaco great houses. While the reading states the three competing theories about the use of these structures, the professor believes these are just utterly false and without merit.

It is mentioned in the passage that the Chaco (单复数考虑一下) were big apartments housing (for)hundreds of people. The professor, however, declares that the primary function could not be residential. He points out that every family should have a fireplace for cooking but there have only few ones, which is just (delete just) not enough.

The next view made by the reading is that the great houses were used to store food supplies. But the professor demurs about these idea. According to him(according to his viewpoint), more traces of maize or big maize containers should remain if the houses were used for storage. (点都说到了,散落的玉米和放玉米的容器)

Finally, to counter the assertion that the great houses were ceremonial centers, the professor mentions the mound closed to Pueblo Alto. It contains lots of other materials that people would not expect from ceremonies. The professor declares that this fact suggests that the mound is just a trash heap of construction material and could not be used for special ceremonies.(写的真好)

In conclusion, the reading gives three theories to describe the use of the great housed; however, the professor refutes these conjectures and provides his own proofs of this very fact.

great!!!

超级无敌小鹤鹤

@maylove1 鹤鹤上传了哈~~