这周六就考了。给我改改ARGU吧。。最后的挣扎。。

yuandefeiyi

The following is a letter to the editor of the Waymarsh Times.        

Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. Although just three years ago a state traffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the commute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed. Members of the town council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential neighborhoods. It would be better to follow the example of the nearby city of Garville. Last year Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving them coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Garville have dropped since the policy was implemented, and people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen considerably. There is no reason why a policy like Garville's shouldn't work equally well in Waymarsh."      

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.




In this letter, the author recommends that Waymarsh should implement a similar policy like Garville's that rewards people who share rides to work and give them coupons for free gas. To bolster the recommendation, the author points out that pollution levels in Garville have decreased since the policy was implemented and people from Garvill said commuting times have dropped. However, the argument is rife with holes. In order to make the argument to be more cogent and persuasive, several evidences should be added.

Firstly, the author provides scant evidence that the commuter took 20 more minutes to work necessarily indicate that traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. It is entirely possible that the city government has taken a policy that decrease the speed limit during these three years, thus the commuters would take more times to work. If the government increase the speed limit, the commuter would go to work fast. Or perhaps the survey was just completed during the summer, in which increasingly numbers of people come to here for tourism. Hence, this phenomenon lead to the traffic jam. Maybe after the peak season, the traffic will recover its order. For both matter, the author's recommendation that address the traffic problem is unnecessary.

Even if the traffic in Waymarsh is becoming a serious problem, we are not formed that the relevant circumstances in nearby city Garllie is same with that in Waymarsh. The decreased pollution levels in Garllie may be not resulted from the policy. Since we do not know what is the kind of pollution which has been decreased, may be it is just the level of water pollution has dropped, other than air pollution which is nothing to do with traffic. Even if it is air pollution, that has been decreased, maybe it is because there are more trees in this city that the air becomes more clear. Thus, the author cannot conclude that the policy in Garllie is successful.

Furthermore, we need the evidence that the actual number of people who tell the author. Maybe it is too slight, and cannot be representatve  of all commuters in Garillie.  erhaps much more people think the policy make them take more times to work since their bad bicycle skill. Even if the commuters in Garvlle were take less times to work, it do not demonstrate that the people in Waymarsh have the same respondent. It is entirely possible that there are large different between the two cities. Maybe the size of  Waymarh is bigger than of Gariile, and commuters in Waymarh may take far more times such as 2 hours to work by bike while half an hour by car. Thus the people still would like to work by car. Without considering and ruling out these possibilities, I remains unconvinced that a policy like Garivills's should be equally well in Waymarh.

In summary, in order to make the recommendation to be more persuasive, the writer should provides evidence that he commuter took 20 more minutes to work necessarily indicate that traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem, and that
the relevant circumstances in  nearby city Garllie is same with that in Waymarsh. Otherwise, the author's assertion is untenable.

竹林中人

感觉很好

yuandefeiyi

谢谢普度 大哥。嘿嘿

普渡哥

发现一些时态问题，其它都很好