OG12 SC-88（已解决）

ainiAnnie

又把这道题目贴出来是因为，查了很多以前的解答，觉得和OG上的解答相差甚远。

88. The lonious Monk, who was a jazz pianist and composer, produced a body of work both rooted in the stride-piano tradition of Willie (The Lion) Smith and Duke Ellington, yet in many ways he stood apart from the mainstream jazz repertory.

(A) The lonious Monk, who was a jazz pianist and composer, produced a body of work both rooted

(B) The lonious Monk, the jazz pianist and composer, produced a body of work that was rooted both

(C) Jazz pianist and composer The lonious Monk, who produced a body of work rooted

(D) Jazz pianist and composer The lonious Monk produced a body of work that was rooted

(E) Jazz pianist and composer The lonious Monk produced a body of work rooted both

Grammatical construction; Rhetorical

construction

The subject of the sentence is The lonious Monk, and the sentence tells about two things that he did: produced and stood apart. The work he produced was rooted in the mainstream (stride piano) jazz tradition, yet at the same time, he deviated from this tradition. Q1 The use of a relative clause (who was a jazz pianist …) or an appositive (the jazz pianist …) introduces unnecessary wordiness and grammatical complexity. Since only one point is being made about Monk’s body of work, the appearance of the word both in the clause presenting the claim about Monk’s work is deceptive as well as grammatically incorrect.

A The relative clause introduces wordiness and confusion.Q2

B The appositive introduces wordiness and unnecessary grammatical complexity.Q3

C The sentence is a fragment because the main subject, The lonious Monk, has no verb.

D Correct. The sentence concisely identifies The lonious Monk and expresses the single

point about his work without unnecessary or misleading words.

E The appearance of both is misleading, since only one point is being made about where

Monk’s musical roots are located.

The correct answer is D.

对于OG的解释表示疑惑:
共有3个问题，希望NN们解答。
Q1，Q2 confusion？个人觉得没有歧义，不会confusing啊，Q3

Grace828

babybearmm 发表于 2012-2-22 16:40
我觉得你的思路对的，both那里是很明显的错误，可以直接排除....至于你的问题，我觉得A里面"comma+who was  ...

很受益，非常赞

EcHo-

zhongshanlh 发表于 2012-3-25 13:30
baby姐，你解释的A中的wordy与non-idomatic我理解，但是1.OG解释中提到的confusion是怎么说啊？？这个确实 ...

很棒啊！thx

忧郁的废物

babybearmm 发表于 2012-4-4 08:33
回楼上，C的错误是句子结构问题，语法错误。Choice C is sayingJazz pianist and composer X, who bla bla, ...

求问baby姐这个题中的C用的是a body of work rooted，而D用的是a body of word that was rooted者相比不是明显的D的modifier很wordy，既然可以用分词就没必要用从句，这不是很多题都只用这个来排除选项的吗？

owencjk

受益匪浅

ainiAnnie

我现在觉得og里所说的confusing主要是指那个 both...and...
其实根本不是这个结构，因为只介绍了一方面的内容，会让人误以为是两方面。
Since only one point is being made about Monk’s body of work, the appearance of the word both in the clause presenting the claim about Monk’s work is deceptive as well as grammatically incorrect.

ximenheng

不错~

ainiAnnie

我觉得你的思路对的，both那里是很明显的错误，可以直接排除....

至于你的问题，我觉得A里面"comma+who was ..."确实wordy & non-idiomatic
B的表达不对，"the"应该改成"a"
我google找的例句：
Alexander Solzhenitsyn, a Nobel laureate, died of heart failure last month.
注意这里的冠词是a不是the，因为这里不是某个特定的position (e.g. the CEO of Google)。此题同理，pianist/composer都是profession，所以不能用the.

以下from Ron@Manhattan  
http://www.manhattangmat.com/forums/s-c-thelonious-monk-who-was-a-jazz-pianist-t7519.html

this is a special idiom.  if you preface someone's name with a noun describing their occupation (or other word describing what that person does), WITHOUT AN ARTICLE, you DO NOT use a comma.

if there's an article, you DO use a comma.

if it's an adjective, you DO use a comma.

example:
Jazz pianist and composer Thelonious Monk ... --> correct
A jazz pianist and composer, Thelonious Monk ... --> correct
Creative and original, Thelonious Monk ... --> correct

-- by 会员 babybearmm (2012/2/22 16:40:43)

在过第三遍SC的时候,发现自己这里出了漏洞,蓝色部分的字看了很久才明白过来, 真的很有用~

谢谢Baby姐姐~ 也谢谢楼楼的分享解答, 对我很有用~感谢~

-- by 会员 CCcarol (2012/4/7 20:54:01)

不客气~主要还是baby姐姐讲解的好~~你都过第三遍了啊，惭愧惭愧。。。

CCcarol

我觉得你的思路对的，both那里是很明显的错误，可以直接排除....

至于你的问题，我觉得A里面"comma+who was ..."确实wordy & non-idiomatic
B的表达不对，"the"应该改成"a"
我google找的例句：
Alexander Solzhenitsyn, a Nobel laureate, died of heart failure last month.
注意这里的冠词是a不是the，因为这里不是某个特定的position (e.g. the CEO of Google)。此题同理，pianist/composer都是profession，所以不能用the.

以下from Ron@Manhattan  
http://www.manhattangmat.com/forums/s-c-thelonious-monk-who-was-a-jazz-pianist-t7519.html

this is a special idiom.  if you preface someone's name with a noun describing their occupation (or other word describing what that person does), WITHOUT AN ARTICLE, you DO NOT use a comma.

if there's an article, you DO use a comma.

if it's an adjective, you DO use a comma.

example:
Jazz pianist and composer Thelonious Monk ... --> correct
A jazz pianist and composer, Thelonious Monk ... --> correct
Creative and original, Thelonious Monk ... --> correct

-- by 会员 babybearmm (2012/2/22 16:40:43)

在过第三遍SC的时候,发现自己这里出了漏洞,蓝色部分的字看了很久才明白过来, 真的很有用~

谢谢Baby姐姐~ 也谢谢楼楼的分享解答, 对我很有用~感谢~

babybearmm

回楼上，C的错误是句子结构问题，语法错误。
Choice C is saying
Jazz pianist and composer X, who bla bla, yet he stood ....
看出来了吧？