不以30分为目标的行为都是耍，流，氓！

Serena0710

带着一战21分的成绩，Serena回归了。
      722考了二战，苦逼的被ETS弄丢了答案，导致没分。
      916三站，也是终结的一战。一切努力都是为了向110+靠拢。加油！

gre呀gre

9.6 独立9.6 The most important problems that affectour society today could be solved within our lifetime.

红色是错误 蓝色是没错但是改了更好
Human beings have made numerousbreakthroughs since the industrial reformation. You can not imagine the lifewithout telecommunications. You can not imagine life without light. You caneither not imagine life without the Internet. However, problems such as theabolition of nuclear weapons, fuel shortage and water scarcity need to beaddressed and they may not be solved within our lifetime.


First and foremost, worse and worse environmental conditions necessities more effort toconserve our limited resources（这句缺谓语啊）.We can see that the more and more people who live on the island（islands）on pacific（the Pacific，pacific小写不加the是温和的意思） have become homeless because of theraise of sea level, caused by global warming. We can also see （两个see有点重复了，换个词汇更好witness什么的）thatmillion（millions或者a million）of children die of starvation and water scarcity. Take my daily life as a（an）example. Almost every family in our city has at least one private car.Consequently, the fresh air has disappeared. Gradually, I felt veryuncomfortable with my nose. I went to see my doctor and the diagnose is（was） allergy to the emission of cars. SoI have to stay at time for a ling time to cure the disease on my nose.Apparently, the environment problems have posed threatens on people's dailylife.


What's（What is，托福不让缩写） more, human being are still suffer（sufferring） from the war（改成wars更好吧，这里没有特指啊）, especially the threatens brought by thenuclear weapons. Through out the humanity history, people fight for rights, forfreedom, for territory and for resources and origin of all these fight is thathuman beings are greedy- they always desire more than what they（加上already更好吧） have. In 2002, Americanauthorities stared（started） the war with Iraq for the purpose of oilcontrol. However, that was the beginning of mounting pain on the human being.People in Iraq lost their family and friends in the war and the country had tobe faced with a great economic loss. Not only in Iraq, but also in American,parents lose（lost） sons andyoung people lost friend since thousands of soldiers were killed by thatcold-blood war. There are the all fates we can notoversee.（这些命运是我们不能监督的？意思有点奇怪，therebe的句型用在这里也很怪~）


The above-mentioned clearly illustrate mypoint that the problems of our time（within our lifetime更好吧）will not be solved. But, pessimism is not the solution. Instead, we need tore-examine ourselves and what we have created, to minimize the loss and （加上to更好吧）continueour endeavor to tackle the problems.

E月羽

The reading passage examines the topic that young people, in general, are reading less literature, negatively affecting the reading public. The professor's speech concerns with the same topic. However, she contends that reading less literature does not mean a unfortunate future of literature, which is opposite to what the reading passage says. And in the lecture, she offers plenty of evidence to buttress her idea.

First, even though the reading passage indicates that there is no better thing to stimulate intellectual than reading literature does. The professor argues in the lecture that not only the literature, but also the science books, history and political analysis are of high quality and creative. Reading these kinds of books can also provide us accessibilities to intellectual stimulation. Apparently, the professor's argument raises doubts about the relevant point in the reading passage.

Second, the statement in the reading passage shows that the replacements (我觉得可以加个activities, such as watching TV ,)of literature read by pubic(public) nowadays are poorly written and meaningless. However, the professor states that plenty of materials, such as music and movie do not lower the culture standard. Except literature, there are plenty forms of culture to express. Listening to brilliant music or watching an excellent movie can have equal effect with literature.

Finally, the professor believes that readers can not be blamed for reading less literature while the professor claims that current writers are less motivated to make new works because of the absence of audience. The professor verifies this point by stating that the authors make their novels much more difficult for the readers to understand than before.

To sum up, the professor precisely finds the flaws in the reading passage and compelling proves that people reading literature far less has negative effects on both the reader and writer in the future.

大牛，写的非常perfect，听力各个点都到位，表达完美

Serena0710

The readingpassage examines the topic that young people, in general, are reading lessliterature, negatively affecting the reading public. The professor's speechconcerns with the same topic. However, she contends that reading lessliterature does not mean a unfortunate future of literature, which is oppositeto what the reading passage says. And in the lecture, she offers plenty ofevidence to buttress her idea.

First, even thoughthe reading passage indicates that there is no better thing to stimulate intellectualthan reading literature does. The professor argues in the lecture that not onlythe literature, but also the science books, history and political analysis areof high quality and creative. Reading these kinds of books can also provide us accessibilitiesto intellectual stimulation. Apparently, the professor's argument raises doubtsabout the relevant point in the reading passage.

Second, thestatement in the reading passage shows that the replacements of literature readby pubic nowadays are poorly written and meaningless. However, the professorstates that plenty of materials, such as music and movie do not lower theculture standard. Except literature, there are plenty forms of culture toexpress. Listening to brilliant music or watching an excellent movie can haveequal effect with literature.

Finally, theprofessor believes that readers can not be blamed for reading less literaturewhile the professor claims that current writers are less motivated to make newworks because of the absence of audience. The professor verifies this point bystating that the authors make their novels much more difficult for the readersto understand than before.

To sum up, theprofessor precisely finds the flaws in the reading passage and compellingproves that people reading literature far less has negative effects on both thereader and writer in the future.

Serena0710

Human beings have made numerous breakthroughs since the industrial reformation. You can not imagine the life without telecommunications. You can not imagine life without light. You can either not imagine life without the Internet. However, problems such as the abolition of nuclear weapons, fuel shortage and water scarcity need to be addressed and they may not be solved within our lifetime.


First and foremost, worse and worse environmental conditions necessities more effort to conserve our limited resources. We can see that the more and more people who live on the island on pacific have become homeless because of the raise of sea level, caused by global warming. We can also see that million of children die of starvation and water scarcity. Take my daily life as a example. Almost every family in our city has at least one private car. Consequently, the fresh air has disappeared. Gradually, I felt very uncomfortable with my nose. I went to see my doctor and the diagnose is allergy to the emission of cars. So I have to stay at time for a ling time to cure the disease on my nose. Apparently, the environment problems have posed threatens on people's daily life.


What's more, human being are still suffer from the war, especially the threatens brought by the nuclear weapons. Through out the humanity history, people fight for rights, for freedom, for territory and for resources and origin of all these fight is that human beings are greedy- they always desire more than what they have. In 2002, American authorities stared the war with Iraq for the purpose of oil control. However, that was the beginning of mounting pain on the human being. People in Iraq lost their family and friends in the war and the country had to be faced with a great economic loss. Not only in Iraq, but also in American, parents lose sons and young people lost friend since thousands of soldiers were killed by that cold-blood war. There are the all fates we can not oversee.


The above-mentioned clearly illustrate my point that the problems of our time will not be solved. But, pessimism is not the solution. Instead, we need to re-examine ourselves and what we have created, to minimize the loss and continue our endeavor to tackle the problems.

jijismile

The reading passage examines the topic that, environment pollutions, rather than attacks by predators are more likely the reasons for the declining of sea otter populations. The professor’s speech concerns with the same topic. However, she contends that environment pollution is more likely the explanation for the decreased otters, which is the opposite of what the reading passage says. And in the presentation, she offers lots of evidences to buttress her idea.

First, even though the reading passage indicates that water samples contain increased levels of chemical, which directly lead to the otters deaths for the reason that otters can't(尽量用cannot) fight against infections that threaten their life lives. The professor argues in the lecture that the pollution hypothesis will be weakened because no one can find death otters washing up on the Alaska beaches. That is not what we expect if pollutions give otters life-threatening infections. The fact that we can hardly find death otters proves the predator hypothesis.

Second, the reading passage states that pollutions have negative effects not only on the otter, but also on other sea mammals. However, the lecturer says that because human has preyed so much many whales that the orcas have to change their diets. Consequently, all the small sea mammals, including the sea lions and seals, are available for orcas.

Third, the professor believes that the amount of otters depends on the location they live while the reading passage claims (claim表主张意思时，后面好像不能直接名词，应该接that或者to be)the uneven pattern of otter decline.（这个你不知道你是否会有疑问，你再问我吧） The professor gives us details that otters living in the places where orcas can access easily decline greatly and ones in the place where orcas cant cannot get into do not decrease. She also points out the fact that orca is too large to get in to shallow and rocky areas to support her idea.

To sum up, the professor precisely finds the flaws in the reading passage, and compellingly(这个地方是不是应该用副词形式的啊？我没见过，所以不确定啊！) proves that environment pollutions instead of the predators cause the decline of sea otters in Alaska.



总结一下，Serena是不是刚练过gre的作文，感觉有些地方有点像。听力非常不错，几乎所有的内容都写出来了，厉害厉害，个别词汇有些小错误，稍加注意检查一下估计没有问题的！

Serena0710

The reading passage examines the top that, environment pollutions, ratherthan attacks by predators are more likely the reasons for the declining of seaotter populations. The professor’s speech concerns with the same topic.However, she contends that environment pollution is more likely the explanationfor the decreased otters, which is the opposite of what the reading passagesays. And in the presentation, she offers lots of evidence to buttress heridea.

First, even though the reading passage indicates that water samplescontain increased levels of chemical, which directly lead to the otters deathsfor the reason that otters can't fight against infections that threaten theirlife. The professor argues in the lecture that the pollution hypothesis will beweakened because no one can find death otters washing up on the Alaska

beaches. That isnot what we expect if pollutions give otters life-threatening infections. Thefact that we can hardly find death otters prove the predator hypothesis.

Second, the reading passage states that pollutions have negative effectsnot only on the otter, but also on other sea mammals. However, the lecturersays that because human has preyed so much whales that the orcas have to changetheir diets. Consequently, all the small sea mammals, including the sea lionsand seals, are available for orcas.

Third, the professor believes that the amount of otters depends on thelocation they live while the reading passage claims the uneven pattern of otterdecline. The professor gives us details that otters living in the place whereorcas can access easily decline greatly and ones in the place where orcas cantget into do not decrease. She also points out the fact that orca is too largeto get in to shallow and rocky areas to support her idea.

To sum up, the professor precisely finds the flaws in the reading passage,and compelling proves that environment pollutions instead of the predatorscause the decline of sea otters in Alaska
.

miss绿光

占一个。马上来看！哎呀我用的修订模式，粘贴不上来！！！
给你Q把~
另外，咱俩的头像现在很match呀有木有！！！

Serena0710

10.19二战的可以加入吗？

-- by 会员 Maverick3 (2012/8/30 11:41:30)

可以的，详情规则见此贴  http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-741014-1-1.html

Maverick3

10.19二战的可以加入吗？