issue 133 ，希望能指出逻辑、论证、语言三方面的不足，非常感谢！

dengjia

Claim: Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today.
Reason: The world today is significantly more complex than it was even in the relatively recent past.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.


The claim argues that past have no use for us in making decisions today, and it announces a separation between history and making important decisions based on the reason that recent world is more complex than the past. Surely, in the rapidly developing world, some modern affairs which may easier in early times become more complicated, and, yet, at the same time, some things become simple. In my view, past help man in many, although not all, important decisions today.

It is almost an axiom that important decisions are hard to make because of the innate quality of the relative problem, no matter how complex the world becomes or when to make those decisions. And whether the decisions important or not depends much on one's social status, value system and comprehension on it. So a vital thing to one may not have been taken into consideration to another. Insofar as what discussed above, knowing the past do little help for us.

Nevertheless, the world today develops complexities in some extent which complicate our process in making decisions. As we can see and experience the rapid developing technology bringing to us, past provide us scads of choice and masses of information when we make important decisions. For example, options become various when we choose an educating institution, and the extensive use of application on Internet save students' time spending on those trivialities. Yet, still some other things sustain their simplicity and may such as the anticipation and seek for freedom, equality and love.

However, complexity derived from the accumulation of the technology and social sense do help us in make decisive some individual and social affairs. Isaac Newton, one of the most important scientists of all time, has ever said, "If I have seen further it is by standing on the shoulders of giants." In the field of science, absorbing the knowledge and experience, indeed, works much, and may even as an unavoidable steps in developing science. Without these past scientific achievements, human could not design a rocket carried person into space, human could not find nuclear energy using as a possible source to implant the fossil energy, human could not enjoy the happiness and convenience brought by connection of friends or families one far away from another.

From the analysis above, we may conclude that although not all decisions we make today depends on the past, it influence today’s decisions in a large extent. Think about what we may be now if we discard all the experience and fruit of out ancestor may helps a lot in comprehending the significance of the past.

dengjia

谢谢竹林中人版主给出的建议~

竹林中人

感觉还不错，结构啊，开头和中间段落安排的比较好，尤其是首段中比较好的是你把对题目的理解写了，这点很好。继续加油，中间段落的论证，我觉得加点举例就更好了

dengjia

英文基础不错，连牛顿的first name都知道。。。

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/1/17 11:25:05)

那有没有什么其他低级错误或者什么的呢？能不能指点几个？

dengjia

英文基础不错，连牛顿的first name都知道。。。

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/1/17 11:25:05)

thank you sincerely, 普度哥。

_ _   牛顿是查的，不过也记住了，还知道Albert Einstein 呢。嘿嘿~~

是的，这两段是一个意思，那应该用 in contrast to the claim   比较好点么？

这篇写和改 花了我快5个小时吧，2月份就要考试了，我愁！！！！

普渡哥

英文基础不错，连牛顿的first name都知道。。。

普渡哥

没有看到你那段however和上面的转折关系。。。