作文交流贴 ISSUE 20---第一次写作以及心得兼求拍

jameszhm

感觉作文刚开始要列出几点赞同和反对原来论点的理由，观点尽量多，不要自我审查。
然后要确定自己的立场，标记第一步写的理由，为正理由或者负理由。这样有利于写的时候的查找。
写作的时候我犯了个错误，也就是第一段墨迹半天，下次刚开始不写第一段。
求指导。
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ISSUE 20
20) Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
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本人习作 时间：60min 字数:422
Do students need to choose a field of study based on the interest of their own or just the availability of the jobs?though, to much extent, getting a job after graduation to support oneselves as well as the family is the responsibility as an adult,I do agree with the former one.
I concede that one of the aims to study a field is to get a job, which would be the necessary step to utilise our ability learned through education.what's more, i also agree that some field of study would not be so attactive as others to many companies, we may take biology in china for example, the students who study biology would find it is not easy to get a job according to the unsophiscated industry in china.however it does not necessarily mean that we should choose a field of study based on availability of the jobs.
My first contention with the latter idea would be based on the old saying in china: interest is the best teacher.through the learning on the genius like newton in phisics,pauling in chemistry,we would conclude that people who concentrates on the subject he/she interested, they can make a difference by hardwork.in other words, they can acquire big success and fame as well as jobs of course,attribute to their interests.
secondly,according to my knowledge, it hard to tell whether the fields of study are attractive to job markets. we may take technology for example.in the ancient time of china , the science and technology would be not so popular as they are today.because in that time, there are no industries to attract the young,in strong contrast to the europe.but it is well known that  students who study science and technology are more easily get a job than other majors due to the booming industry in china nowadays. moreover,several years ago , the computer science are quite popular among the university and job market,due to the broken of the IT bubble，the job need for the field of computer science shrinked.we may jump to the conclusion that,it is not wise to follow the populace, because it is hard to identiy the availability of jobs,and it is wise to follow your heart considering talents and intersts when choosing a field of study.
in sum,it hard to identiy the availability of jobs on the field we are studying,and interest is the best teacher leading us to success,we should follow our heart,choose a field of study considering our own talents and intersts other than the availability of jobs in that field.

jameszhm

我看了范文 有些转折很巧妙的。比如用了depite  indeed 觉得很地道

冷月钟笛

嗯 转折前后必然是有矛盾的，不能因为思维跳跃而省略，不然读的人就会奇怪了~

ppguo

转折的时候要有铺垫，不能太突兀。

jameszhm

我当时可能只是想说明这个观点也有对的地方，然后下面准备转折的，这样是否不是很妥当？求指导

jameszhm

嗯 最新的一篇就开始改这个缺点了 阅读材料基本上都有中心句的 老外喜欢这个~~

jameszhm

但是有时候就会忘记 所以要不断提醒自己 当然也是每个人的习惯 可能~~

冷月钟笛

建议每段写出明显的观点，然后以此为基础展开~

冷月钟笛

“I concede that one of the aims to study a field is to get a job, which would be the necessary step to utilise our ability learned through education.what's more, i also agree that some field of study would not be so attactive as others to many companies,”
这一段要说明以工作为主选择专业更重要对吧~ 我觉得在你写完I concede... I also agree...之后，就应该说therefore, I consider ... is right. 然后再给例子比较清晰~

cqcn1991

很同意，要写好第一段很多时候必须全部想好才能写
不如直接开始写正文……