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大家帮忙看看作文,刚开始练,菜的厉害

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匿名  发表于 1970-1-1 08:00:00
地板
发表于 2007-10-16 21:45:00 | 只看该作者
It seems that the last supporting idea is not related to the outdoor activities.
板凳
发表于 2007-10-10 01:32:00 | 只看该作者
不错,需要改进开头。有点笨拙。
沙发
发表于 2007-10-9 23:24:00 | 只看该作者
In my opinion, I found your essay has some grammer mistakes.And also some words were not be used perfectly. Come on!I think you can do it! 
楼主
发表于 2007-10-9 14:47:00 | 只看该作者

大家帮忙看看作文,刚开始练,菜的厉害

麻烦大家帮我看看咯,有什么就直说,最好能给个分,谢谢咯

146. Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

In my point of view, spending my leisure time outdoors is as foremost as, if not more foremost than, being outside.So, why not choose to be outside.

The reasons are quite clear. Above all, to keep fit is the direct effect of spending leisure time outside. The most significant example of being outside is that we may get more close to the nature, that is to say, to obtain more refreshing air and to be accompanied with trees and flowers. What a wonderful life it is! If I am given some time to be relaxed, basketball, definitely, is my best alternative. While being a little kid, I was told doing exercise is the opitimum choise to kill the boring periode, which is similar with the disposal of leisure time for me.

A further reason why I prefer to staying outside during leisure time is that I may get myself immersed in the wonderful world when I am on the journey, which absolutely would render myself open to marvelouse particle distributed all over the earth. This is an amazing trip, isn't it? There is a good evidence, showing that when being at primary school, I had a dream that one day I could go to America to see how modern today's world is, to Brasil to enjoy what a life with a zero distance to the rainforest, and to China to get indulged in how civilized it was a multitude of years ago.

The last but by no means least reason is that odds that we could make friends with all sorts of people are so great, which might be a nonmatched forturn for each of us.

So from what has been discussed, one can draw the only conclusion that it weighs more to spend leisure time outside than to be indoors.

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