关于曼哈顿语法中的一个疑问

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manhattan 6th edition里76页有一句话：
Mary buys cookies made with the artificial sweetener SugarFree, which tastes as sweet as the corn syrup that her brother loves
but which has fewer calories than does an equivalent amount of corn syrup.
but前后是两个which-clause平行，but后能否把which去掉，直接变成...that her brother loves, but has fewer...让has 和tastes平行？

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Mary buys cookies made with the artificial sweetener SugarFree, which tastes as sweet as the corn syrup that her brother loves
but which has fewer calories than does an equivalent amount of corn syrup.
最後but接的fewer是修飾calories，那再後面的equivalent amount of 是不是應該改成equivalent number of 呢?
兩者應該都是在講calories才對吧?

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emmahiggins09 发表于 2017-2-26 19:23
是的句意残缺了，因为句子的本意是比较sweetner 和 syrup 而且 syrup that....这个引导的从句是非限制性 ...

同意！               

emmahiggins09

闭眼看书 发表于 2017-2-26 19:16
关于第二个问题我没有说清楚，就是去掉as...as...结构，变成Mary buys cookies made with the artificial ...

是的句意残缺了，因为句子的本意是比较sweetner 和 syrup 而且 syrup that....这个引导的从句是非限制性的不能去掉

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emmahiggins09 发表于 2017-2-26 18:26
Mary buys cookies made with the artificial sweetener SugarFree, which tastes as sweet as the corn  ...

第一个问题因为原句中which从句引导非限定从，把句子改写一下，让SugarFree变成主语：
SugarFree tastes as sweet as the corn syrup that her brother loves but has fewer calories tha does an equivalent amount of corn syrup.

我个人认为这里tastes和has两个working verb是可以平行的，但后面加上which使得平行结构更清晰，
mahattan 85页“often, the parallel phrasses or clauses may begin with the same signal word in order to remove ambiguity about where the parallelism begins”

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emmahiggins09 发表于 2017-2-26 18:26
Mary buys cookies made with the artificial sweetener SugarFree, which tastes as sweet as the corn  ...

关于第二个问题我没有说清楚，就是去掉as...as...结构，变成Mary buys cookies made with the artificial sweetener SugarFree, which tastes sweet but has fewer calories than does an equivalent amount of corn syrup. 这样的话应该是不对的，句意残缺了

emmahiggins09

闭眼看书 发表于 2017-2-26 11:01
谢谢解答！
但不太明白去掉which后But has fewer是怎么可以修饰到syrup的？
如果前半句去掉as as结构，变 ...

Mary buys cookies made with the artificial sweetener SugarFree, which tastes as sweet as the corn syrup that her brother loves but which has fewer calories than does an equivalent amount of corn syrup.

前面表红的that 修饰 the corn syrup, 如果后面but 没有which 的话 就可能会被解读成 the corn syrup that her brother loves, but has fewer calories 虽然如果看下去的话这句句子是nonsense 但是加出which 的话就能很明确的表示是在修饰sweetner, 剩下读者的脑细胞了

回到你提出的第二个问题去掉as...as... 这句话就不对了 因为 ,which tastes sweet the corn syrup 句子是不符合语法习惯的 which tastes sweet 才是对的 没有了as...as... the corn syrup 在句子里没有合理的位置

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emmahiggins09 发表于 2017-2-26 02:37
不可以，如果去掉which 那么读句子的人就不确定 but has fewer 修饰的是corn syrup 还是前面的 sweetener

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谢谢解答！
但不太明白去掉which后But has fewer是怎么可以修饰到syrup的？
如果前半句去掉as as结构，变成which tastes sweet...., but has fewer...这样对吗

emmahiggins09

不可以，如果去掉which 那么读句子的人就不确定 but has fewer 修饰的是corn syrup 还是前面的 sweetener

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