Issue 31 求拍~~ 6。16考试，作文不知如何提高哎~

wayde0628

Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.

It is various kinds of creatures living on the earth makes our planet so beautiful and amazing. Because of environmental changes, many kinds of species emerged, thrived and finally extinct. Due to the natural selection, many kinds of creatures have become endangered or extinct. It is a natural process which human being can’t prevent.
However, it is not mean that speaker’s assertion, that society should save endangered species only if the potential extinction due to human activity, is reasonable. This assertion is based on an unreasonable assumption, that is, we can clearly distinguish which extinctions are due to human force and which are not. Development of technology and scientist not only greatly improve the life of people, but also greatly enhance the human’s ability of damage the natural environment. For instance, people burn out fossil fuels to get energy, leading to increased concentration of carbon dioxide in atmosphere, ultimately causing the global warming. And then the environmental changes caused by global warming threats many wild animals living in Antarctic. In most cases, we just don’t know our activities have caused tremendous damage to the environment. Thus it is impossible to clearly distinguish which potential extinction of species is the result of human activities.
    What’s more, saving endangered species is of significant importance. Various kinds of animals represent biodiversity, which is an important part of a vital, healthy and functioning ecosystem. As we know, no creature on earth lives in the vacuum. Each organism is a part of ecosystem and all the ecosystems together comprise the biosphere of our planet. The elimination on one type of organism affects directly or indirectly for other species. Take food chain, for example, each species represents a link, with those on upper links consuming on those lower links. Elimination the lower links makes the food shortage on upper links, and elimination on the upper links makes the population of lower links out of control. In short, the extinction of one species would more or less affect the ecological balance. While with more and more species extinct, the ecological balance would be broken, thus would finally threat our human being.
    Meanwhile, it is impossible for people to abandon economic development just in order to save endangered species. Human being has a huge population of 7 billion, it is inevitable for people to exploit natural resource to support the life of human. In order to pursue better life, to create more glorious civilization, we not only need the development of economy, process of science and technology, but also need to use of natural resources. But this does not mean that we can excessively exploit natural resources and then damage the environment. We should seek a virtuous cycle in which process of technology and endangered species saving complementary to each other. We should develop our society and technology by using of natural recourse and depend on which better protect the environment and save the endangered species.
    In sum, the speaker’s assertion is unreasonable, human have responsibility to protect the endangered species and maintain the balance of ecosystem. It is unwise that people abandon the development of society in order to achieve environmental protection. The best way for us is to create a virtuous cycle in which development of human society and environmental protection can benefit to each other.

第一段：自然选择导致许多生物的诞生与灭亡，有些物种的灭亡确实与人类无关。
第二段：由于人们难以分清哪些生物的灭亡与人类活动有关，所以该论题不是很正确。
第三段：保护濒临动物具有重要的意义
第四段：但是不是一味的保护环境而忽略经济发展，应该寻求一条良性循环的道路
第五段：总结

wayde0628

再次球拍、。。

普渡哥

It is various kinds of creatures living on the earth makes our planet so beautiful and amazing.

第一句话就有很多语法问题。单复数不分。

说理还挺好的。

wayde0628

额~第一句话竟然就单复数错了，忘记好好检查下了、、、