跪地求教作文：）

betterfuture

请各位看看我的第二篇作文，指出小弟的缺陷，顺便给个分数（满分按6分算） 小弟在这里拜谢了：） 3号就考了，劳繁众位了


grades(marks) will encourage students. Do you agree or disagree.



In our current education structure, grades take a significant role. It has provided us an appropriate approach to measure a student’s performance. At the same time, it also encourages students to learn. Unfortunately, sometimes problems go with this so called “encourage”. I would like to reason and present some of my views as follows.

With the increasing number of students, it is unpractical even impossible for a teacher or supervisor to pay adequate attentions on every single student, since there are nearly 50 students in every class in schools. In other words, if there is no other complementary solution, students tend to loosen themselves or even lose their future object due to lacks of supervision. Fortunately, grades provide students another supervision mechanism and supply teachers a proper ruler to measure a student's ability and learning. In the last period of the semester, the teachers give students a test or ask them for paper. Then the teachers grade their performance and after that the students will get feedback about their effort during the semester. It is a relative perfect form, since it provides enough equality to every student. Students will then rejudge their learning by marks and redirect their study. If s/he gets a relative low mark, s/he will find his/her deficiency and then try harder in the following term. On the contrary, if s/he gets a high mark which even others envy, s/he will get encourage and at the same time, the self-confidence augments which will lead to better performance. In a word, grades help to promote our students' learning by encouraging or feedbacks.

However, just as I mentioned above, it is "relative" perfect compared to other approaches such as directly judging someone by the daily appearance or performance subjectively. Sometimes, it will cause a problem, in that we can't guarantee every student gets the absolute equality. The test paper corresponds to the teacher's thought rather than the subject itself. Therefore, teachers will give the test regarding their own interest, and if that is the case, , certain students who cannot adapt the professor’s style and some top-students who may neglect some details but grasp the rest knowledge might not get the ideal marks. As a result, marks not only can't encourage our students but even worse, students will cast doubt on their own abilities and lose heart about learning. It is a dangerous and unexpecting result for our educators.

To sum up, we should treat marks objectively, not just say that "They are absolute good or bad". Only if we realize its merits and drawbacks and cope them appropriately, can we make our education more successful and benefit our generation.

Joypan

LZ可以把文章发到作文专区。

betterfuture

哦 谢谢啦 我说怎么没有人理小弟呢：）

Alex_yx

先顶一下.~~

in today's structure of education  have been playing a/an XXX role 既然楼主是反驳,何不用一个seemingly 这样的副词: 有潜台词. at the same time= simultaneously. encourage 有很多同义词: stimulate motivate ...... spur(踢马剌=刺激) sometimes, the so-called term "encouraging" does raise many problems.

with the number of students exploring 感觉如何？ a xx or a XX. there are nearly 50 students in every class in schools 注意 是老外看你的作文; ....supervision. However, ... 没转折词 ...relative perfect 注意perfect 这个词不能相对类似的词还有favorite 这个词最好别副词修饰  最好把它自己副词化修饰其他 比如 perfectly beautified girl.   get 这样的万能词少用, 会感觉单一 没有达到ETS的 show a variety of vocabulary.

in that ...abosolute equality 写的好 (这段都不错) 只是论点句举了例子(SUCH AS)

merits and drawbacks 可以用更简单却更漂亮的pros and cons

看完了, 感觉LZ跟我水平差不多, 我上次是 2.5~3.5 FAIR(5分满分)  我估计是3.25左右

加油!