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楼主
发表于 2006-10-8 21:08:00 | 只看该作者

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Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends .  other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life . which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.

When it comes to the option that whether you will listen to the advice of family and friends or just follow your own experience when learning about life, it is always be a controversial dilemma. The truth is that now, at my age, I clearly see that the best way of learning about life would be a combination of the two ways noted above.

To listen to the advice of family and friends, it seems to be safer. We may look into every possible reason; however, foremost reason for my propensity is that people will have more opportunity to choose the wise decision when others offer their practical advice which is abstracted from their own experience. Whether the experience is bitter or sweet, the one giving to you must teach a lesson to your family members or friends. Owing to this, they know more about how to deal with the similar problem and can lead you to the right way. Secondly, several people to face a fiddle together is better than only one person alone to do it. From all these factors presented above, learning well about life owes a large debt to follow others’ advice.

Admittedly, the former way holds a lot of water; I still cling to the belief that as a college student, life learning is supposed to be more impressing through personal experience. To start with, you gain experience insightfully just by participating the matter. An early philosopher said once you begin to decide something meaning that you grow up. Further lending credence is that as you grow up, less and less people are surrounding you even your family members. More often when headache comes, you have to face it and then come up the right therapy just by your own experience. Even though its outcome will not be the one you expect, I strongly believe that even painful the experience we choose to have is helping us grow and builds our personality.

Taking into account of all these factors, each way has its advantage. it is sagacious to draw the conclusion that combination of the two ways is better than one. For the particularity of youngsters, in some extent, trying to contact with the society just by theirs elves is also necessary.
沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2006-10-8 21:32:00 | 只看该作者
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板凳
发表于 2006-10-8 21:37:00 | 只看该作者

我觉得作文的结构不是太好。

你看题目的最后1句话,which do you think is preferable? 那就是说,作文的第一句话最好是回答这个问题。作文的开头就一般以此开始,然后就写为什么要选择这个,一般列三个原因或者两个原因+一个让步,最后总结一下。

这样就是5段内容,条理清晰,逻辑明确。

可能受GMAT作文影响较多,个人意见,批判着看。


[此贴子已经被作者于2006-10-8 21:38:41编辑过]
地板
发表于 2006-10-8 21:42:00 | 只看该作者

不好意思,忙着处理今天刚考完的朋友们的帖子,而且我对写作不在行,不过觉得楼主写得还不错。

中立结构也是可以得的,最直接的好处就是容易字数也多(一般字数多的文章分数总低不了)。

但可能存在的负面问题是要考虑的论据也就多了,托福作文除了语言,很重要的就是看考生的论据能否有效支持论点,所以习惯用中立写法的话(一般也是写作基础不错的人),就要在选择论据时注意一下,因为如果论据不能很好地支持观点,还不如用一边倒的办法,向楼上所说的,说上三个理由再找论据支持就行。


[此贴子已经被作者于2006-10-8 21:47:45编辑过]
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-10-10 18:07:00 | 只看该作者
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