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题目：学生是不是应该把参加课外组织和学习放在同等重要的位置？  

With the development of the society,people need various ability in order to play a function effectively,so it is important for them to cultivate this ability when  they are in university. As we all know, university is somewhere that students are learn knowledge and also take part in different clubs in order to improve their ability. Much disagreement exists among people as to whether students can attent various clubs beside study.Some people argue that it is good and efficient way to improve students’s ability and help hem to cultivate responsibility that is very essential for their future life.However,other maintain that students may waste a  lot of time and cannot focus their emphasis on study.Due to the fierce competition, students’s main role is to study well and pass the exams.As far as I am concerned, I think  students  should take the orgnizations and clubs after class, because these activity is the same important as the academic achievements.To begin with,students can practice themselves through all these clubs,which is crucial for their future development. We can notice that a student can improve his communication skills with others since he has an opportunity to talk with other students and spell out his own ideas.Also,students can also learn to handle problems on their own because there is always some happend we have never anticipate.Throug different situation we will meet, I believe students can be more mature as well as more adept at working with others and cooperating with members.Futhermore,it is also a good way to get along with others and make more friends if students can take part in some clubs.It is a wonderful experience for me to meet a lot of friends when I was in the Vulenteer Clubs in the university.During these 4 years,I not only broden my vision,but also make some of my best friends in my life.I am now really appreciate the time I spent in the Club.When we are in the Volunteer Club, we are all ready to help others and we find a lot in common.You can imagine that we can so happy to work together since we have the similar goals and perspective about  life.And friend who share the same hobbes are more likely to get along with and to become  true friends whole life.In addition, some people worry that students may spend less time on study if they attend these activity. And since most important role for them is to study and get an A, so it is not necessary for them t o take these activity now. But, we should notice that the good points outweigh the negative ones. Students may not have such a precious chance to improve their other ability other than academic skills.However, these skills such as dealing the relationships will paly a important role in people ‘s whole life and cannot be taught in class.In summary,due to all above mentioned reasons, we can safely  arrive at the conclusion that students should lay the outclass activity and the school work at the same important place and try to take them as much as we can.

crystalxin

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With the development of the society,people need various ability in order to play a function effectively,so it is important for them to cultivate this ability when  they are in university. As we all know, university is somewhere that students are learn knowledge and also take part in different clubs in order to improve their ability. Much disagreement exists among people as to whether students can attent various clubs beside study.Some people argue that it is good and efficient way to improve studentss ability and help hem to cultivate responsibility that is very essential for their future life.However,other maintain that students may waste a  lot of time and cannot focus their emphasis on study.Due to the fierce competition, students’ main role is to study well and pass the exams.As far as I am concerned, I think  students  should take the orgnizations and clubs after class, because these activity is the same important as the academic achievements.

To begin with,students can practice themselves through all these clubs,which is crucial for their future development. We can notice that a student can improve his communication skills with others since he has an opportunity to talk with other students and spell out his own ideas.Also,students can also learn to handle problems on their own because there is always some happend we have never anticipate.Throug different situation we will meet, I believe students can be more mature as well as more adept at working with others and cooperating with members.

Futhermore,it is also a good way to get along with others and make more friends if students can take part in some clubs.It is a wonderful experience for me to meet a lot of friends when I was in the Vulenteer Clubs in the university.During these 4 years,I not only broden my vision,but also make some of my best friends in my life.I am now really appreciate the time I spent in the Club.When we are in the Volunteer Club, we are all ready to help others and we find a lot in common.You can imagine that we can so happy to work together since we have the similar goals and perspective about  life.And friend who share the same hobbes are more likely to get along with and to become  true friends whole life.

In addition, some people worry that students may spend less time on study if they attend these activity. And since most important role for them is to study and get an A, so it is not necessary for them t o take these activity now. But, we should notice that the good points outweigh the negative ones. Students may not have such a precious chance to improve their other ability other than academic skills.However, these skills such as dealing the relationships will paly a important role in people ‘s whole life and cannot be taught in class. In summary,due to all above mentioned reasons, we can safely  arrive at the conclusion that students should lay the outclass activity and the school work at the same important place and try to take them as much as we can. （520）